Daddy's Firm
I just posted the first two parts of a new story, "Daddy's Firm", to SOL.net. I'll be adding a new part every Wednesday until the story is complete.
This story is something I've been working on for a while and it's sort of a new "genre" for me. I'll be really interested to hear your comments about it since it's basically a short story broken up into six or seven parts. Plus, the protagonist is a 10-year-old girl, an age I've usually shied away from given my own... history. Ugh.
I'll post the story to this site in the coming days. Until then, as always, you can find it available at storiesonline.net.
-shannon-
~nervous~
//update! "Daddy's Firm" parts one and two are now available on this site. You should still go over to SOL.net and give it all tens, though... I'm getting my butt kicked over there! Argh.
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posted by Shannon at 3:36 PM
3 Comments:
I'm really conflicted about Daddy's Firm... and having a really hard time trying to write out my thoughts coherantly.
From a purely fictional stand point, the story is entertaining and erotically written. The character interaction and development is exceptional, and I'm interested in reading what happens next.
The main issue for me, is that this story presents an moral dilemma for me. One part of my brain screams that its fiction, and the other half answers that horrible situation such as these happen in real life, to innocent children.
::same reaction I had to TTT Chapter 10::
In the end, I'll keep reading, and encourage Shannon to keep writing and finish "Daddy's Firm". That, and hopefully avoid the hater's who don't like the subject matter...
Howly
As far as fantasy material, ten is young for me. I like JB, but JB becoming mature, like maybe thirteen. Rachel is good--she has breasts--cute small ones. I wish Alice did too, but one a bit mature and the other not gives something for everyone.
I can put my reservations aside, however, and I do enjoy the tale. It's well written with the girls' childish emotions--enthusiasm, disappointment, insecurity--well expressed by Punky. I can also suspend my disbelief and imagine Alice just a little older, also with budding breasts and down, and see the pervy men lusting after both girls.
The description of Alice becoming aroused, wet, kissed, and fingered and then having an orgasm was arousing. That Rachel was dry was an effective realistic touch.
I don't know how the story will get where it's going to go, but I'm sure, sooner or later, two girls are going to get fucked.
Daddy's Firm gets good marks for emotional content and arousing detail, and this is good for a stroke story, but a real story needs complexity in the plot. I hope this will be forthcoming. For example, the men could become jealous of who might get the girls, and fight for rights to them. Then we'd have male emotional content too, and that could enhance the prize gotten by the victors.
Nice job Shannon. Go girl!
Honestly i liked it, it is fiction and we know from the previous stories there is nothing moral we have to worry about if we take it in that context alone, and they are for the entertainment and enjoyment of reading's purpose in my opinion. but again that is only my opinion and think what you want to think.
I think it is very erotic, risque and just plain titilating. I like the new genre you have expanded in Shannon, and think you are great for putting it out there and filling the world with good story even if its too taboo for most people to think about without twinging.
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