[Some of my responses have been slightly edited or revised. Names redacted for privacy.]
name: Yy
storyname: Perverts Club
email-subject: Fun for the girls
comments: Came across a couple of videos I thought you might like to include in the story development.
[Link 1]
[Link 2]
[Links are dead]
Hey Yy
Doncha really LOVE a girl who can incorporate things into her exercise routine that encourage her (and others) to make it fun. I'm not really sure how her exercise equipment contributes to her physical health, but it damn sure should be an incentive. And she seems to be benefitting dramatically from her routine, since that is one... um, 'athletic' healthy bod. I wonder if I told her that if she'd hold it against me?
I'd sure like to be the replacement for that young lady's exercise tool when she wears that one out! Thanks for the links.
name: Ralph
storyname: All
email-subject:
comments: Very creative and stimulating
Hey Rowlf,
Appreciate the comment. I understand you not wanting to be too wordy. I enjoy receiving any feedback, however short. At least it lets me know that there's someone awake out there and reading my stuff. And I write them to be, ahem, stimulating. Hopefully, that's the creative part. Again, thanks!
name: Koos
storyname: the twisted mind
email-subject: all
comments: i want to be a member , so i can read more of your work , i love it and i want more
Hi loos
I'm glad you like my filth.
All of my new stuff is posted on our member site. You can join and get your fill and balls drained by going to the White Productions story site and banging on the join links. Easy peasy. You'll be sent the information on becoming a member with full access to not only my Ole Stories but all of the stories from my fellow authors. Such a deal!
Thank you for your enthusiastic endorsement. I appreciate it. Hope to see you on our White Productions story site. Make sure you sign up for the private member chat there also, so you can msg me personally.
name: freddy
storyname: teen slut karen
email-subject: love the stories
comments: Dude,
your stories are great, I always end up shooting off a load long before I finish each one.
I work away from home for weeks at a time and you help keep my other head happy when I'm away from the wife.
Hey fredDude!
Thanks for your nice comments (and visual?) So I hope that my stories are that good and you're not just a short shooter.
That also gives you the opportunity to take a break and return to the story once your tubes are recharged.
Really hope wifey really enjoys you cumming home. But again, like they say, "If you're not with the one you love, then bang like crazy the one yer with." Er, sumpin like that. By the way, have you shared my stories with your lovely bride? She may enjoy Zoo Mom Lynn's interesting activities. Then you wouldn't have to just read about them.
Again, thanks for your feedback and I'll put that as another vote in the Teen Slut Column. By the way, that's what the stories are written for. Otherwise you could go read Analysis of Class Culture in Early Rome. Or sumpin.
name: pleasurecpl
storyname: Summertime at Grandpa Dick's
email-subject: last 2 chapters
comments: We have been long awaiting you to post the last 2 parts that you have completed. Are you sending them to those who request them? Would you like to find us on "[redacted]"?
Hey cpl
I'm happy that you have enjoyed Grampa and Karen's antics in Summertime. Yes, I have chapter 8B and now chapter 9 finished, so I will probably be posting one of them shortly, since 8B has been posted on my Ole Stories page for a while. Anything new is posted there. Chapter 9 will be posted there first.
It could get a bit, um, choatic if I were to try to send my filth to those who wanted "previews". Yes, I have done some of that in the past if they were requested nicely and an email address was included (Obviously or how could I know where to send them.
) Usually to those who are interested in helping with either ideas or proofing to help me out.
I don't know what [redacted] is, so I'm not sure I'd want to go there. Is there a reason? Something that would be titillating enough to give me ideas for more stories?
Thanks for mashing on that Contact button and letting me know you like the stories and want the Summertime chapters posted. I'll add your vote for it.
name:
storyname: Teen Slut Karen
email-subject:
comments: I really enjoyed the chapters you have posted so far, I hope you'll make more! It would be nice to see Karen continuing to drag her friends down to her own depraved depths.
I also like that the Karen stories exist within the same universe as some of your other stories. I really appreciate that kind of world building, there isn't too much of it on this site, at least not with your quality of writing.
Cheers!
Hey there noname,
I'm happy that you've enjoyed my lovely Teen Slut. I had fun writing them and I hope to expand more of her lovely bod getting used and abused, and introducing her friends to her more, uh, exotic sexual tastes. But alas, I finished most of the early Teen Slut stories some time ago and have only added the new series where she corrupts, ahem, 'babysits' for Annie's five year old sister. Then takes the parents on a fun S&M joyride. Karen is a switch, so she can be an abject sub, but change to the hot, sexy domme role. So much fun!
It seems that I can't really write anything short. So what I get are numerous series of related stories. I find that if I do that, I don't have to spend an inordinate amount of time or words to get the reader up to speed with the various characters and their world. That's why most of my stuff, while it can be standalone, is related and sorta serial. You could call it lazy, but I just enjoy my character and storyline development that works well in a series. Well, and maybe with offshoots. Maybe that was from watching the Flash Gordon and other serials as a kid. Who noze?
Thanks again for your comment and vote for more Karen. I guess I'm gonna have to post chapter 4 here soon. I just did a quick proof today (contrary to what some think) and I think it's ready to go. So look for it soon. Maybe mid month update.
name: Sovet
storyname:
email-subject: Critter Swallowing
comments: I actually am fairly interested in the critter swallowing aspect of some of your stories. I've done a few similar stories myself, though I am still quite an amateur.
Hey So,
I've never gotten interested in the vole thing. Saw some fun vids of some girls swallowing live pinks and goldfish. And some other things. Interesting. Which is why I incorporated some of that into my stories, Zoo Mom in particular.
As far a being an amateur, that doesn't mean your writing isn't good, just as being a professional doesn't make it good. The only real difference is one gets paid. "Professional Journalists" nowadays really put a lie to any thought that being paid makes it better. At this point, from what I see it is an inverse proportion.
Thanks for your comments tho'. Hope you enjoy any critter swallowing in my story series.
name: mrdave
storyname: Karen
email-subject: More Ksren
comments: More Karen please.
Hi mr,
OK, another vote in the Teen Slut Karen column. A few more and I'll really have to post the next episode. See what happens when ya bang on that Contact button. You don't even have to be as long winded, verbose, literate and, uh, eloquent as mrdave, either.
And if mrdave had included an email, I'd have been able to respond to his comment directly.
name: jo[redacted]
storyname: Teen Slut Karen
email-subject: Teen Slut Karen
comments: Hey Ole,
I saw in your What's New section that you had been considering uploading a continuation of Teen Slut Karen, but refrained because there didn't seem to be much interest in it. But I would love to see more of the story, I've been waiting for more Karen for ages! Especially considering the next chapter appears to focus on Karen babysitting a young girl. I can only imagine how Karen would corrupt her!
Cheers, and thanks for all the great work so far.
j
Hey Jo,
Wow! Somebody actually reads my demented babblings on the What's New page? Who knew?!
Yeah, I've written the new Teen Slut Karen chapter where she is asked to babysit Annie's (Sissy's BFF) little sis while parents go out for some hot sex with friends.
I actually enjoyed writing that chapter, so I ended up writing a follow up chapter to it. I've got that about half way done and I've started another chapter, but haven't got much done on them lately. The first chapter, where Karen babysits, will first be posted on my Ole Stories section at the White Productions site for our members.
I've still got chapter 4 of the original Teen Slut Karen to post here, which I promised to do if I got any indication that it was wanted. So far, few have banged the Contact button to let me know anyone cares. I've added you to the 'vote for' column, which is very, uh, short right now.
And yep, I am quite sure that you can imagine some of the things our lovely but perverted Teen Slut does with her young charge. But probably not all. And since mom and dad are out looking for a hot swinging BDSM evening, warped Karen makes sure they have a good time when they get home. Don't want to give a lot away, as I'm still writing a lot of it, but it does get, ah, quite hot, if I do say so myself. (And I do!)
I see that you have had a membership to the White Productions site but that has expired. All of the original Teen Slut Karen episodes are posted there, covering the time when she was fourteen and sharing her two girlfriends with mom and dad.
If you renew, you can read all of them there plus the new chapters when they're posted shortly.
I appreciate your comments and happy that you like the Teen Slut Karen series. If more readers let me know that they want some more posted, I will do that. So mash that Contact button with your rodent and bang out a few words of encouragement, people!
name: Clive
storyname: Zoo mom
email-subject:
comments: I absolutely love this series of stories the longer it goes on the better it seems to get .
Thanks See Live,
I've enjoyed writing the Zoo Mom series, at least when I have had the writing urge. Lately I've been able to get several more episodes completed about the house next door and some more adventures of our bawdy familiy and friends.
As long as you readers use the Contact button above and let me know that there are people out there in readerland who want more, I'll keep posting some of them here. It's the only way I know that anyone is reading and cares.
Would be nice if you included your email address so I could personally respond to you. I DO try to reply to all who include an email.
name: Slushi
storyname: Zoomom
email-subject:
comments: Hey love your stuff again, I know I know I am reporting again, lol. Anyway want to say I love all your stuff. Can't wait to see where your stories go and sort of hoping sissy ends up doing some pet play and getting the full puppy treatment lol.
But your work has kept me going in a HARD TIME. If I thought my Grammar was good enough I would release my stuff for you but I don't think I can compare to your work.
Hi Slushed,
First, thanks for your comments. I really DO appreciate them. They let me know there's somebody out there in readerland who's stumbled upon my little hole on the interwebs.
To tell you the truth, I also can't wait to see where they go, as I just pound out what spews out of my cesspool and hope I get enough to follow what's going on. But sometimes I'm as surprised as anyone to see what happens. I don't plan out and outline the stories, I just transcribe what's going on. But it's always fun.
I always encourage anyone to write if they have the urge or desire. There are many story sites in addition to asstr where new erotic stories can be published. So go ahead and bang on that keyboard and see what comes out. We could always use another Phil Phantom.
Again, thanks for taking the time and making the effort to send me your thoughts. It used to be, before asstr had some problems, that authors would get a weekly email giving the number of reads/hits of the various stories. That hasn't happened for several years, so the only way we know anyone is out there reading is if you bang on that Contact button to let us know.
That's what gives us authors the incentive to write and add more stories. So,
name: roses
storyname: Summertime at Grandpa Dick's
email-subject: Constructive criticism
comments: Just finished 8A of Grandpa Dick's (note the apostrophe!). Looking forward to more.
Good story so far, but...there are too many spelling/grammar/punctuation errors, all of which diminish the reading pleasure of your target audience.
A few pointers:
1) You don't seem to use a spell checker
2) You don't appear to have or refer to a medium to large English dictionary and/or thesaurus
3) You don't seem to use the services of an educated, literate and articulate editor/proofreader. It's almost as if you type everything into your computer, and then upload it immediately without even re-reading it back to yourself a few times. Am I right?
Hope you accept my comments in the same positive way in which they are intended.
Regards,
Hey flower,
Thanks very much for your critique. Always like to get feedback, thoughts and yes, criticism, from readers. And I take such seriously.
Regarding my use (or lack of) the apostrophe, I guess you didn't get the play on words (or punctuation) there. I guess if I have to 'splain it, I'm not doin' it right.
Your point 1) I just ran the page through my spel chkr and it really doesn't flag anything other than spellungs in dialogs, mostly. And those are, usually, done on purpose. Have you ever listened closely to how you or others actually speak or pronounce things in conversation? I think this one may fall under 'literary license', although I'd have to get my license out and check the fine print on the back, I guess.
Your point 2) I actually do, but since you provided no examples to that which you are referring, I'm at a loss to know where those scholarly tomes might have been utilized in the story.
Your point 3) I actually DO have a very educated, literate and articulate editor/proofreader: ME! I just haven't found anyone who could do better. And believe me, with 100's of thousands of readers of my filth, I'm sure someone would have notified me of my shortcomings and offered assistance. Or even pointed out specific instances of where my prose was lacking. Alas, none have come forward. Including yourself, since you didn't provide any details on what you thought were problems or specific illustrations of my work of which an editor would have objected or altered. I'm very happy to take criticisms of my work if they provide constructive examples that demonstrate the error of my ways.
I can tell you that I touch type and can often make some misteaks, trying to get the storyline banged out on the keyboard before I lose it all. But I DO go over it again to try to catch the most obvious problems. Then I will do a re-read, then edit, then re-read, edit, re-read, literally ad nauseum. I actually get sick of reading my stories by the time they are, hopefully, ready to publish. And also, typically, I will have some others preview what I've written, so there will be some "new eyes" going over it, picking out the misteaks and prollems that I missed.
Over the last 10 years of publishing my krap, I've received a number of submissions from others who would like to have their stories published. Usually, I don't publish other authors' works, as my site was for my stories. But the majority of what I've received would drive an educated, literate and articulate editor/proofreader to screaming fits. Sorry, but most people who think they're writers, aren't.
I'd be very pleased and privileged if you could provide links to some of the stories you have written, so I can avail myself of more superior quality writing. I'm sure you have had multitudinous works published. Just one or two links to your very best stuff would be appreciated. And I would, of course, share them with my other readers so they may evaluate and compare the quality of my writing.
Again, I must thank you for your thoughts and comments. I'll have to try to do better in the future. I'm sure you will let me know how my arduous efforts to improve have fared.
BTW, if you had included an email addres to which I could respond personally, I would have done so. But I understand if you wish to remain anonymous.
name: Kinco[redacted]
storyname: Zoo mom
email-subject: Update
comments: Hope you load all chapters when you are able to.
Hey again, K,
As I responded to one of your comments before, I put any of my new stuff on the Ole stories page on our White Productions story site. After they have been published there for a while, I may post them here. Some of my new stuff, like the Porn Families series will be published there exclusively for our members reading.
I DO appreciate the comments and feedback though. That does let me know that there is someone out there in readerland who's still alive after all this Kungflu krap going around. Well, anytime, akshully. And that gets me to post more material here.
name: H[redacted]
storyname:
email-subject: I am you big fan
comments: I am a big fan of the character Karen. I am a lot like her.
Hey H[redacted],
Thank you for your nice comment. I'm glad you enjoy the story, although you didn't include the name of the story you're referring to. I DO hope you like all my stories though.
I have two series that have a Karen as a character, Summertime at Grandpa Dicks and Zoo Mom - Teen Slut Karen. It would be interesting to me to know exactly which one you identify with and how you are like her.
Either way, I definitely am happy to provide you with some reading that you enjoy and identify with. There definitely will be more to come on at least one of my Karen's in the future. Maybe both.
name: CEotTK
storyname: Zoo Mom
email-subject: More Zoo
comments: It is very hot watching the sexploration of how depraved and perverted this family can be, but I've noticed that Rob doesn't partake in the zoo fun as much as the rest of the family. Lynn has realised that woman's best friend is an obedient dog, but Robb has yet to learn that man's best friend is a bitch in heat or that no-one can swallow cock like a snake. I have this image in my head of the two of them sat on the edge of the couch, side by side, legs spread, fucking their dogs. Incest is a game the whole family can enjoy, and pets are part of the family!
Hey, CE
Glad you like my lovely, perverted Zoo Mom family. I've enjoyed having them living in my head, rent free.
I try to base most of my stuff on what I know is in RL, and I've watched vids of guys doing a bitch or a snake or ... But I also write what pretty much yanks my chain. Although I'm always open to new ideas and perversions.
One of the reasons why I started writing my own stories was because, after years of reading asstr and other story sites, I just couldn't find much of anything that *I* really liked. So I adapted a story that I had done some years before and it turned into Summertime at Grandpa Dicks. I know there are numerous other prurient and deviate subjects I could write about or have my characters do, but no matter what, it still comes down to what *I* like. So that's what I write.
I think that, typically, porn is made for males in general. And males generally are hetero and want to watch, see or read about females. Probably females doing quite nasty, dirty, noxious, salacious things as possible. Men are sort of incidental to that. Thus, my focus on what the females do and have done to them in my stories and not so much what the males do.
That being said, since some have brought up the subject of bi males, I've got some episodes written of Zoo Mom where Bobby is featured more and does more than just fuck the girls, his mom and teacher. Can't give away too much as the chapters come in the future and will be published on my Ole stories page at the White Productions story site. Those chapters are a little further along the story's timeliine.
I see you've had a subscription to the member site, so you've seen what is there, although it's been a coupe years. Since then, we've been posting The Gang story by a UK author weekly, plus Amy Mac's Geoff Sterling series, Neel Down's Nude Like Me and Across The Street and One House Down series, in addition to my Zoo Mom epic and the new Porn Families series. So there's a lot that's been added since you've been there. And a lot more to cum.
Again, thanks for letting me know what you think and for your ideas. I appreciate all comments and thoughts about my stories and I reply to all who include an email address.
name:
storyname: 23A Zoo Mom
email-subject: Thanks
comments: Thanks for 23A. I fat fingered 'B' last time. If it had been intentional I probably would have put 23E out there just to see if you would put up all the chapters at once, and been denied even worse than I was (grin).
I appreciate all the time you put into these. And the little sayings make a grin show up more often than not.
Keep up the good work and I'm waiting for 23E^HB when you have the time.
Hey (blank),
See what happens when ya bang on that there Contact button? And I know well the problem of fat fingering on the keyboard. The two most used keys on mine are the backspace and the delete keys.
One of our members has been helping me work on Summertime at Grandpa Dicks chapter 9, and he quickly found out just how much time and effort goes into the writing. I had it halfway finished and he just worked on the 2nd half, which really helped me a lot and between the two of us got it finished. We went back and forth with it for a while roughing out the ideas and story, then reworking and ervising until it worked out pretty well. Then there came the reading, re-reading and proofing, then a little more editing, then re-reading amd more proofing. Like ol' Nat said, "Easy reading is damn hard writing." But somebody else described what we did with the saying, "with a little help from my friends." [No illlegal substances were used in the writing of it.
Guess I'll hafta beat Zoo Mom chapter 23B into submission and posting form pretty soon. That one gets interesting, with some heavy BDSM from Germany just for Lynn and Rob. What fun. Hope you'll enjoy it when it comes up.
Thanks again for the comment and encouragement.