SUMMARY: Jennifer's parents don't have enough money for her to continue living in a dormitory, while she attends college. Karen, Jennifer's roommate, comes up with a scheme which, hopefully, will earn them enough money so that they can continue living together.

COMMENTARY: This is a fun story; very playful. I like the manner in which the author sets it up and then carries through on it. It is very nicely paced. It isn't overloaded with sex. It would have been nice if the author had taken a little more time to flesh out the characters. The characteristics that distinguish them seem to have little to do with their personalities and more to do with their physical attributes or financial positions. In other words, the plot and pacing impressed me, the characters did not.

Getting away from the plot and characters, there are some spots where a few more details would have helped. I like it when an author gives me enough to visualize the scene, but not so much that I feel like every last detail has been written in to it. More often than not, when I perceive a problem with the quantity of details, the author falls into the latter category. In this case there is actually a detectable dearth of description. This meant I had to make some more imaginative leaps than I prefer to, and although this was not an insurmountable task, it bothered me enough that I decided to mention it.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.5 (out of 10)

• Arousal: 3/5
• Editing: 5/5
• Plot and Characters: 4/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Good

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