SUMMARY: 55-year-old Alan helps 22-year-old Linda reduce her purity score.

COMMENTARY: Well, the sex in this story is over the top. It really got me going, even before it actually began. The foreshadowing was titillating, to say the least. Unfortunately, the story is taken up, for the most part, by a single sexual encounter. So while on the one hand, this sexual encounter was enough to steam up my glasses, on the other, the plot left something to be desired.

Actually the way the story begins led me to believe that there would be more to it than just sex. In a way, there is; after all, the author does take the time to set the stage. There is a buildup. I was drawn in enough by the setup and the hints of what was to come (i.e. the sex) that I was a little more forgiving, for a while. If the story had been shorter then maybe I could have been a little more generous and given this story an even higher score, but considering its length, I think that there needs to be more to the plot to justify stretching out the narrative to its current length.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 8.0 (out of 10)

• Arousal: 4/5
• Editing: 5/5
• Plot and Characters: 3/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good

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