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Title |
The Shed (Chapters 1 & 2) |
Author |
Big T |
Story Code(s) |
Voy, F-solo, M-solo |
Length |
4,500 words |
Rating |
Good |
Summary |
A twelve-year-old boy spies on an older girl. |
Commentary |
This story is jagged around the edges, but it shows
potential. The author does an excellent job of writing a
story from a twelve-year- old boy's point of view. He
captures the boy's apprehension and his excitement. The story could stand to be edited. There are quite a few sentences and paragraphs that I feel could be broken up into shorter ones. There are a few misspelled words. These are only the first two chapters of a longer work. |
ASSM Link(s) |
Part 1 (of 1) |