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Title

A Little Secret

Author

Bartek Boryczko

Story Code(s)

M/F, Teen, Inc

Length

4,200 words

Rating

Good

Summary

Josh and his new step-sister, Becky, get to know each other a little better.

Commentary

I like the tone of this story. The narration, by Josh, is both descriptive and real. He is taken in by his step-sister's beauty, but at the same time is apprehensive about doing anything with her. Becky is not as complete a character as Josh, but she is more than just a body.

What plot there was, was very simple.

This story could have benefited greatly from some editing. Several of the paragraphs were much too long and should have been broken down into two or more paragraphs.

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A Little Secret