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Story Codes: N/A Updated: September 29, 2021
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Brilliant story, excellent attention to detail, will there be more?
Yes, there is more, plenty more! My Princess is the first Prologue story the entire "The Evil That Men Do" saga. At the end of each story is a link to the next installment. All stories are also listed on my home page.
I have a hard time probably first with the title. The gentleness of her rapist was more to me, conducive to a father who was going to deflower his daughter. The feelings she displayed even while resisting, only reflected a female's normal response to sexual manipulation. My wife shared her actions when she was raped at age nine. She relayed the fact that her rapists were gentile though insistent that they were going to get what they wanted. She said her body responded as if she was having a great time and enjoyed every minute of the rape. Even though she didn't want the sex to start with. She then told me she did start having sex with older men after that quite frequently. Her words, not mine. I would like to see the next installment when it comes out.
Right here, my man: Tilly's Promise
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awesome story, look forward too many more chapters
Very good read! I wish there were pics of Jennifer. I'm going to be reading everything I can by this author!!
Well, you are more than welcome. I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far.
As for Jennifer, I met her many years ago; she was as described, beautiful and very intelligent. I immediately fell in lust with her. Sadly, I have no pictures or other remembrances. I would venture, that if you were to conjure up a Keira Knightley sort of look you wouldn't be too far off.
Cheers
UM
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I have read through part 3. Beautiful story! Trying to picture Jennifer. Is there a model that you have used for a muse? If so, which one? Thank you for this story.
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Great story! I loved all six parts. I have enjoyed all your stories, but have not written a comment before. I was a bit surprised when Mickey was brought into the story but loved the way he worked things out in the end.
Thank you
Thanks for taking time to drop a line. I am happy you liked the story of Jennifer as well as the others. I was kind of stuck on how to tie it all up and it seemed that Micky was the best solution.
The inspiration for Jennifer had been the source of more than a few fantasies, so WTF, right?
I liked how it wrapped up.
I have several stories in works at the moment, watch this space!
Thanks again for the kind words.
UM
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Delicious
Amen!
This story is fucking fantastic, like Tom Clancy for pedos!!!
Nice HEA at the end.
lovely....cum twice
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Awesome story. Loved reading it. Keep them coming. Please add me to any mailing list.
Thanks for taking the time to drop a line. It's appreciated. Shae is one of my favorites and one of the most commented on. I'm glad you liked the tale. If you go to: https://www.asstr.org/~Micky_Dolan/index.html you can find everything I've posted so far.
It usually takes me two or three months to have a story ready for posting and I keep a few in the works at any one time. Maybe I will put together an email list, interesting idea.
Again, thanks for taking the time to comment, it's appreciated!
Cheers
UM
I really envy how you can tell a story,and make your readers feel like they are a part of it. Thank-you. I want to read every story that you have posted here. With all the plague restrictions in effective in Canada, I have to spend most of my time cooped up alone in my apartment. TV really during the daylight hours. So I read a lot. Your stories are a big help.
Good to hear from you again. Thanks for the kind remarks. A little boost here and there certainly helps.
This plague has certainly messed with all of us. I'm thankful my workplace was able to arrange for the Dept of Health to come to the workplace and provided vaccines. After a year of being nervous about everything, it provides a bit of a break.
I was worried that all was lost with the most recent asstr outage, but thankfully it's back. I've been enjoying surfing through some of Candy's work and following some of the serials updated from time-to-time.
I'm close to finishing two stories but it will be a while before they're ready to post.
A while back, Renpet advised me to simply write for myself and those that wished to come along for the ride would be there. While that was good advice, which I have followed, I also listen to what readers have to say and where appropriate, make some changes. Mostly, I'm happy with my characters, their presentation and the worlds I create for them.
Well, hang in there. We'll get out of this sooner than later.
UM
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Excellent story.
Thank you!
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Switching the narration to point of view was interesting and surprised me. Your kink and mine match. Your writing reminded me of P. J. Farmer.
To be quite honest, I hadn't heard of P.J. Farmer before. I looked him up and will order some books. Thank you for the nice comment and if we're kink sympatico, cool indeed!
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congrats, awesome story and I hope you write many more
So happy you liked it. As usual I have more than a few in the works.
Thanks!
UM
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Great story especially the part where the parents worked at AMC. I actually did work there in Kenosha.
What once was there is now gone. Sad. I've never been to Kenosha but I did own a new Renault Encore for a while! Happy you enjoyed the tale. Stay Safe!
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A fun read, kind'a sexy and cool. Thanx, bro! You've a very clear and distinctive voice that comes through in your story telling, and to me, that's way cool. So said because your story then becomes more than just a telling - it becomes a partnering.
Mr. H........
A greatly appreciated compliment. Thank you Mr. H........!
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How do you open the story and don't just say click on story.
I added a simple explanation on the home page. I hope that helps.
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Great story. Very inclusive for the reader.
Thanks lovely to read.
Beejay
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I haven't been to Asstr for a few years. The Kitty and the Mouse was the first that I picked to read. I just wanted to say that this is an amazing story. I am a very visual reader so when I read, I feel like I am there watching. I never really got a handle for what Mouse looked like but I always saw what Kitty looked like. I pictured her as a distant cousin that I kept in my minds eye watching her grow as Kitty did in the story. Slim, blonde, shapely and simply beautiful when she first caught my eye when she was 10, just a few years younger than me. Thanks for this and I am headed off to see what else you have written.
Welcome back to ASSTR. Thank you for your kind comments. I know exactly what you mean about constant visualization. The writing process is very similar in that nature. Both these girls were based on two very popular non-nude child web models from 2000s. I was wondering if anyone would reads these stories might have also fancied those websites. In your case, keep the visualization of Kitty that you have. I think it makes the story better for you.
Of course I embellish here and there but what writer doesn't?
I hope you can find a few offerings that you enjoy. I think I pretty much have a nice range of stories.
Good luck and, Stay Safe!
UM
This is a great story, very well written and I was sorry to see it end. The ending left me wondering if there is an equally well written, well themed story about Jennifer.
Thanks for dropping a line. I'm happy you enjoyed the story.
The Jennifer story is currently in the works. When I got to the end of Amaya, I had a moment of inspiration and added the Jennifer comment before I had a plan of action for her. I think it's coming along nicely. Time will tell. It takes me a bit of time to get a story ready to post but it will get out there in due time.
Thanks
UM
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A truly amazing story. Love from beginning to end, yet sexy and arousing.
Thanks for sharing.
You Sir, are wlcome!
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What a delightful and beautiful story! Very well written. The ending and most of the final chapter were a big surprise for me. I anticipated the he would either marry Amaya or Miss Judy or even make a life with both. I was a bit sad for him but the door is still open for him to help out Jennifer. I look forward to reading more of your great works.
J
J,
Thanks for taking the time to drop a comment. It is gratifying to hear when folks like a story. I enjoyed writing it and at times it just flowed. I think it ended the way it should, not too fairy tale or outlandish. Jennifer, I don't know where that story will end yet, I know the basic premise and it will feature Pat who works for Ed.
While I like all my stories, and would recommend any of them, I think you may appreciate "Best Fucking Year," "Luscious Liz," or "The Kitty and the Mouse."
Thanks again and stay safe!
UM
J did read Luscious Liz, his comment is below.
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What a fantastic STORY! I loved it. Just the type of writing that I enjoy- a love story, not a stroke story. Thank you very much for it.
I am glad you enjoyed the story. I try to provide a bit of balance in some of my stories. Apparently, I found that balance for you with Amaya. I can't imagine the story developing any other way.
Thanks for taking the time to send a comment.
Stay Safe!
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Just finished reading all four parts of Amaya. An interesting story and well written. Thank you very much.
You Sir, are wlcome!
This is a fine story along the line of a mother offering or arranging the sacrificing of her daughter's virtue. The daughter's virtue and virginity in trade for a better life arrangement. Plus the daughter is very eager for it too! She's underage and in middle school and supposed to be an "innocent" little girl beginning to blossom into a new body of an adult with newly raging hormones and trying to figure out how to deal with its being so horny most of the time. Now, with her mom's approval, she'll be able to experience what adult sex is like via an adult patron.
Excellent!!
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Great story. Can't wait to read part 2. Have a good idea where it is going. He is a lucky man to be put in charge of this girl.
Thanks for the positive comment! I think it is a nice little tale (tail?)
Curious, what did you think after finishing the story?
Thank you again for taking the time to drop a comment. Much appreciated.
UM
Another great story. This one ended as I thought it would/should. I knew a girl like Liz way way back in high school. She was a walking wet dream that never seemed to go out on dates. I was a senior and she was 2 grades below. I started talking to her in the cafe when we had free time. She and I became good friends and she confided that she was very lonely as not many boys would talk to her and she thought that she was ugly. I had a girlfriend at the time so couldn't ask her out, but did tell her that she was so gorgeous that she scared the crap out of every normal guy. They were so afraid to try to talk to her and get shot down. She was shocked and didn't believe me. Before I graduated, I got her hooked up with a very nice but a bit shy friend of mine. They didn't last more than a year, but it was a great year for both.
I am a romantic at heart and your stories make me feel good.
Thank you
J
You Sir, are wlcome!
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Thank you, well written and believable. Above all though a happy tale in an era of too few happy tales.
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Here I am again. Another fantastic story such a typical high school sort of story. Some of it reminded me of my high school days long long ago! Pleasant memories. Thank-you for your gift to your readers.
Same guy from below, Bill
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I'll put this here.
The Title Listed was "Hidden Harbor - The Hike"
However, we have a duplication of "Luscious Liz" (A great piece, BTW}
Are you able to find the file for "HH - TH" and kindly forward me it by email?
A bit of a glitch in using the interwebs! Got it fixed in a few hours and everything is linked. At least until I hear from someone else!
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Very Nice! Tasteful and well written, as well.
Thank you very much!
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Very nice story. Thank you for sharing.
You sir, are welcome!
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I am a romantic at heart and this is my cup of tea. I have been in Chucks in that the most desirable girls never felt about me like I did them. It seems like every ten years I fell in love with the wrong girl. Today it does not matter, I am fine being single.
But never give up man! Seriously
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nice story thanks. keep writing.
I have every intention of continuing. It takes time, but I keep moving along!
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Beautiful love story of à mùtual love fascination coming true to a happy ending.
ANY CHANCE OF A SEQUEL?
Thank you for the kind words. Once I started, the story just seemed to flow. I've considered a sequel but can't come up with a meaningful story. So who knows?
Thank you again for the nice comment.
Cheers!
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I liked all the girls in the story! Each one deserves there own story. Especially Laurie, I would love to hear about how she descended and her early abuses. Sorry, just a bit of a kink. Keep writing, keep the stories cumming!
I am fond of the girls too. I think that maybe each one was done justice enough. Laurie is intriguing, but I think we'll leave her where we ended.
Thanks for the comment and although it isn't rapid-fire, I'm working on some right now.
Cheers!
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I read all 5 chapters. The first 3 last night and the final 2 when I woke up this morning.i am single and retired, so reading is my favorite way to pass time. Especially a fantastic story like you wrote. It seemed so real to me. Your characters are so life like. I can't tell you how much I enjoyed your story. Thank-you.
This from Bill, who commented on Liz above.
First, thank you for taking the time to send a comment, much less two!
It is heartening to heard from readers every now and then.
Liz was a fun write, it just seemed to flow with great ease. The Kitty and the Mouse took some time and it ended up longer than I expected; but stories take on their own lives once they start.
I am very happy that my work had provided entertainment and maybe a little joy. It takes me some time to get one of these tales put together and hopefully properly presented.
I'm almost done with my next story and when I am, I'll set it aside for a few weeks and then read it fresh for the first full edit. Then it'll get two more edits at least before I might feel right about posting it. I have a few others in various stages of completion and hopefully those will be out before too long.
Comments from readers make a big difference in putting in the time.
Maybe things will move quicker when I hopefully retire in a few years.
Enjoy your time and stay safe!
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I wish to comment on the entire story, from beginning to end. I loved it! Very masterfully written. Keep writing them like this. Very tender and touching telling of their memories.
Sincerely,
Chris
Thank you very much.
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Very nice narrative. Well written with a nice flow. While the story is about Paul's, Mouse's and Kitty's sexual life together, the detail never comes as hot and lurid like other writings. It was a story I had to read to the end.
Thanks for taking time to comment. This was a story that seemed to mostly write itself. Your comment about the "hot and lurid" aspects; was I too weak in that department or adequate? I'm assuming it was OK considering the overall positive nature of your comment. One needs to be careful about assuming though.
Again, thanks for taking time to comment, glad you liked the story!
Stay Safe!
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Too confusing. Whose who doesn't seem to make sense. I think a rewrite with proper naming would help A LOT!
I gave it reread and think I may have needed to provide greater deliniation between the girls and Paul's "flashback" story. I've added a proper division and alert as to the change in storyline. Hope that helps! Otherwise, Kathlene is The Kitty and Nora is The Mouse.
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Well done I love reading about young girls they are so hot
I don't think I would be too far off to say that most of us wholeheartedly agree with you!
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Really liked the story. I'm sorry it wasn't longer. Great job.
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Great story until the end. When the parents went on a their trip I thought "I hope they don´t die". When they made it back safely I was like "yeah. maybe some writer can come up with a better scenario to put the girls with uncle Paul than death. But no, same ole same ole. Jeez Louise
Why not just have the parents take a job overseas and the girls stay for a couple of years with him. Something! Just not death. As good of a writer as you, and a lot of others are, SURELY you could think of better endings. I didn´t even finish the story after the tornado. That is how annoying these deadly endings are. Oh well, it´s your story. But I bet a lot of other readers feel like I do and are tired of these predictable, easy, and redundant ways to end stories.
The first four chapters were great!
Interesting … first off, thank you for your comments, they are appreciated.
Regarding the story-line, I don't believe I was trying to find an easy way out, it just flowed at the time. I was kind of interested in seeing if I could put the whole tornado scene together. I hope you came back and finished the story, I thought it ended reasonably well.
Back to the main point, the parents were not the type to leave their children; they would not have gone if it meant leaving them behind for such a long time. I could have had them thrown in jail I guess; but, I don't know …
It is a challenge setting the scene for what many of us write.
I'll give it some thought.
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Great story. It even made me cry.
Now that is the type of comment we would all like to get!
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Very nice story. I read it over several days The epilogue caught me off base as I didn't and still don't understand why artificial insemination. Trying to recall, was this the story about the sperm with 'bent tails' or was that a different tale, different author. If Paul was sterile, why was it necessary for Nora to have the 'patch' and do we have an anonymous donor fathering baby Jeff?? Oh well, I really liked the story, very well written. Thanks
Thanks for the nice comment. I'm glad you liked it. I figured I would have read a chapter a day.
Regarding Jeff, he was not necessarily sterile, his sperm was incapable of impregnating an egg. Yes, this was part of the story.
Mouse's birth control, her mother put her on birth control as a matter of fact when she came of age, not to keep her from getting knocked up by her Uncle, which was impossible anyway. The mother (Carole) had to get an abortion at 14 and wanted to ensure her daughter(s) wouldn't have to go through the same thing.
Kitty's pregnancy, Jeff was the donor and IV was the process.
I hope this helps tie it together.
Again, glad you enjoyed it!
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first two chapters are wonderful!!!!
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Uncle Micky,
Fantastic story. You kept me interested in wanting to read the next chapter after I had finished the last chapter.
Lots of writers aren't able to do that. Only a very few can.
I was able to see the girls when I was reading the story. The only part I couldn't see clearly was what their faces looked like but from the words of everybody. They were some beautiful girls.
Keep up the great work.
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I’ve been having a hard on for the entire series! Great detailed, well written story!
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Excellent!
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Brothers and sister don't refer to one another as "big bro" and "sis" :)
Hmmm, this got me to thinking. I ran a "Find" on the story and found three uses of "sis" and one use of "big bro" each one in the context of the role play. So, I'm good with it. BTW, I have heard more than a few folks use either term in real life. Anyway, this one made me smile.
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Hot very hot. That was a very good read. Great detail and story line. Looks like you paid attention in English classes.
Thanks for the nice comments! It takes me twice as long since I am my own proofreader! Thankfully some readers point out some errors and I'm able to take care of them.
Thanks again for taking the time to drop a line!
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Wonderful story, I’m familiar with the coffee commercial and after reading your story wish I could have enjoyed a time like that.
Thank you very much. It certainly would have been enjoyable!
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In "cradled my between her thighs" there seems to be a missing word after "my".
Nah, "my" should have been "me." Its corrected! Thanks
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I would love to find Dena and Kim under my Christmas tree. I would make them go full throttle lesbo on each other and shoot my load on them when they are cumming.
Not a bad thought at all!
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Dolan,
This truly reads like an autobiographry, a very unusual one, but still...
Thanks for that. From reading so many ASSTR stories I believe there's many, many guys who share this kind of fantasy.
Thanks again and looking for more.
KR
K,
Thanks for taking the time to send a comment.
Nah, not autobiography but my intent was to have it read like one, so I guess I did OK with it! I had one fellow insist that it all must have really happened just as I wrote it. I needed Mike and Dena in an incestuous relationship for the Dolan Diaries story-line.
I think I will have a young Dena story some time in the future.
Incest is indeed a bit of a popular thread on asstr; but, I think that has to do with both engaging a taboo and as well as creating a somewhat believable premise for making young partners available.
I'm glad you liked the story and hope you find the other offerings to your liking as well.
Cheers and Stay Safe!
UM
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Just wanted you to know how much I enjoyed your little story. I look forward to reading more of your writing. I loved the detail that you include. Keep up the good writing.
A new fan,
JG
J,
Thanks for taking the time to comment. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
I think the detail aspect has led some to believe it is not a fantasy but rather a true recording of an actual event!
Have a go at what is offered.
Cheers and Stay Safe!
UM
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Wow! Dena and Mike deserve all their special pleasure, though Mike is inexcusably nasty to Kim. She was generous in her loving of him, but his shoving his cock down her throat was mean and disgusting. I'm not sure I understood much about the two young girls in the neighborhood, but if Mike had sex with them that fits with the way he treated Kim.
All in all, a great story.
Thanks.
Thanks for taking the time to send a comment. Except for "Christmas with Dena," their stories are woven through the whole TETMD saga.
Mike and Kim, Mike is kind of a dick at heart and Kim finds some enjoyment in the treatment. In my mind, Kim is a user and at heart, very selfish. This is Kim's only real appearance and well, it is what it is. Sometimes characters need to be flawed.
I'm glad you liked the story. Your questions and comments are very cool, they show me the story made you contemplate the characters and their actions. Browse around and I'm sure you'll find more.
Cheers and Stay Safe!
UM
A Reply to my reply!
Thanks, Micky,
You do a good job of character development, though the very short story makes that a difficult job.
Dena is my ideal for whom to wish. I prefer smaller breasts and slim and toned bodies.
Of course, her sweet attitude and responsive body are the biggest turn-ons of all.
Thanks again for a satisfying read
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Hey, I liked this story! It's the first I've read from you and I was wondering if you can point me to some sort of chronological order for the stories? I started with the top one, but in the story there are some events mentioned, where Micky already had sex. Plus he does seem very experienced dealing with the 2 older girls. So I'm thinking that this might not be the right story to start?? I'm a litte confused.
So if maybe you could give me a hint where to start and continue I'd be grateful.
Greetings, Sarge
Sarge,
First, glad you liked the story! There is no real order to the first set of stories. Except that Christmas with Dena would be next.
If you scroll down the Home Page you'll see the "MIke Dolan: Dolan's Diaries" heading. That is the start of the real chronological tale/saga. Dena and the rest of the family will appear through those stories.
Micky's earlier experiences, which you refer to, are told in the flash back parts of Chapters 1 and 2 in "The Kitty and The Mouse" but from a different character's perspective.
At times a character will have some backstory that is alluded to but not always described. In Christmas with Dena she tells Mike about some of her experiences since their first encounter. I've often thought of delving into one or two of them but other stories seem to keep moving to the front of the line.
Anyway, I hope you continue to enjoy the fantasies that are presented!
Cheers!
UM
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- In "you're going to make cum pretty soon" should "me" appear before "cum"?
- In "She lied down" "lied" should be "lay".
Fixed. I do appreciate the pointers. I've mentioned previously that my "proofer/editor" has retired. If anyone (hint, hint) wants to assist me with editing etc, I would appreciate it.
In "some of the string in my arms" should "string" be "strength"?
OK! the use of "string" in this fashion does relate to "strength." It is a hidden reference I placed in the story to pay a little homage to "Dr. Strangelove ..." Group Commander Lionel Mandrake comments to Gen. Jack D. Ripper at one point that "The string has gone out of my legs." I've placed many of these little "Easter Eggs" throughout many of my stories. IMHO, "String" is used appropriately.
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Loads of fun
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Should have them both together until the end of time would have been awesome that way
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Awesome set of stories!!! I would love to see you write about them becoming one as husband and wife...
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I have read two of your story's Shea and Dena and have enjoy them. It sounds like that Shea and Dena really happen and there not Fantasy or not real?
I replied that, alas, they were indeed fiction! To which the following response came.
So I am to understand that your story's are fiction and you didn't fuck your sister and Kim when they were 14 years old?
Interesting! I took this as a compliment. BTW I have a few sisters. All are older than me and nothing has ever happened between any of us. As a matter of fact, I love each of them dearly and I have never felt any desire, of any kind, for any of them.
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Sweet and hot. Nicely done, sir. I was a little put off by how you had Mike speak to Kim at the end of their tryst, but that's the only nit I have to pick with this story. Thank you for this.
Micky is a bit of a dick!
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Great story! Beautifully written descriptions of erotic pleasure and joy.
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One of the best I have read.
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Sex with Dena happened too fast. BJ right away. Would have liked more slow build-up.
I kind of thought there was a pretty good build-up, oh well.
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THAT WAS FUCKEN AWSOME
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Hallo, finde ich gut. Aber die Übersetzung ins Deutsche ist schwierig. Gibts es die irgendwo?
Oder schreibt hier jemand in deutsch? Hätte Interesse.
I ran this through Google Translate and I guess this gent is asking about stories written in German. I don't know of any and regardless, no email was address was sent with this comment.
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Enjoyed the whole story. Think I will look for more of your writings.
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great XXXXXciting story!ThanXXXX!
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Absolutely great so far!
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Holy Fuck!! Kendal or Brit? I love they way you followed them through their adolescent years into young woman. Some stuff a bit far-fetched, but still great!
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Brilliant, both parts, must find your other stories, keep writing
Will do! Thank you!
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What a great story, very well written and very enjoyable
Thank you!
Great Xciting story!
ThanXXXX
S P
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Hi, hope comments are working.
I know I should leave a comment on every story, but I rarely do. To me, the best stories come from realism. I like to be able to think, 'Yeah, this could happen to me.' It's hard to mate realism with a hot, sexually exciting situation.
You do an awesome job! More than that, your writing is intriguing, your vocabulary is intelligent without being unrealistically advanced, and your characters are quirky and interesting. It's difficult to get enough character development without losing the story line and have it become too long and boring.
For me, I need to see pictures. The pictures in my head are not terribly attractive, so I like that you described Betty with a famous name. I also looked up '14 year old tall blonde' to find a picture of Elizabeth. You described her as Darryl Hannah, but she's much too old, even in the youngest pictures of her, but I appreciate the imagery. All in all, a great creation for the genre.
Thank you for taking the effort to publish it here.
C,
I know what you mean about commenting. I try and comment to my fellow contributors as often as I can but, I know that it isn't often enough. I appreciate you taking the time.
Thanks for the compliment! It takes a little thought to bring it all together in a comfortable way regardless of the situation. A short story doesn't give much leeway when characters and situations come into play. Gotta have enough, but not too much!
I find a reference is a good method when trying to describe a character. Elizabeth was to be conjured though imagining DH as a young girl. I had looked for pictures as well and had no luck. Oh well. How about a young Viking girl? That square jawed, high cheek bone look. Guess I could have just written that.
I'm happy to share!
I'm currently working on five stories, all at different points of development and hope to get them out before too long but, it all takes time. I'll do a little reposting every weekend during these odd times.
Thanks again
Cheers and Stay Safe!
UM
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Wow! This story....parts 1 & 2 was Great! Can't put into words but, the very best I have read and I'm an old man. Thank You
A very nice comment and greatly appreciated.
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Thank you! I remember reading part 1 some time back. Thought it definitely had some traction and was waiting for part 2. Glad you finally got it for us lurkers to enjoy! :D
My Pleasure!
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Loved the pacing. Couple of times, it seemed to change tempo on me and it wasn't quite expected. But, overall, it flowed perfectly as I was reading. Not too fast or too detailed (ala Steven King's tomes!).
The sexy bits were nice! You definitely enjoy your bj's!! LOL Same here, though I've never had anyone make me cum from/during one. Great read and thank you for some pussy eating techniques too! I'm like Liz with a Coach's cock when it comes to pussy. I could stay down there just appreciating it for several hours. :)
Must say, I kept expecting you to give it a "hollywood" ending, especially with Betty. Glad you didn't though. At the same time, I'm also glad you didn't dwell on it. In the overall story, it would have been overkill to try to expand on her and Scott anymore than you did. (Like Mr. King so often likes to do). Those 3(?) paragraphs were enough at the end.
So, in all, Best Fucking Year was a Great Fucking Read!! Thank you for sharing with us
I felt good about the balance in the story. I didn't think it would run as long as it did, but these things seem to take on lives of their own!
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Great, great, story - well written - well paced. I look forward to Part 2 and maybe more of Elizabeth?
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I thoroughly enjoyed part 2. You are an excellent story teller. Your words and phrases and description are stellar. How long did it take you to write the two parts and do you have a proofreader?
It takes a while to complete a story. They go through several drafts and, often there are three or four stories coming down the pike at the same time. Since the retirement of my proofreader, I am now attempting to handle those duties myself. We'll see how well that works!
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Excellent insightful writing. You been there done that?
Early on, I did spend a few years in the classroom. A different opportunity with greater financial rewards came up and I took it. I made a couple of real good friends, let me note - neither of whom have committed any indiscretions, who have stayed in the profession and I have found inspiration from some of their, and thier colleagues' conversations.
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Fantastic! Please, please keep going
I plan to keep going. At least until I finish the three other stories I've started and the one in the back of my mind.
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very well written.
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Hot story, enjoyed it
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I loved it, I really loved it. A wonderful coming of age story. Just enough sex to keep a pervert like me happy, but not enough for it to develop into a dirty story.
Thank you very much for writing it.
Regards
Thank God! The new comment form works!
I really appreciate this comment. I try to strike a balance and apparently it worked for this fellow! I believe I have one more Hidden Harbor story coalescing.
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That was lots of fun. I like how you built the brothers' relationship and the lessons they learned from their dad. I would have liked to lived in Hidden Harbor. Maybe do something about Celeste in a story.
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I really enjoyed this very sensitive, well-written story. I wanted more ... do Micky and Anna come together again?
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I just finished the story and liked it a lot, but you left a few unresolved issues when you ended it.
- First, what about Mike's participation in child procurement & slavery? If you don't pursue it, why mention it?
- What about his relationship with Ann Marie? Was it just a hot fling with a very fuckable niece?
- And what about Kaeli? Is she going to be Mike's next conquest? What about her girlie classmates that love "extra credit"? Are they possible candidates for conquest or procurement?
- Do you plan on continuing this story and answering some of these questions?
Of course I had plans to complete the circle in the story. This was the email that connected Candi and I. We started a correspondence and TETMD was created, which radically increased the circumference of the circle!
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I recently discovered your stories! They are excellent! However, I cannot figure out the proper reading order. I've read Princess, was that first? Which one should I read next? Thanks and keep up the good work!
He got the appropriate directions and I did a reworking of the Home Page
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This story could use another chapter. It is very well written and has an excellent story line. Keep them coming.
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I have read all the stories you have posted. I would love to read more. I would especially enjoy stories about your early experiences. In your story about your sister you mention starting around 12 with younger girls. That would be nice to hear about.
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A truly well written and edited story. I've thoroughly enjoyed your efforts and look forward to reading more, more, etc. Thanks for such a great reading experience - as well as the WOODY!
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Great story … had me going … and coming! I wish you finish this series AND the "Diane / Paula" one ...
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Great story, very hot with excellent detail.
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Really loving your story and your writing style. Very erotic and actually has a plot. Keep up the great work. Can't wait to read more.
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great story I have enjoyed it very much thanks again
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One of the best stories I have read in a long time! Thank you!
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This was one Hot story it have been a long time ago but I do remember how tight a 12 yr old pussy was and there is no better unless it is 11 yr old pussy.
This ia a great story keep up the good writing.
Back when you were 12, right?! Thanks, I'll keep at it!
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Uncle Mickey enjoyed your story. You were introduced by Tempest, great author and perfectionist. No forced sex just a new adventure. Some authors are extreme and force relationships.
Very nice to get a referral from a fellow contributor. Tempest is a favotite and true gentleman.
Continuing further along this storyline will lead you into some forced sex and some extreme shit. Tempest and few other readers told me that the usually didn't care for that stuff but the story was strong enough for them to make it through.
Good luck and let me know what you think!
Skol!
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Another great chapter! I'm enjoying the whole story!
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Excellent! Scored by an ex-pat from Ohio. Go Indians, suffer another Browns loss.
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More please.
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I love the story. Hoping for another great story. Sitting here with a dripping wet pussy.
Kind of wish I was as well.
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Really great story when it happened to me I was 13 and it was my judo teacher he turned me into a woman the second time we fucked it was long and hard his cock massaged my cervix until it dilated and his cock head went Deep in my womb something that since then has only happened 4 or 5 times with a man but always happens with my dog storm.
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you did good, a damn good story, keep up the awesome writing.
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I think you're a pretty damn good writer, but what irritates me to no end is writing stories in present tense. Maybe it's just me, but I find it hard to read that way.
Aaaaaaand, past tense was introduced!
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An excellent piece. Loved the development of the pentad and the sensual contrast of two females the experience Jeanne and somewhat novice Dawn. Also the descriptive flair to the oral copulation ... its one of my favorites in erotica.
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More please.
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Hi, I like the first two Dolans Diaries but the links to the next two don't work. Do you have another way to access them? I'm looking forward to binge reading TETMD next. Thank you for all your hard work and sharing your talented writing with us.
Sam
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I enjoyed your story. Maybe you should capitalize Florida in the last paragraph.
I did as soon as it was pointed out!
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You have a great series here. I hope there is one more chapter to tie up some loose ends. What kind of "depraved activities" did Mike indulge in? Did he ever scoop up the remaining two beauty contestants? What about Shea's two friends? So many questions for a warped mind to contemplate; I look forward to reading more of your efforts.
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Evening, Uncle Mickey;
I read this story first ... and then went back and read the first two. I thought both 1 and 2 were very good ... and 3 looked as if it would be the same.
I have to confess that I did think his extra-curricular business involved the white slave trade ... but the actual event was so jarring that I almost stopped reading.
When I thought some more about my reaction, I realized that it was deliberate on your part. The relationship with the young girls was all nice and erotic ... but the reality of abduction was just as important to "real life" components of your stories.
I am going to go through your other postings later. I want to do some more considering.
Thanks for three entertaining reads, though.
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Thank you for a very enjoyable read.
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A great and well written story. Mystery, and explicit detail. Your writing is at the top of the best writers. Congratulations.
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Please make her pregnant, only a bit …
… hmmm, a bit?
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THANKS! THOROUGHLY(!) enjoyed your three chapter TETMD prologue. Looking forward to what's next.
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This was a very exceptional love story. It was GREAT.
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Great story! I like the fact that instead of selling her and using her love against her, he did the right thing be her. Great touch! Keep up the good work.
I would like to see you write one where the kidnapped girl is a little redhead about nine who is just starting puberty and he kidnaps her, and uses her harder than he did Tilly: the whole works: all three holes, then lets her go.
Let me know if you can work with that idea.
Candi again, I let her work with the idea.
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Another great story, keep it up! Personally I'd like to read more about his seduction/kidnapping activities in Florida. Also his relationship with the neighborhood girls during his teenage years that are hinted at throughout the stories. Great job!
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love to hear some more of the harder stuff when he is doing the dark job!
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Appreciated the construction, the obvious fulfillment of a gentle man's dreams. His other job was hideous. Kidnapping, slavery were not enjoyable. Not my cup of tea.
Did fraternize and pursue sex with several of her high school friends and had a serious appetite for the young girl. She was on the pill and sexually active so no harm was done.
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Hey Ol-Hawse, Liked the story, you're a good writer a mite slow, but still very good. Sure wish I had a neighbor like Shae. Anyway, I'm too old to carry on a relationship like Nick did. I'm 82 and still like to read someone that can put together a good plot. Thanks again Micky for giving me a good cold winters day reading on one of my favorite type plots.
I believe this is one of my favorite Reader Comments
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This story that you wrote is by far one of the best I have read. The way you described Shea's looks, her feelings, and her desires, makes me feel like I am the one living across the street from her. I just want to thank-you for writing "Sweet Little Shae". And please let me know when your next realist story is out for reading. Thanks again so much.
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Great Stories I've read the entire series but part 3 of 4 is giving me a 404 Not found error Please let me know when you get it fixed.. Also I noticed you used the cities of Columbus, Cincinnati, and Dayton, in your stories, just curious if you lived in the area or was it just some random locations you used.. I live in the area of Dayton and Cincinnati. Again Great Story and I hate to see it end, Thanks
Hopefully the links are fixed. I left out the t in Pt3 in the file. I checked each of the 4 finales and they appear to be working.
Glad you liked the story. I know what you mean but, at a certain point things just have to end and so it is Micky and his adventures. Randy's first girl, Kendall, gets her own spot in my cheerleaders story. I'm still playing with a McMahon story line that would involve his running an ice cream place. Anyway, we'll see.
Ohio, my favorite cousin lived there for many years and I spent a fair amount of time visiting. I really love it there and it seemed like a good spot to set the tale. Nothing but good times and memories. I guess its a little salute.
Have a good one and stay warm with the winter coming!
Skoal!
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Micky, I have been enjoying working my way through your stories. You and Candice have shown an amazing amount of expertise in a number of areas as I've read the stories. Either that or you have educated yourselves for the purposes of sounding very smart as you've done the writing.
However, I found an error towards the end of New Crop P2 that I just have to mention. It was written: "Once Yvette had been anesthetized, Dr. Simms inserted a hollow plastic tube (or catheter) into the femoral artery in her neck and threaded it, using angiography, through to the site of the aneurysm." The problem is that the femoral artery is in the thigh, not the neck, and runs essentially alongside of the femur, which is the large bone between the hips and the knee. It is common to do many medical procedures by inserting a catheter into the femoral artery up near the groin. I am somewhat familiar with those. It is possible that a procedure in the brain goes through a neck artery, but that is above my limited knowledge. They might use one of the carotid arteries in that case.
Thanks for writing. Great series of stories.
I replied concerning how I pretty much kept my hands off Candice's work and know very little of the minutae she included. Thanks for commenting!
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I must admit that I'm enjoying TETMD. I didn't think I would because I don't usually like stories involving brutality towards girls but this one had grabbed me.
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Brianna, what a tough but gorgeous cookie. Candice must have been one degenerate woman.
As one might guess, Brianna is one of my favorite characters.
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I'm really enjoying the back story of Brianna. Did you write this? It's very well written from her perspective given that you're a guy (I'm assuming you are lol).
Yep, I'm a guy!
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This is a great story. Hard to keep it soft. Thank you
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I am reading your writing as you write it ... I am enjoying it a lot ... other parts are too ... Thank you
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- The children he is kidnapping are high profile types, the ones that scream victim, the kind that propel politicians to great lengths to find because the news media whip the public into a frenzy..The kind that can cause politicians to deman cessation of certain legal rights and freedoms. The kind of attention that he and his employers DO. NOT. WANT.
Reasonable point, "he" Candice's selections, definitely fit this category.
- And now that murder has been committed? You do know how many cameras are in use in the continental United States? You do know how many guns are owned by Americans? I beg you to try that and see what happens because he won't be fending off a karate kick, he'll be trying to staunch the bleeding from a .45 cal slug.
Seems to me that very few people come and check their kids' rooms with drawn guns.
- So because you are placing a highly unrealistic plot in a realistic setting, I give you -10 for consistency and general non erotic writing.
I can live with it
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Was really hot, good to see Aiden getting new girls of different ages and ethnicity. However I would like to see Aiden get rougher with the girls and use some younger girls, possibly also to get a 13 yr old who just had a child as a slave and rape her baby daughter as punishment
That was Candice's wheelhouse. I didn't venture there.
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Nice story.
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- Boring like all of the other stories.
- Boring as hell. It's the same story over and over and over again and the worse part is you're a better writer than this but it's too far fetched, might as well included superheroes in this mix.
- Tame and unrealistic stories unless that is the authors intent
I think this was the same person commenting on different stories in the series. One cannot be everybody's cup of tea.
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Looking forward to your next writing
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Interesting beginning, hope I can find and read all chapters.
I replied with proper directions
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Actually these stories don't appear to be going anywhere. To much talk about travel and business interspersed with willing little girls.
I was a touched confused by this comment but, what the hell.
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Hi. Love your stories. Keep up the good work. A shame Candice Sawyer doesn't write with you anymore. Love your ideas especially the powerful people acquiring any stunning little thing they desire. If it were real and I was a billionaire member I would start bidding on lovely Elizabeth Hiley with $5million lol. I like to think your character Yvette is nod to the child model Thylane Blondeau who appeared on the cover of vogue, which caused an outcry by do-gooders.
I hope you don't mind a suggestion. After some of the girls are acquired you never really say who owns them and what they do with them. Might I suggest an Arab sheik with a taste for Midwestern American girls or an African Prince who loves Nordic blondes or may be a German lesbian politician who adores Latino girls that resemble a young Selena Gomez. Lol. Any how I look forward to your updates. ps are there any authors you particularly like?
Thanks
I started adding comments about where the victims ended up but not much more in that regard. Regarding favorite authors, I enjoy most of the notables on ASSTR. You know who they are and they know who they are! I wish I had bookmarked this one story I read by a fellow who had set it on a farm, it was sexy and hilarious. Most often though, I like to mention Little Bree's "Allie and The Old Man" as a favorite.
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Hey. I fell in love with this story! (Brianna's Story) Please let me know if there will be anymore chapters. I want to know what happened to Myra. Has Candace Sawyer resurfaced?
Honestly, I loved writing Brianna's Story. It flowed from start to finish!
Candice fell off the face of the earth. Never heard from her again as far as I know.
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Holy Fuck! I love your stories!
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A good start to an interesting story
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I found it very exciting. It obviously was complete fiction, but very stimulating.
Wow I loved it so much.
Thanks for taking the time to send a comment. I'm glad you liked my little story! It's on the darker side but every now and then a little darkness ...
I point out in my profile that inspiration for stories is all around us and it was true in this case.
Have a good one and stay safe!
Cheers!
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Loved the story, sensuous and lingering
M
M,
Glad you liked the story. A simple fantasy can be a nice release. Be sure to read the follow up, Tilly's Promise. Its meant to be a little more fun, from Tilly's viewpoint.
Thanks for commenting, so few ever take the time.
M took the time to comment about Tilly's Promise, below
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Wow I would love this to happen to me. I'm a year younger than Tilly but it would be awesom. My teacher would be mr Sykes but there is a cute assistant lizzy who I like too
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Great story.
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Marvelous word-pictures. A bad situation made good. Thank goodness this didn't end like some others, where the 'victim' never lives to go home. I hate that. I look forward to the next installment.
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Nice story, thanks. I imagined Tilly as a Kristina Pimenova lookalike OMG. Thanks again. Look forward to your new work, hope fully more similar tales.
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Good story and good ending
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I enjoyed your story. Thought you might like one of mine that explores a similar main character's similar hobby. http://www.asstr.org/~Chris_Hailey/stories/guest_writers/Stepdaddy_LatchkeyKid.html
-Regards, Stepdaddy
It is always a fine feeling getting a compliment from a fellow author! And I do enjoy his stories!
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It would be nice to follow Tilly as she keeps her promise and begins blowing "at least one or two guys a year -- her uncle, her teacher, a neighbor, the fat kid at school." Thanks for a really erotic story.
This comment, gives us … "Tilly's Promise"
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Mmmmm I loved this story and wish there was more about Tilly and her neighbor and Robert. Great writing and detail. I look forward to reading more of your stories
Thanks for taking time to drop a comment. It is appreciated. I had a lot of fun writing this little Tilly story. I've had a few requests for a follow up. I'm giving it some thought. I'm sure you can find more to enjoy!
Thanks again and Stay Safe!
Thanks Micky, I will look for a possible sequel to Tilly's story and will read some of your other stories, I love your writing and detail. It makes so hard.
DC
I'm rereading "Tilly Has a Bad Day" and "Tilly's Promise" looking for some inspiration. I have more than a couple in the works right now and am close to finishing one of them.
I think once "Amaya May I" is posted, I'll put Tilly3 into the mix.
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Read the other Tilly - good, though I preferred the first due to my 'inclinations'.
Q - have you ever written such stories elsewhere under another pseudonym on a private erotic stories site, last one being around 2011??
M
Yep, two different stories in the inclination aspect. I had some requests to do a follow-up on Tilly Has A Bad Day and I eventually did. I've had a couple of requests to follow up on "Promise." I don't know if that will happen, maybe. I have five or six new ones in the process right now and don't know how many more I got in me.
Anyway, nope, these are my first writings.
Thanks for commenting!
Skoal!
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I would love to read more about her "next time" with Robert. He has a lot to learn!
I'm sure he would be "up" to the challenge!
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I liked it. I do hope you will continue Tilly's story. I would like to see her have more fun with Robert. I wish you had NOT done the bit with the old librarian and her secret cameras. That really was not needed for the story line.
Thanks you for the comment. I'm not too sure about a follow up, we'll see. I do like this little storyline though.
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Ahhhh, the Allman Brothers. "Eat a Peach"! What a great album. I loved the way you slipped that little tidbit into the story. I'm really enjoying your stories. Five down, lots more to go. Thanks for writing.
Thanks for the comment/compliment. There are lots of little "easter eggs" throughout all of my stories, glad you saw that one.
In a few cases, an entire story is an Easter Egg if one doesn't lose the forest for the trees! With ASSTR being down for so long there are very few comments being made. It was nice to come across your's today.
Cheers!
Mickey
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Terrific! So easy to read, plausible and fun. Love it.
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Overall, I liked it. Not that it made sense overall. The bit about the camera and the internet was, frankly, overkill.
I guess the story was liked, even though it didn't make sense. That's OK. This was meant to be a fun little story told from Tilly's viewpoint. I tried to write it like a kid's story in keeping with the Tilly viewpoint. I had a whole lot of fun writing about Tilly. I put the little twist in at the end as kind of a joke about poor, promise-keeping, good-girl Tilly's odd luck.
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Robert and tilly need to have sex before she gets her period in a second story they need to be good friends and date at 16 then marry they need to be together for ever
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I liked it a lot. Tilly was fun and a perfect little girl trying to keep her promise. I wish I lived behind her.
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