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Title |
Dyad |
Author |
Michael K. Smith |
Story Code(s) |
F/M, Inc, Teen |
Length |
10,300 words |
Rating |
Good |
Summary |
Jodie loses her virginity to her father. |
Commentary |
This is a well told story. Jodie is the narrator; her
descriptions of everyday life are related in a believable
fashion. The sex is not overemphasized, but there are
plenty of other details. This story is lacking a dilemma. Jodie does not have a very hard time deciding that her father is to be her first. Her father shows a little reluctance, but after exhibiting token signs of restraint, gives in. I prefer a story which has a real dilemma. Another complaint I have is that Jodie monopolizes this story. I suppose that is natural, since she is the narrator, but the overwhelming majority of her narration only gives us insights into what she is thinking. This may not be a valid criticism. I wanted to enjoy this story, but seeing as that I could not find a real dilemma I am looking for other faults in the story. I do think this story is well told. It is worth reading. It reads like I would imagine a teenage girl's diary could read if she had experienced these sort of things. Nothing seems planned out. Things just happen. I was aroused at times, but not overwhelmingly so. This is a nice story, I just wish there had been a little more to it. |
ASSM |
Dyad |