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Title |
A Little Secret |
Author |
Bartek Boryczko |
Story Code(s) |
M/F, Teen, Inc |
Length |
4,200 words |
Rating |
Good |
Summary |
Josh and his new step-sister, Becky, get to know each other a little better. |
Commentary |
I like the tone of this story. The narration, by Josh, is both
descriptive and real. He is taken in by his step-sister's
beauty, but at the same time is apprehensive about doing
anything with her. Becky is not as complete a character as
Josh, but she is more than just a body. What plot there was, was very simple. This story could have benefited greatly from some editing. Several of the paragraphs were much too long and should have been broken down into two or more paragraphs. |
ASSM |
A Little Secret |