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Title

Hot Tub Fun!

Author

Michelle

Story Code(s)

F/M/M, Teen

Length

2,800 words

Rating

Good

Summary

A twenty-something couple, a sixteen-year-old boy, and a hot tub.

Commentary

This story was different. Seeing two men going at it, without one dressing as a woman, was a switch. For all the F/F and M/F/F stories out there, it is nice to see one that is willing to go the other route.

The characters were average. The plot was pretty straight forward. There was no twist at the end. This story worked for me, because it was different.

I do have a problem with the blocking in this story. I do not think it was necessary. It ends up being a tangle of directions. There are plenty of good stories that leave body positioning up to the reader's imagination.

[Definition: Blocking - "to work out or chart the movements of (as stage performers)" (WWWebster Dictionary).

Note: I do not think it is a commonly used term except on the stage or in writing. I did not know that definition of the word 'blocking' until I took an acting class several years ago.]

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Hot Tub Fun!