SUMMARY: Anita and Sue, with some assistance from Alex, prepare a very special present for his girlfriend.

COMMENTARY: I enjoyed this story. It flows quickly. It isn't too long or involved. The sex is kept to a minimum, but I still found it to be quite arousing. After all, a scene can be arousing with out penetration actually occurring. Right?

On the down side, the story does flow a bit too fast. Yes, I mentioned this as a plus in the last paragraph, but give me a few more sentences and I'll elaborate. I had a hard time following everything that was happening, as I read through the story for the first time. Am I expecting too much? Should I have been reading the story a bit more slowly? Maybe, but it is worth noting that this story is very tightly scripted. There is nothing wrong with a tightly scripted story, i.e., one in which every or almost every sentence carries vital or important information, but it helps to know in advance that one is reading such a story. Which is not say that the author should have said so in his notes, but that I feel the obligation to say so here.

I think that most of you should enjoy this story, male and female alike. However, if you are expecting Alex to have his cock buried inside of either Anita or Sue by the end of the second paragraph, or sooner, then you may want to skip this story.

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent

LINK(S):

• ASSM Archive
• Part 1 of 1