SUMMARY: Mike and Natalie have more fun, wearing less clothes, than they expected when they go camping with Kellie and Steve.

COMMENTARY: I enjoyed this story. It is not short, but it isn't terribly long either. The author keeps the plot rolling and the story fresh. The ending is predictable, but I like the route that the characters take in getting there.

There is one thing that nagged at me as I read this story. Mike seems to get very turned on watching his wife and his brother-in-law have sex. That wasn't the part that nagged at me. It was the manner in which the author reveals Mike's arousal at his wife's infidelity which leaves something to be desired, in my opinion. Instead of showing us how it makes him feel, Mike, who doubles as the narrator, tells us how it makes him feel. Explicitly revealing facts isn't always the most effective method for communicating information.

There isn't anything to really warn you about in this story, other than the infidelity. Although I have to wonder if it can real be considered infidelity if it is done with the implied consent of one's spouse. Oh well, I enjoyed the story and believe that some of you should as well.

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent

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