SUMMARY: Allan almost falls to his death, while washing windows on a skyscraper. That's how the story begins, more or less.

COMMENTARY: This is a nice story, but I found it somewhat lacking. The sex is somewhat arousing, but my biggest gripe with the story is that I felt there was too much telling and not enough showing. By that I mean that the author seemed to inform the reader rather than simply describe what was happening. It can be a fine line, but the difference seems to me to be that in the latter case the author does not leave the evidence as open to interpretation as he (in this case) does in the latter.

I suspect that I may be blowing this whole showing versus telling thing out of proportion. It is entirely possible that I am overlooking a true gem of a story. In light of that, I will point out that this is a romantic story. So, if you like erotic stories that have a romantic flavour to them then you may want to give this one a spin.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.0 (out of 10)

• Arousal: 3/5
• Editing: 5/5
• Plot and Characters: 3/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Good

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• ASSM Archive
• Part 1 of 1