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Title |
Pretend |
Author |
Al Steiner (Plot supplied by Rob) |
Story Code(s) |
M/F |
Story Theme(s) |
Infidelity |
Length |
8,800 words |
Arousal |
4 out of 5 |
Plot and Characters |
4 out of 5 |
Editing |
4 out of 5 |
Objective Analysis |
8.0 out of 10 |
Subjective Analysis |
Very Good |
Summary |
Paul helps Kathy, his flirtatious employee, out of a bad situation by pretending to be her boyfriend. |
Commentary |
This is a very arousing story. The fact that both characters are
married, but not to each other, and are initially placed in a
situation where they need to act like lovers, made for a very
arousing story. This is a well conceived story. The transition from the first part to the second could have been a bit smoother. There was a definite shift in mood or the narrator's attitude toward their situation. The characters seem realistic, as does the dialogue. This is not a very deep story, but there is more to it than just sex. There are a few typos. I enjoyed this story. It well written, very arousing, and reasonably well edited. I think I might have enjoyed this story a bit more if the author had managed to preserve the tone he had going in the first half. I have given this story a Very Good, under Subjective Analysis. |
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