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Title

Hank

Author

Greatness

Story Code(s)

M/F, Inc, NC

Length

5,200 words

Rating

Not Good

Summary

Hank's beautiful sister, Caroline, gets drunk and passes out. He is drunk himself, so he takes advantage of her.

Commentary

This story bothered me. The only character that seemed a little more than just a caricature was Hank. Caroline was just a body. She may have been conscious for part of this story, but her only role was as a receptacle for Hank's cum.

The author tried to make this story appear consensual by saying, at the end, that Hank's sister was never asleep. She wanted exactly what she got and more. Whether she wanted what she got or not, Hank took advantage of her believing that she was unconscious. Of course this character, Caroline, was just a shell, without much of a personality, so maybe the author is right, and maybe the sex was consensual. To me, non-consensual sex means that one partner has not in some way indicated a willingness to participate. Passing out drunk, or appearing to pass out drunk, does not indicate willingness to me.

There was not much to this story to begin with. The cop out excuses and the lack of plot or character development did not help. If you are going to write a non-consensual story then label it as such. Trying to avoid the non-consensual label by including a half-assed explanation, at the end, makes your writing even less credible.

ASSM

Hank