SUMMARY: Rachel tells her friend Lisa about her two cousins, Brenda and Josie, over the phone.

COMMENTARY: I thoroughly enjoyed this story. I think that it has two strengths. The first is the omnipresent dialogue. Almost the entire story consists of dialogue. The author uses it quite effectively. In particular, it is a medium that allows the author to reveal how Rachel and Lisa differ. He does so quite effectively.

The second strength of this story is the manner in which the author weaves two narratives together. The story begins with Rachel and Lisa talking on the phone. Soon there after, Rachel begins to tell Lisa about her night on the town with her cousins. I suppose that this could also be referred to as a story-within-a-story. Either way, the author does a very nice job jumping back and forth, quite seamlessly I might add, and in the end tying the two together.

If you don't care for stories of lesbian lust, then this may not be the story for you. Other than that, I can't see anything else that should bother most avid readers of erotica.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.5 (out of 10)

• Arousal: 5/5
• Editing: 5/5
• Plot and Characters: 4/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent

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