SUMMARY: Brenda flies home to visit her family, after her father has a stroke. It turns out she has to share a room with Sarah, her older sister, whom she has never gotten along with very well. Much to Brenda's surprise, this actually mellows the situation somewhat. Before you know it Sarah and Barry, her older brother, don't seem all that bad after all.

COMMENTARY: This is an arousing tale of a rather interesting family. I enjoyed the twists and turns that story takes. The author does a very nice job working in little details. They inject both humor and reality into Brenda's situation.

One problem that I do have with this story is the title. The author manages to work it into the plot, but it felt forced. It seemed peripheral and not central to the story.

I also would have preferred a little more dialogue and a little less narration. Actually, the author does a very nice job with the narration. What really bothered me was that I felt like I didn't know Barry or Sarah, except through Brenda's eyes. So, maybe the problem isn't that there is too much narration, but that Brenda seems too in control of the situation. Nothing seems to leap out and surprise her. Well, that isn't completely true, but without giving away what happens I must say that her reactions seem rather subdued.

Enough already! This is a very nicely written story. I'm just being picky. If you like stories that have more to them than just sex, and that includes stories of incest, then you should like this one.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.0 (out of 10)

• Arousal: 4/5
• Editing: 5/5
• Plot and Characters: 5/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good

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