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Title

To the Victor

Author

Shon Richards

Story Code(s)

M/F

Length

8,000 words

Arousal

3 out of 5

Plot and Characters

2 out of 5

Editing

5 out of 5

Objective Analysis

6.5 out of 10

Subjective Analysis

Not Good

Summary

A bunch of guys, who recently graduated from high school, bowl together for the last time, before taking off for college. To make the evening a little more interesting one of the guys hires an escort. She goes to the victor.

Commentary

This is a somewhat arousing story. The author does a decent job with the sex scenes. Unfortunately, the plot and characters do not measure up to the sex scenes. The result is that in my eyes there was a lack of balance in the story.

I had some problems with this story. On the up side, the plot isn't too complex. On the down side, the characters are a bit lacking. They seemed too simplistic; more types, than actual people. The action of the story is also a bit choppy. The key elements are there, but they seem to need further refinement.

Well, I'm not too crazy about this story. The plot and the characters were not compelling enough to catch my interest. In the final analysis it seems that the story was lacking. If the plot sounds like one that might interest you and you aren't as picky as I am when it comes to plot and characters, then you may like this story. I have given it a Not Good.

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