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Title

The Shaver III

Author

Al Steiner

Story Code(s)

F/F, F/F/M

Length

10,000 words

Arousal

2 out of 5

Story

5 out of 5

Objective Analysis

7 out of 10

Subjective Analysis

Very Good

Summary

Jen has her doubts when she goes to a party with Charlie, her sister- in-law. Charlie is a firefighter and the party is thrown by some of her friends. Jen, on the other hand, is married and lives a rather sheltered life. Charlie has more in mind than just showing her sister-in-law how the other half lives.

Commentary

If you have not read The Shaver and The Shaver II, then I recommend you do so before reading this story.

This story is a little arousing. It is not replete with descriptions of sex or arousing situations. I got the impression that Jen is not comfortable in her surroundings; this served to make me equally uncomfortable. I had a hard time getting aroused by the majority of this story.

The story itself is well written. It focuses around Jen and how she develops as a character. It is told through an alcoholic blur. She would rather be somewhere else, but accepting that she isn't she tries to make the best of a bad situation. There is a plot. It is reasonably well paced. I wish there had been more dialogue in the story. The author does a great job of setting the tone through Jen's descriptions, but I prefer to be given varying opinions and have to pick among them. What dialogue there is, seems to facilitate the plot as much as does Jen's development as a character.

I liked this story, but not because I found it arousing. This author has a knack for telling a story from a single perspective. Internal conflicts make a story compelling, but external conflicts can be just as compelling. I prefer to see a little of both. By the way, if you are looking for stroke material, I advise you look elsewhere. The first two installments of The Shaver resembled stroke stories. This one does not. I have placed it on my B-list because it is so well written.

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Part 1 (of 2)
Part 2 (of 2)

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