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Title |
StepSis with the Devilish Hands |
Author |
Schulzie |
Story Code(s) |
m/F/F, Teen, Exhib, Inc, Pedo |
Length |
3,200 words |
Arousal |
3 out of 5 |
Story |
3 out of 5 |
Objective Analysis |
6 out of 10 |
Subjective Analysis |
Good |
Summary |
A man reflects on the first hand job he ever got. He was thirteen at the time. He got it from his sister. She was eighteen. |
Commentary |
I found this story to be somewhat
arousing. The buildup was better than the
ending. The ending left me feeling a bit
unsatisfied. For the most part this is a well written story. The only problem I had was with the flow of the plot. Everything seemed to be rolling along smoothly until the transition to the last scene. It was not smooth enough for me. There is also a character introduced in the last scene for no apparent reason. I think the story would have been better with out her. It left me wondering why she was even in the story in the first place. I did like the two main characters. They both seemed realistic, at least to the extent that the author described them. Due to what I felt was a let down at the end of this story I did not enjoy it enough to consider it A- or B-list material. It is still well enough written and has enough that I do like for me to say that it is a Good story. |
ASSM Link(s) |
Part 1 (of 1) |