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Title

The Housesitter

Author

Steve

Story Code(s)

M/F, Teen

Length

7,800 words

Rating

Very Good

Summary

Brian's mother hires a 19-year-old woman to look after a 17-year-old boy.

Commentary

I thought the author did a good job with describing things from Brian's point of view. There is a plot. He builds up to the sex and does not have too much of it.

If I wanted to find fault with this story I would say that the dialogue left something to be desired. It lacked emotions. The characters did not seem to be feeling anything, emotionally, when they spoke. It was like actors who read their lines without communicating any feeling.

I should not complain about the dialogue, it's stilted nature did make me laugh.

ASSM Link(s)

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