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Title

The Shed (Chapters 1 & 2)

Author

Big T

Story Code(s)

Voy, F-solo, M-solo

Length

4,500 words

Rating

Good

Summary

A twelve-year-old boy spies on an older girl.

Commentary

This story is jagged around the edges, but it shows potential. The author does an excellent job of writing a story from a twelve-year- old boy's point of view. He captures the boy's apprehension and his excitement.

The story could stand to be edited. There are quite a few sentences and paragraphs that I feel could be broken up into shorter ones. There are a few misspelled words.

These are only the first two chapters of a longer work.

ASSM Link(s)

Part 1 (of 1)