SUMMARY: Roger grooms dogs for competition. Melissa is in need of some grooming. Melissa isn't a canine.

COMMENTARY: There some things that I like about this story. The sexual situations that Melissa and Roger get themselves into are hot. There is much more to the story than just sex. The author does a very nice job setting the scene.

The are some things that bothered me about this story. Generally speaking, I prefer dialogue to narration. It seems to me that this story had an abundance of narration, but fell short in the dialogue department. Specifically, there is much more narration by Roger than there are conversations he has with Melissa. I was also disappointed by the fact that Melissa does not seem to be an independent character. Most of what the author tells us about her is told through Roger, and he seems to be in control. Maybe I am trying to say that the story was a bit too predictable, which it wasn't, but I am not sure. What I do know is that it would have been nice if Melissa had gotten more air time.

All in all this is a well written story. I think that the flaws I see are primarily creations of my own imagination. There are 'things' that I like to see in a story and 'things' that I don't. These 'things' color my views and reviews. In other words, some of you may enjoy this story more than I did; but don't get the wrong idea, I did enjoy it.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.5 (out of 10)

• Arousal: 3/5
• Editing: 5/5
• Plot and Characters: 4/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good

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