SUMMARY: 40-something Lance takes pity on Darcy, his 16- year-old neighbor. Her parents aren't very nice people. He can't take his eyes off of her. He starts off by buying her gifts, anonymously. Eventually she finds out and...

COMMENTARY: I enjoyed this story quite a bit. It is paced a little fast. Some aspects of it required me to suspend my disbelief more than I normally prefer to; still, I liked it. The author does not cut to the chase too quickly. He takes his time and allows a series of events to build up. What I meant when I said that it is paced too fast, is that the action within each individual scene flows too quickly. The story on the whole is nicely paced.

I believe that this story will appeal more to men than it does to women. I say that primarily because this seems like more of a male fantasy than a female one. I could be wrong. Its happened before; once in 1975; nobody's perfect. Maybe if Darcy had been fleshed out a little more before she and Lance got involved (ooops, did I just give a way part of the plot?) then I might not have made this assertion.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 8.0 (out of 10)

• Arousal: 4/5
• Editing: 4/5
• Plot and Characters: 4/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent

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