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Title |
Wildlife |
Author |
Lee Bido |
Story Code(s) |
M-solo, F-solo |
Length |
4,200 words |
Arousal |
3 out of 5 |
Story |
4 out of 5 |
Objective Analysis |
7 out of 10 |
Subjective Analysis |
Good |
Summary |
Theo and Susan, coincidentally, decide to masturbate in the great outdoors. |
Commentary |
I like the idea behind this story, but I think
that the author missed something in the
execution. It alternates between Susan and
Theo, describing first what one is up to and
then the other. It provides a certain amount
of symmetry. I like that. Where I think the story falls short is that Theo and Susan seem to have no other function in life other than to masturbate. Believe it or not I think it would have made the story more arousing if the author had worked up to the sex, instead of more or less beginning with it. I gave this story a Good, under Subjective Analysis, because while it is a nice story, it is also a bit lacking. If there had been more to the plot or some build up before revealing why Susan and Theo were hiking in the hills of southern Indiana, then I might have given this story a Very Good. |
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