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Title |
The Swing Man |
Author |
Chili Peeler |
Story Code(s) |
M/F, F/F, M/F/F, Inc |
Length |
40,500 words |
Rating |
Not Good |
Summary |
Jonas has been cheating on his wife, Stella. She finds out. She calls her lawyer and instructs him to start divorce proceedings. Jonas' daughter, Nikki, has a slightly different reaction. |
Commentary |
This story tried to do too much. It started in one direction and
ended in another. In some cases this works. In this one it did
not. The author did not do a good job of bringing the
husband-cheating-on- his-wife and
father-sleeping-with-his-daughter plot lines together. There was a bit too much sex, for my tastes. A little more plot and characterization would have done wonders for this story. Toward the end the plot and characters began to disintegrate and all that was left was a stroke story. Possibly if the author had not spent so much time describing sex and left a little more to the reader's imagination this story would have worked better. |
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