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Title |
Janey's April |
Author |
Janey |
Story Code(s) |
F/M, F/M/F |
Length |
11,200 words |
Rating |
2.0 |
Summary |
Mary travels to Switzerland to get laid. Don is Mary's first fuck, but Jean-Claude is the first one to show her how much fun sex can be. |
Commentary |
It is not a good sign when the introduction to a story is
better than the story itself. This story did not work for me.
The dilemma, if there was one, had already been
resolved. Mary had already decided she wanted to lose
her virginity. Everything after that seemed rather
procedural. There did not seem to be any excitement in
any of the acts, including the three-way sex. Another problem I had with this story was that the author told rather than described what happened. I did this. I felt like this. She did that. She sat here. He licked this this. I licked that. Almost every sentence had a person as the subject. It got to be monotonous. I have imposed my standards on this story. You may like this story. You may hate some of the stories that I give good reviews to. So be it. |
ASSM |
Janey's April |