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SUMMARY: Brenda falls for her babysitter, Richard. He is 25 and she is 13. Her parents don't object to their relationship or the one that their other daughter Vicky, age 11, starts with Caitlin, Richard's 17-year-old sister. | |||||||||||||||||||||
COMMENTARY: In order to enjoy or appreciate most fiction one must be able to suspend one's disbelief, at least temporarily. Erotic stories are no exception to this rule. This story in particular required me to either suspend my disbelief or ignore some of the facts. What I am referring to in particular are the ages of Brenda and Vicky. Brenda is thirteen and Vicky is eleven. I'm sure that there are girls, females, women, who have become sexually active at such an early age, but they aren't usually part of my fantasies. So why did I enjoy reading about their frolics? Good question. To be honest, when I was reading the story I didn't really think about them as being that young. I really didn't think about their ages much at all. They seem extremely mature given how old they are supposed to be. They are at least as grown up, in some ways, as Richard and Caitlin are. I think that if they are really supposed to be that young, then this story must take place in some sort of alternate reality where some people mature much more quickly. I think that this is the conclusion that my subconscious mind came to as I was reading the story. The fact that their parents don't object to their daughters relationships and that their mother was sexually active at the same age also gave me reasons to buy into the acceptibility of their actions and the actions of Richard and Caitlin. What else is there to say about this story? I read it in parts. It is very long and I took about a week to read the whole thing. It is well edited and well written, although there isn't much to the story other than the relationships. There is a lot of dialogue in this story. I love dialogue. Possibly that biased me toward this story just a bit, but I think that it also helped to make the characters seem more real and to reveal their individual personalities. The outside world doesn't seem to exist, for the most part. Yes, I realize that this is fiction, but it doesn't hurt to make the world around the characters seem realistic. In this case I think that the author does a good enough job with the characters that the outside world isn't missed, by me at least. Nothing is as simple as it seems. I think that is true about life in general and the author seems to use that as a theme of sorts for this story. That may be another reason why I enjoyed this story. There always seems to be a challenge or obstacle for his characters to overcome. For the most part these challenges require his chaacters to grow up or alter their view of reality. I can dig that. One final note: The author is kind enough to include some extra material at the end of the story. These are scenes that he wrote and then chose not to include in the story. They were also fun to read. | |||||||||||||||||||||
LINK(S) Chapters 1 - 4: http://www.asstr.org/.../7285.txt Tom Bombadil - http://www.asstr.org/~BitBard/forray/tom/ |
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