COMMENTARY:
In my opinion this story is only marred by a
handful of typographical errors. It has a lot going for it.
The characters seem realistic. The plot is well paced.
There isn't too much sex. Most of the situations are quite
erotic, even when both characters are fully dressed. The
story does not get repetitive or stale. I have read a
number of longer stories in which the first few thousand
words set the scene and then the plot and character
development disappear and are replaced with sex, sex and
more sex. This story does not fall into that category.
If you can get over the age difference, or at least put it
aside while you are reading this story, then I think that
you just might enjoy it as much as I did. Dan is the more
reluctant party, which seems realistic given that unlike
Jan he is not a teenager. I normally don't use the word
'romantic' when describing erotic stories, but I think that
it captures some of the essence of this story.
One last thing, this is the first of five stories about Dan
and Jan. I tried reading the second story in the series,
but did not care for it. It is much longer than this one
and there is too much sex and not enough character or plot
development. I don't have any plans to read the other three
stories. |