OoPS: 337

Title	Consanguinity
Author	MichaelD38
Story Code(s)	M/F, Teen, *
Length	16,500 words
Arousal	3 out of 5
Story	5 out of 5
Objective Analysis	8 out of 10
Subjective Analysis	Excellent
Summary	Carolyn brings Shelby, her roommate, home with her from school. Will falls for Shelby and trouble ensues.
Commentary	I found this story to be somewhat arousing. The sex scenes are arousing, but for the most part I found the scenes where Shelby and Will are getting to know each other more arousing. This is a very well composed story. The characters seem realistic. They are all dynamic. The plot is well paced. I thought the author did a good job showing how Will and Carolyn's relationship suffers after Shelby enters Will's life. I was hoping for a different ending, but the one the author provided seems logical, although it is bittersweet. This is an Excellent story. There are some arousing scenes, but for the most it is the author's skill in relating the tale that make it Excellent. It is possible that showing the sex isn't necessary to the plot. On the other hand, showing Shelby and Will in the sack probably made the ending that much more bittersweet. This is not stroke material, so if that's what you are interested in then I advise you look elsewhere.