Alley of OoPS : 33

Title

Desert Rain

Author

Mat Twassel

Story Code(s)

M/F

Length

1,500 words

Rating

Great

Summary

A man walks into a card and gift shop in the desert. He is looking for a map of the local area, but ends up walking out with two umbrellas.

Commentary

I really liked this story. The characters were all deliciously anonymous, but at the same time seemed very familiar. The awkwardness of the man and the flirtatious nature of the woman at the counter worked well together. It did not feel rushed or forced. I have always considered neckties to be phallic objects, but had never thought about belts in the same way.