Alley of OoPS: Coaching Kristin


 
TITLE:Coaching Kristin
AUTHOR:Devlin
LENGTH:14,700 words
MAIN CHARACTER:Male
COMBINATION(S):Twosome (2 Females)
Twosome (1 Female, 1 Male)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male)
Homosexual (Female)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Male Coach-Female Athlete
KINK(S): Voyeurism
SETTING(S): Home
 
 

SUMMARY: John O'Brien is in his thirties and coaches girls' basketball at the high school and college levels. Over the years he develops a very special relationship with Kristin, one of the girls he coaches.

 
 

COMMENTARY: John has a dilemma. He finds Kristin attractive but knows better than to get romantically involved with one of his athletes. Even if he didn't have to worry about getting fired and/or arrested, his conscience wouldn't let him get away with it. Eventually he ignores his conscience, but not before he gets an earful from it.

This is a beautiful story. I thoroughly enjoyed it. It is very nicely paced. There is more to it than just sex. In my opinion, the focus of the story is really John's dilemma and not his relationship with Kristin. The sexual tension is palpable as well as extremely arousing.

I did find some flaws. There is a small number of typographical errors. In some cases a word or two has been left out, in other cases the wrong word or verb tense has been used. For the most part these mistakes do not interrupt the flow of the story. I also found a couple of inconsistencies. In Part I, a two-piece bathing suit mysteriously becomes a one-piece bathing suit. The transition between parts II and III isn't the smoothest. Part III opens with, "a few months went by," when actually more than a year has passed.

If you are looking for a story that is heavy on graphic descriptions of sex then you may want to skip this one. On the other hand, if you are like me and enjoy a long build up with a passionate ending then I strongly recommend you give this story a try.

One final comment, there are some descriptions of lesbian sex in this story but Kristin is only an observer in these scenes and not one of the participants.

NOTE: At the time this spotlight was written there were only six parts or chapters to the story. Since then the author has added another five chapters.

 
 

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