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Title |
Orange County Babylon [Part 6 of 8] |
Author |
MichaelD38 |
Story Code(s) |
M/F, F/F, Teen |
Length |
8,400 words |
Rating |
-- |
Summary |
Jack breaks up with Summer. The football team wins the championship. |
Commentary |
Like the previous five parts, this part is well written. Two things
do occur to me. One, there is a lot of football in this story. I like football and can appreciate what is being described. I can imagine that someone who does not care for football might skip over some of the lengthy descriptions of games. Two, things have been going just a bit too sweetly, lately. I am waiting for the ball to drop. If it does not I will probably be some what disappointed. |
ASSM Link(s) |
Part 1 (of 3) Part 2 (of 3) Part 3 (of 3) |
Deja Link(s) |
Part 1 (of 3) Part 2 (of 3) Part 3 (of 3) |