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Subject: [review] {Alkaviade} Saliva (voy mast)
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Review by Lee Vine
Rogue Review No. 40 - May 31, 1998
Saliva by Hugo Alkaviade
M-solo, Teen
Length: 2,500 words
Summary
Michael spends a day fantasizing about Christine, a girl who rejected
his advances. He gets revenge on her by sneaking into the girl's
locker room and beating off in her panties.
Commentary
This was a very well written story. The author has a nice light
touch. His descriptions are not always central to the plot, but they
do help to set the mood. He does not spend too much time describing
any one thing. The humor was dry, and witty.
I was a bit disturbed by this story. The narrator's feelings are not
incomprehensible. His actions, on the other hand, are a bit over the
edge. This is only a story, but it still gave me a creepy feeling.
Despite my mixed feelings, well written but creepy, I liked this
story. The author did not get into rape or torture, which it seems
would be a logical expansion for some writers. I look forward to
reading more by Mr. Alkaviade, but hopefully the tone will not always
be the same.
Judgment
This was an excellent story. I would not change a thing.
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