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Subject: The Annex Reviews, 10/13/97
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News from the continuing war on spam:

Eli (moderator of alt.sex.stories.moderated) has written a Statement of 
Policy for alt.sex.stories.moderated that everyone should read, echoing 
some of Ole Joe's comments and mine, too. I will try to get his permission 
to post it on my website. 

Sadly, even some of the moderated newsgroups are being inundated with 
spam. Soc.sexuality.bondage-bdsm has been recently flooded with tripe 
like CUNTS, CLITS AND SLITS and SEX SEX SEX SEX. Are spammers getting 
more sneaky, or is someone asleep on the job?

On a happier note, a new newsgroup has joined us: 
alt.sex.stories.gay.moderated. The moderater is Mykkhal 
(moderated.stories@bigfoot.com). In one of his first posts to this 
newsgroup, Mykkhal had this to say about the Nifty Stories archive, 
which archives gay, lesbian and TG stories. I thought it worthwhile to 
repeat here as I know many ASS and ASSM writers use it. 

" 2.  The Nifty Archives -  (not technically ASSGM business, but 
important nonetheless)

Guys, it is time to take a little action here.  I received a lot of offers 
regarding some limited financial support before I set up this group, and 
other than a software purchase, there hasn't been any real cost for it.  
Instead, I'd like those of you who offered, and preferably everyone 
possible to make a small (or large) donation to the Nifty Archives.  The 
Nifty Archivist provides his archival site as a service to the gay and 
lesbian community.  However, he relies upon reader support to be able to 
maintain it.   I was just told that he is averaging over 20,000 hits a day.  
For those who don't know, the more hits you have on your server, the 
more you have to pay to have your site.  "OUR" readership of his site is 
increasing his costs, creating higher server demands, additional 
hardware demands, etc.  It is time we gave a little something back. He 
makes a very modest request for donations at his site, but I'm going to 
make a less modest one:

If we don't support him, we are going to lose this service.  How long it 
will take, I don't know, but unless he receives some financial support it 
isn't going to last forever.

A small core of authors (mind you I said authors, not readers) have been 
making some contributions, but this is not enough to keep the site going 
with the increasing storage space required.  If you enjoy reading the 
stories in those archives, it is time to cough up a couple bucks.   Just 
think that if the Nifty Archivist received only $1 for each of the hits he 
received in just one day,  he'd have enough money to keep his site going 
for quite some time.  I encourage all of you to visit his site and follow the

links for donating to the archives.  I think a small donation is the least 
we can do, considering the large amount of time, effort, and personal 
financial support the Nifty Archivist has put in to provide a service for 
"US".

By the way, these opinions expressed are strictly my own, and the 
information I relayed was forwarded to me by an author, not the Nifty 
Archivist.

Okay, I'll get down off that soap box now =) " 

Sorry, but I don't know the Nifty Archivist's address. Readers? 

Erotic BDSM Story: Linda's Epic Adventures in Life, Part 1 [B-/C+]
When posted: 10/12/97
Where posted: ASSB
Author: Master Paul
Posted by: Monica Chu
Address: ntendo@hotmail.com

In this story, a hardbitten stripper reflects on her first BDSM 
experience: it begins when she makes the mistake of bashing a drunk 
male customer with a beer bottle when he jams his fingers in her pussy 
and asshole. A perfectly understandable reaction, but Hilda, the strip 
club owner's girlfriend, doesn't see it that way. She pulls the stripper 
downstairs to the "special room" the staff uses to discipline its "whores" 
(no self-respecting exotic dancer would stand for such insults these 
days--many of them are unionized, no kidding) and straps her into a 
chair-like frame that rotates. Hilda then inserts dildoes in the stripper's 
ass and pussy and flogs her there.

The B/D gear was nicely described, but outside of that, the story didn't 
have a lot of appeal. Part of it was due to the language: " 'You goddamn 
dumb whore!' screamed Hilda, 'How many fucking times do I have to tell 
you I handle the assholes and you don't ever, ever hit em with anything 
unless they ask you to, UPSTAIRS! "  I wanted to wash the characters' 
mouths out with a bar of soap. This sort of language occured in every 
other paragraph and brought to mind bikers, drug dealers, and other 
lowlifes. While some people may find them sexy, this strata of society 
doesn't do anything for me by notoriety of their substance abuse, 
unkempt appearance, and body odor. 

There were many smaller sins, from grammatical errors to misspellings: 
for example, the writer had the annoying habit of enclosing each 
sentence of dialogue in quotation marks even though the sentences were 
all in the same paragraph. The story also lost effectiveness because it 
was narrated in flashback rather than present tense, which made it lose 
what little momentum it had. 

Finally, it's far more fun in a BDSM story to have the slave victim be a 
newbie, wannabe, or experienced player who juggles their sub 
tendencies with the responsibilities of real life. Strippers, in the public 
imagination anway, are supposed to be total sluts who eagerly enjoy any 
sort of sex act...which meant the kinky bite of the acts in this story were 
diluted by having them happen to one. 

New Spam Story:  1997 Teen Blow Job Tournament [A+]
When posted: 10/12/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Daphne Xu Address: daphne@nym.alias.net

Malinov is running a spam short story contest in which entrants write a 
short (1,000 word or less) story with a title taken from the title of a SPAM 
post. (There is no deadline.) This story was one of the entries. I'm very 
glad I read it.

The story was reminiscent of those Twilight Zone pieces like Dierdre's or 
Seurat's in that an everyday situation suddenly becomes sexualized. In 
this case, it's an intercollegiate athletic competition. But the teams of 
young women aren't competing in field hockey or volleyball. Nude and 
blindfolded, they're giving blowjobs to a team of lucky males. The 
narrator of this adventure is a Chinese exchange student unfamiliar 
with American customs, which gives the story a nice touch: a double dose 
of strangeness worthy of the best literary fantasy out there.

The blowjob competition is thoroughly detailed, and the narrator's 
reactions were believable for a Chinese student in the US. The only part I 
went "huh?" at is the fact the participants were required to cough up a 
$500 entrance fee, which seemed rather steep; some of them were also 
written as being reluctant, which belies the fact that they're supposed to 
be there voluntarily. But this was an excellent story anyway, probably 
the best multiple-partner-teen-sex-in-school story I've seen (there've 
been quite a few of them.) The story ends on a nice note too, with the 
revelation a "Teen Cunnilingus" contest is soon to be held. We can only 
hope.


The Virgin Mary Maguire [A-]
When posted: 10/11/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Deirdre Ng Address: DeidreNg@aol.com

This was a bizarre little story concerning the manipulations of a junior-
high slut among the Catholic clergy and in a corporate law office. Like 
the story above, it takes place in a strange world that's slightly off-kilter

from the one modern teenagers inhabit.

Mary McGuire lives in a time-warp world before Vatican II where 
corporeal punishment still reigns in Catholic school. She's determined to 
stay a virgin, but she's hardly chaste--she gets into trouble when she 
displays her genitals as she's giving a report on female sexuality. Sent to 
Father McMartin's office, she shows him the same marks of Eve, makes 
him wear her sopping panties over his face, then ties him to a chair 
with his shoelaces while giving him a hand job. Merrily leaving him to 
be discovered by the parochial school's board of directors, she 
accompanies her dad to career day at his office. On the way she exposes 
herself in the back of his sedan to truck drivers, then gives his boss a 
handjob and wrangles a promotion for dad and a summer internship for 
herself.

The story was cleverly written and a real page-turner, with some truly 
depraved touches like the creative use of rosary beads. (Hint: it's the 
same thing they were used for in the butter story I reviewed two weeks 
ago.) However, as a reader I just didn't buy it. There's several reasons for 
this. Number one is I went to parochial school in my formative years, 
and from firsthand experience I can tell you that priests and nuns are 
incorrigibly dull, narrow-minded souls rather than sexually intriguing 
ones. Yes, Lady Cyrrh was a Catholic. *Was.* 

Second, the teen in the story talked and connived way too maturely for a 
young girl--she was more Suzie Sleaze than Lolita. She also had a 
mysterious mind control power that was never explained. I half-expected 
she'd reveal herself as the actual Virgin Mary or something, but no luck. 
I also wondered why she was exposing herself before decrepit old men 
instead of sexy peachy-cheeked lads her own age.

In sum, the entertainment value of this story depends on how much you 
enjoy fetishistic Catholic school rituals and smartass teen exhibitionists. 
I'm not a fan of either, but I did like the quality of writing in this piece,

and that's why I gave it the rating I did.

Gee, I just noticed the first, second and third stories of this review were 
all posted by Asian females.


Wrestler's Rhapsody [A+]
When Received: 10/3/97
Author: Cathy Payne
Address: cpayne@sympatico.ca

The author sent me this, and I believe it's the first story I've seen from a 
Canadian woman. Note to the author: You may want to post this now that 
it's been reviewed.

This story crossed several genres: spanking, first time, and wrestler. Uh-
huh. Wrestler. Anyway, the narrator is a homeless teen who is adopted 
by a professional wrestler named Killer and his family. He's big. Very 
big, and he takes his role as guardian quite seriously: he tells her no 
lying, swearing, or brushes with the law. She shapes up under his wing, 
but finds, as she nears her seventeenth birthday, that she is attracted to 
him as well and plans for him to be "the one" who takes her virginity. 
Her plotting includes catching him in a lie and punishing him for it by 
parading around in seven different lingerie outfits, each of which he 
has to unlace (no touching!) before ravishing her at the end of the last 
modeling session. But things don't go quite as planned, and the smug, 
plotting spanker soon becomes the spankee over Killer's burly knee.

This story was very enjoyable and very female-oriented; like Joe 
Parson's "When Morning Comes" it might serve as a good introduction to 
erotica for someone who's always been hesitant about reading it before. 
The story had just the right balance of sex, sexual tension, and 
background; nothing was left inadequately described. There was a also a 
tiny bit of a romance-novel feel to it--not strong, but it was there--
particularly in the banter between the girl and her deflowerer. The only 
suggestion I would make is to give a paragraph or two of background on 
the girl (where are her parents?) but all in all, women who dig 
wrestler's bodies will like this tale, and even those who don't will.


Mint Green Dodge Dart, Part I [A-]
When posted: 10/11/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Mouth Breather Address: mouthbrthr@aol.com

The author says of this story, "The sexual fantasy soon to pour out of my 
head borders on the sophistication of the pre-pubescent."

I wouldn't call it pubescent so much as the kind of light, fun romp that 
authors like DG, Mike Hunt, and Tom Bombadil have done so well. Two 
beautiful, statuesque lesbians hire a stupendously hung guy ("With my 
full payment, I knew, I could get that reduction surgery I had always 
wanted.") to participate in a sexual encounter with them. He arrives at 
their isolated estate in a mint-green Dodge Dart...which I can picture 
exactly...and soon finds out the 10 grand he's getting includes some kink 
when one of the ladies carries a strange leather harness into the 
bedroom with her. No sex occurs, but we're primed.

I enjoyed the descriptions in here, which were slightly reminiscent of 
tough-guy detective fiction. There were a few strange misspellings, such 
as "She lost her composer for a second" but outside of that, things were 
very clean for a first draft. I am looking forward to part two.


Letter to Sarah [A]
When posted: 10/4/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Bear
Address: thebear@io.com

This is one of the first stories I've seen from The Bear. He's also written 
two entries for Lord Malinov's contest.

This story has one of those classic erotica setups that you just HAVE to 
read through. College coed Sarah receives a package in the mail 
containing some sexy Victoria Secret's underthings and a list of 
instructions. She's to go to a certain motel room on a certain date and 
time, let the occupant of the room blindfold her, then dance like a 
wanton slut and present herself on the bed for some serious fucking. 
Naturally, the letter gets her very excited. But the problem is, she doesn't 
know which of her two boyfriends wrote it, Brian or Tom...because 
they're roommates and share each others' computer and belongings. 
Dangerous game you're playing there, Sarah! The story ends as she 
knocks on the motel room door, and Bear says more is to come. I'm 
guessing she gets a double surprise.

The only thing I didn't like about the story was the come-on-my-tits-
and-face-scene. Even though it was prettily described as a "liquid pearl 
necklace" I can't see a young woman being too happy with goo squirted 
into her hair, especially as the lover has neglected her climax in favor 
of his own. Nonetheless, this was a very nice story, and I'd like to see it 
continued.


Objections [A]
When posted: 9/13/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Tigger
Address: tigger@alices.com

A new story by Tigger, always a pleasure. It's one of the most effective 
treatments of femdom I've seen.

The story is science fiction and takes place in a world where Bill and Al 
and the rest of their cabinet perish in a plane crash. Newt Gingrich 
becomes President and foments a Vietnam-like war in Philippines, 
necessitating a new draft. Jerry and Mark are two young men who try to 
worm out, Mark by his "sole male in the family" status, and Jerry as a 
consciencous objector. As a CO, Jerry is sent to a camp high in the 
Rockies where he's transformed into a woman...and a prime baby-
making machine whose duty it is to pop out male cannon fodder for the 
conservative state.

Although this concept is quite horrendous (it's like a TG version of 
Margaret Atwood's "The Handmaid's Tale") the story benefited from 
Tigger's light, amused style, and was richly and authentically detailed as 
well. That's the great thing about Tigger; the stories are so *real.* They 
are also very different from one another; this writer keeps moving on to 
new challenges. I'd like to point out, too, that though the story made me 
laugh, it also has a sobering side as a cautionary tale. 

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