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From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com
Subject: The Annex Reviews 5/21/97
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This is a midweek edition of "The Annex Reviews." For this 
installment we will look at fanfic, firsts, and fantasy. 

"100% Woman, 200% Bitch...." A story for females to read, if you 
DARE [B-/B+]
"Devine Submission" A story for females to read, if you DARE [B-
/B+]
When posted: 5/15/97
Where posted: ASSB
Author: sillygoose@earthling.net

I DARED.

Both these stories were written by the same author; "Devine 
Submission" (sic) is a tighter, shorter rework of "100% Woman." 
Written in second person ("There's a hand stroking your ass...") 
both detail what a nameless man--and his named German 
Shepard--would do to a woman he has tied face-down to a four-
poster bed as they enact his fantasies. Taking the two stories 
together, there's bestiality, licking, humiliation, an enema, a 
three-way, and a doggy-style gangbang as the woman is treated 
just like a bitch in heat, with collar and everything.

As literature this gets a B- for all the misspellings ("kneal" for 
kneel, "Devine" for "Divine" etc.) and the lack of attention paid to 
plot, character and detail, making it unentertaining for the 
average reader. But taking it as the personal jack-off it is, I found 
it hot, hence the B+.

This brings up a discussion of the differences between the 
personal jack-off, porn, and erotica on ASS. All three are sexual 
fantasy, which to my mind is no different than other forms of 
fantasy such as science fiction, epic myths, or sword and sorcery. 
Which is precisely what makes them so interesting, as they 
connect to something deep within the human psyche. To put it as 
simply as I can, erotica has a plot, characters and/or literary 
style, while porn gets you hot as bluntly and quickly as possible. 
The personal jack-off is an open expression of someone's sexual 
desires, often addressed to a lover or potential lover. I'm not too 
fond of these, as the style often requires you to follow the writer's 
instructions ("As you rub your hot, wet pussy...") in a game of 
make-believe that is ultimately pretty pathetic for normal, 
intelligent adults sitting in front of a computer screen. It's like 
those dumb little paragraphs describing the models in Penthouse 
and Playboy. Does anyone really read those things and take them 
seriously? Anyway, these stories were a form of personal jack-off 
in that, at the end, the author wants to know if they turned any 
women on and if they did, to please strike up a correspondence 
with him.

Which brings up the same point Celeste would make: Why would 
any sane woman want to be treated the way the woman is in this 
guy's fantasies? The answer is, IT'S A FANTASY. It exists in a 
murky realm totally unrelated to real life. Could a dog ever be 
well-trained enough to get erect on command and hump a human 
female for more than a few seconds? Would a man really give a 
woman an enema on his expensive four-poster bed without 
rubber sheets? Of course not. I would not want to experience any 
of this in real life, nor is it one of my fantasies, but it sure is fun 
to read about it, putting yourself in the position of a voyeur of 
these activities. It's the IDEA that is the turn-on in the fantasy, 
not the identification with the characters in it, which is what 
people often forget when they judge these fantasies. So, there's 
no way in hell I would take the German Shepard owner up on his 
rather graphic come-on, but it was enjoyable reading about it.

These stories bring up another point. Are there any women out 
there who sincerely like being called "bitch" "slut" and "whore" 
in a demeaning way in the course of sexual activities? That is, 
really dig it, as opposed to just pretending they do to make their 
partner happy.


The next three stories come from our friends in the United 
Kingdom.

"DiscoSlut" Story by Suzie SleaZe [A]
When posted: 5/17/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Suzie SleaZe
Address: 101445.2670@compuserve.com

Suzy Sleaze likes being called a slut.

Hot, extremely raunchy porn as Suzie Sleaze and her sleazy 
husband Mick dress up in white lycra and white leather and go to 
a disco, where they participate in exhibitionistic dancing, then 
have a gangbang in the men's room which includes pissing on 
each other. If this author is indeed a female, and the story 
reflective of her own fantasies, she truly glories in being 
happily depraved. After every act you think no, she can't 
possibly can't get any sluttier, then she does...like a female 
Terminator coming back for more. At times all the cum, saliva, 
and piss reminded me of preschoolers smearing fingerpaints all 
over each other. This is surprising to me as most of the female 
fantasies/stories I've read don't go into enthusiastic descriptions 
of body fluids that much--it's more of a male thing. It may be that 
"Suzie Sleaze" is really a man writing about a fantasy woman. 

But maybe not, as it's also clear Suzie is in control of her own 
behavior and is acting out of her own desires. She's not a victim; 
she's an aggressor. She makes being a filthy slut empowering, in 
a way. Stick that in your pipe and smoke it, femdom!

Sylistically, there was something out of date about this story--I 
can't decide if it's meant to be retro-hip or that the author is still 
enmired in a 1970s world of Jackie Susann novels, Cosmopolitan 
magazines, discotheques, and tight exercise clothes. After all, 
these days the hip go to raves or ambient clubs with house music. 
In baggy jeans that hang off their asses. But when something is 
this hot and slutty, who cares?


Kathy [B]
When posted: 5/16/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Lisa Cohn
Poster: mrdouble@ix.netcom.com

Thirteen-year-old Kathy takes a train ride alone to visit her 
father. She meets a boy her own age and has her first sexual 
experience. Not rushed, not brutal, not exploitive, but inquisitive, 
innocent and sweet. 

Although I personally liked the story enough to give it a higher 
grade, what knocked points off was that it took so long to get to 
the sex, and the author was not a skilled enough writer to create 
reader interest with the buildup. There are also inconsistencies: 
for example, it's mentioned Kathy's seen her brother's cock 
before, but when she sees the boy's she states that it's her first. 


The Spa [C]
When posted: 5/15/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Steve <Suckle@HotPickle.net>

One bland couple goes to the house of another. In the course of 
drinking wine in the hot tub, they share their fantasies, and 
wind up having a foursome.

You wouldn't think a four-way would be boring, but it came off 
that way. Michael did this. Jenny did that. Then Mary joined in. 
Put slot A in slot B, fold flap over. This was supposed to be 
someone's actual experience...but, like most real-life experiences, 
sex acts need embellishment and a good storytelling technique to 
make them something interesting to hear about.


Disney erotic fanfic [A]
When posted: 5/17/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Various
Poster: "Col. Kink" <no@no.no>

A batch of Disney-related erotic fanfic has appeared lately where 
the familiar cartoon characters do things old Walt, or even 
Michael Eisner, would be shocked at. You might wonder what 
kind of adult would pervert a child's movie like this, but the truth 
is all of these were playful in spirit and lots of fun. Of course, the 
nice thing about writing fanfic is you only have to work on the 
plot--the characters, settings, and the descriptions of them 
already being familiar to the reader and writer from the film, 
comic or TV show. There were more of these than the ones I've 
reviewed here, so if you want to find the rest, I suggest a search 
using the keyword Disney.

Although all posted by the same person, these stories appear to 
have been written by different authors, some of whom are 
credited, some not. Note to reposters: In the future please include 
the name and email address, if known, of the original poster. It 
makes it easier to facilitate correspondence with them and result 
in the generation of more great stories.

Disney: Ariel's First Masturbation 
Author: ?

One of the things that always bothered me about Disney's "The 
Little Mermaid" was her name. "Ariel" is the name of an air sprite 
(in Shakespeare) and the Little Mermaid lives in the sea. Wouldn't 
Undina be more appropriate? Anyway, a sweet little story 
detailing Ariel's examination of her new human body. Not 
excitingly sexy, but a logical development from the movie.


Disney: Little Mermaid in Bondage - Part 1 
Disney: Little Mermaid in Bondage - Part 2 
Author: ??

The author's titles for these two are "Prince Eric's Amusement" 
and "Ariel's Continuing Education."

After her wedding Ariel discovers her new husband is into BDSM. 
He introduces her to the delights of his dungeon. The scenario 
follows the standard newcomer-to-the-scene plotline with some 
unique twists from the movie: instead of nipple clamps, Sebastien 
the crab uses his claws, and for another torture Ariel is double-
plugged and forced to swim in a skintight mermaid sheathe fin. 
This was the best-written of the stories that I read and the most 
true to the characters--Sebastien, Flounder and Ariel really 
WOULD act this way in this situation. There's also a plea for sexual 
tolerance (Prince Eric says, "Anything that takes place in private 
between consenting adults is legal and exempt from royal 
censure.  It's only when it involves real abuse or children that 
the Kingdom takes an interest.") with an interesting side plot 
about gay mermaids and mermen coming out from "under the 
shell."


Disney: Jasmine's Rape
Author: Pencildragon (address unknown)

Jafar escapes from his lamp in the Cave of Wonders and conspires 
with his parrot Iago for sexual revenge on Aladdin and Jasmine. 
Cute, not brutal, despite the title. There's B&D between the 
enspelled couple, then Raja the tiger pleasures Jasmine with his 
tongue, then Aladdin is changed into a woman for some lesbian 
sex. There were two more Jasmine stories I didn't read: "Jasmine's 
Monkey Business" and "Jasmine's Wedding Night." On author Elf 
Sternberg's homepage (www.halcyon.com/elf/journals) there's 
some more Jasmine stories listed under "Other fiction." 


Disney: Tickling (Cinderella, Ariel, Belle, Jasmine) 
Author: hlprice@prairienet.org

The title the author gave is "The Wonderful World of Tickling."

The framing device between these four vignettes is that the 
protag has a magical video camera that lets him travel into 
cartoon-land (as in Ralph Bakshi's "Cool World") to film well-
tickled Disney heroines at their most  helpless. This one was 
hilarious. No sex, unless you consider tickling a form of sex. My 
favorite was when the talking mice have a go at licking 
Cinderella's clit.

Hmmm. Let me repeat the question I mentioned first. What kind 
of adult would pervert children's movies like this?


Lady Cyrrh@ aol.com

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