Celestial Reviews 284 - May 30, 1998
Note: Several people have inquired about my recent absence. No
problems.... My husband just made me an offer I couldn't refuse and took
me away for a sudden vacation, which in turn required me to plan school
activities before I left and to catch up when I got back. My husband's
sudden romantic interests reminded me of the following story:
A man comes to a doctor and, twitching his fingers and stuttering,
finally managing to say, "Doctor, I have a sexual performance problem.
Can you help me?"
"Oh, that's not a problem for us men anymore!" announces a proud
physician. "They just came out with this new wonder drug, Viagra, that
does the trick! You take some pills, and your problems are history."
So the doctor gives the man a prescription and sends him on his merry
way.
A couple of months later, the doctor runs into his patient on the
street. "Doctor, Doctor!" exclaims the man excitedly, "I've got to thank
you! This drug is a miracle! It's wonderful!
"Well, I'm glad to hear that," says the pleased physician. "What does
your wife think about it?"
"Wife?" asks the man, "I haven't been home yet."
Second note: An Irish gent came into the pub and said to the barkeep,
"Mike, I'll be havin' three whiskeys."
Callahan set up three glasses and began to pour. "Now, Timothy, it's not
the usual thing for you to ask for three whiskeys. Is it celebratin',
you are?"
Timothy sighed: "Ahh, ye know me too well, Michael, ye do. Truth, and
I'm celebrating me first blow job."
Callahan smiled benevolently and set a fourth glass on the bar. "Now,
that's special," he said. "For an old customer like y'rself, here's a
fourth on the house, so I may be sharin' your celebration with you."
Timothy shook his head, and replied "Tis verra kind of ye, Michael; but
I'm thinkin' if three won't get rid of the taste, four won't either. "
Third note: A little old lady with blue hair entered the marital aids
shop and asked in a quivering voice, "Yy-young man, dd-do y-you sell-
dildos h-here?"
The salesman, somewhat taken aback by the little old lady's appearance
in his shop, answered "Uh, yes, ma'am. We do."
The little old lady, holding her quivering hands about 10 inches apart
asked, "D-do y-you ha-aave any ab-bb-bout th-this l-long?"
"Well, yes ma'am, we do. We have several that size."
Forming a 5" circle with her fingers, she then asked, "A-are an-nny of
th-them about thi-is b-big ar-round-d?"
"Well... Yes, a few of them are about that big."
"D-do aa-ny of th-them ha-ave a vv-ii-bra-a-ator?"
"Yes, Ma'am, one of them does."
"W-Wel-ll, h-how d-do y-you t-turn it off?"
Fourth note: A priest and a minister walked into a bar. After sitting
down, ordering, and some chit chat the priest said, "Have you noticed
there are no women in this bar?" He then realized the truth, "I think
we're in a gay bar."
A man approached and tried to flirt with the priest. The priest was
dumbfounded, and didn't know what to do. The minister leaned over and
whispered something in the man's ear. The man nodded and walked off.
The relieved priest said, "Thanks. What did you tell him?"
The minister replied, "I just told him we're on our honeymoon."
Final note: Remember: even though someone else may be posting my reviews
for me, my e-mail address is still Celeste801@aol.com.
- Celeste
New Reviews:
"One o'Clock Jump" by Taria (music & sex) 10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=353594030
"Diary" by Bruce AKA mcbeam (mind control & breast gtowth)
8, 8, 8
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"A Yank in the Outhouse" by David Shaw (war-time sex)
10, 10, 10
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"Taxi Tales: Lost and Found" by Delta (quietly sexy episodes)
10, 10, 10
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"Diary of a Voyeur" by J. Reynolds (voyeurism & exhibitionism)
10, 10, 10
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Guest Reviews:
"Cleanliness is Next to Ecstacy" by John Galt (ff sex)
10, 10, 10
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"The Cruise" by Tonya (shipboard teen romance) 8.5, 6.5, 6
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"My Sexual Odyssey" by darla (sexual escapades) 9, 7, 6
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"The Japanese Student Nurses" by Gordie D (naive but
naughty nympho nurses) 9, 7, 8
http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11090.txt
"Under the Moons of Eden" by Christopher Leeson
(sci fi sex) 10, 10, 10
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"Hypno-tricked Wives" by Watcher (entranced matrons)
10, 10, 10
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"In the Moon That Is Always Rising" by o_rofrano@hotmail.com
(lyrical sex) 10, 9, 8
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"Susan Jennings" by Morgan (triumph over extreme evil) 10, 8, 7
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"Amy Swallows" by Walker (oral sex) 7, 7, 7
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"Rush Hour" by Robert Mitchell (public sex) 10, 9, 8
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Reposted Reviews:
* "Fantasies" by BitSlinger (sexual fantasies) 9, 10, 10
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* "Friday" by Uther Pendragon (anon584c@nyx.net)
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* "Funhouse" by RC (mind control) 10, 9.5, 9.5
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* "Mating Flight" by D.A. Ignatius (dragon sex) 10, 8, 5
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* "Not Quite Hidden" by Fin Haddie (exhibitionism) 9, 8, 9
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* "Dating Ritual" by Michael K. Smith (rough adolescent
sex) 10, 10, 10
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* "Chosen" by Tom Bombadil (ff passion & sex slavery) 10, 10, 10
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* "Exquisite Error" by Eric Shon (mistaken identity) 10, 10, 10
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* "The Birthday Party" by Losgud (romantic birthday weekend)
8, 8, 9
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* "Feed the Night" by Brother Cadfael (lesbian vampire sex) 8, 9, 8
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Since Last Time and Now in Celestial History
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CR#85 - May 18, 1996
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* "Midnight Symphony" by D.A. Ignatius (dreamlike sex)
10, 10, 10
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* "For Celeste" by Grammaticus (poetry) 10, 10, 10
Not Archived -- lost forever?
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CR#86 - May 22, 1996
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* "Commencement" by Vickie Tern (coerced feminization)
10, 10, 10
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CR#87 - May 25, 1996
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* "The Gathering" by Patrick Donovan (romantic group sex)
10, 10, 10
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* "Cocktail Table" by Sue (orgy) 10, 10, 10
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CR#88 - May 29, 1996
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* "A Night at Suzy's" by Mark Aster (tasteful orgy)
10, 10, 10
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* "Angelic Interlude" by Joe Parsons (meeting the cyber-
lover) 10, 10, 10
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"One o'Clock Jump" by Taria (tariat@aol.com).
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She went to a dance,
Looking for romance,
Saw Barbara Ann....
Ooops! Right spirit, but wrong song.
The novel twist of this story is that it involves the reader in the
seductive mood of the music.
It's Dirty Dancing on alt.sex.stories. No wonder the bible thumpers
object to dancing.
This is a good story, but it's impossible to describe it properly in a
prose review. Hungry for the right combination of music and sex, the
woman goes into what I'll prosaically refer to as a dance emporium. She
meets a man and dances seductively with him. He wants to take her to a
quiet place for some sex, but she instead goes with him to an adjacent
dark room, where they have sex to the beat and rhythm of the nearby
music. Then they go their separate ways.
A very nice story indeed.
Ratings for "One o'Clock Jump"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Diary" by Bruce AKA mcbeam (Bmauger317@aol.com)
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The author describes this as an experimental attempt to tell a tale with
no dialogue. There is indeed none. The narrator is some sort of
clinician who takes women under his control and makes their breasts grow
extremely large.
I think mind control authors have the odds stacked against them. They
have to make sexual activities sound interesting without any free will
or seduction, and those elements are what make sex most enjoyable for
most of us. The author tries to put some seduction into the story, and
is fairly successful in this effort. However, the awkward grammar and
extremely objective style sometimes become tedious.
This is a decent but not great story.
Ratings for "Diary"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"A Yank in the Outhouse" by David Shaw (shaw_david@hotmail.com).
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First, let's clear up a linguistic ambiguity. An outhouse in England is
not the same thing as one in America. In England, the term appears to
refer to any house outside the main house. In the United States an
outhouse is a primitive toilet facility employed in areas where there is
no running water for flush toilets. Aside from the hole through which
one shits and pisses and the aroma that pervades the place, the most
familiar characteristic of the American outhouse is the crescent-moon-
shaped window on the front door. I would add that in the United States
the outhouse usually contains a crapper, whereas in this story the
outhouse contains a copper; but you would have to read this story to
understand what that means.
This story takes place in England during World War II. The narrator is
a very conservative British lady who lives in a very rural area, stays
away from bars, and teaches Sunday School. A fortiori she's a virgin.
The men are off fighting Hitler, and war is hell on the homefront too.
Our Heroine is assigned to deliver a bottle of wine as a gift from the
Vicar to two distinguished ladies who have moved to the countryside to
avoid the blitz; and she is surprised to discover when she peers through
the window of the wash house that they are really nothing but a couple
of prostitutes servicing the serviceman who has come a-calling.
What she sees resembles getting a bull aroused for a tupping session
with a cow.
After she watches for a while, she gets caught; but what the heck - that
just means that she gets to join the action.
This story makes some far-fetched assumptions - for instance, not all
pure little voyeuristic Sunday school teachers become enthusiastic
courtesans the moment they get caught and threatened with rape; but they
won't strain the credulity of people who frequent alt.sex.stories. But
overall, this was a very good story.
Ratings for "A Yank in the Outhouse"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Taxi Tales: Lost and Found" by Delta (delta@nym.alias.net).
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The cab driver is working on the Fourth of July. I don't think they
have a Fourth of July in England - go straight from July 3 to July 5, or
so I hear anyway. The cab driver is driving a young couple who are
ignoring him and making out very heavily in the back seat. I think they
do that sort of thing in England as well as in the colonies, or so I
hear anyway. It's called voyeurism or exhibitionism, depending on your
point of view.
And then the night just rolls along.
This story isn't blatantly sexy - just quietly sexy - full of the
ordinary things in the life of a taxi driver - things like finding a
pair of panties on the floor of the back seat after a young couple
departs, having to air the cab out before the next customer, and then
having the last rider tell the driver to take her to his own address.
This was another very good story.
Ratings for "Lost and Found"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Diary of a Voyeur" by J. Reynolds (cepheus42@hotmail.com).
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This author made one of the most common mistakes that occur on this
newsgroup: he posted the story without title in the textfile and with
his name only at the very end of the story. I downloaded the story; but
since it was a long one, it was identified simply as 49f46c77.txt. By
the time I went to read it, I no longer knew what I was reading. It's
surprising how many authors do this - and how many readers simply ignore
otherwise good stories simply because they're not labeled correctly.
The point is this: always put the title of your story and your name and
e-mail address at the beginning of the actual textfile that readers will
download; do not assume that this information will be available just
because you think it is listed on a title line - those title lines
disappear and cause inconvenience when stories get downloaded.
Having said that, I'll add that this is a very good story. As its title
suggests, this is the journal of a man who likes to look at women,
resorting to such strategies as arranging furniture so that his
secretary will be positioned for proper observation, peering through
binoculars, hanging out in the mall's food court with a newspaper as a
prop and perhaps a duffel bag concealing a video camera, and riding
escalators at just the right distance to see a woman's panties - or the
absence thereof, as sometimes is the case. His imagination is also
quite active, and he also gets hard and shoots his wad at what I would
consider to be awkward times.
But then the story takes an unusual twist - or several unusual twists,
as fantasy merges with reality and the hunter becomes the prey. To find
out what that means, you should read this story.
Ratings for "Diary of a Voyeur"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Cleanliness is Next to Ecstasy" by John Galt (email not stated). Guest
review by Baird Allen (aka The Bear, thebear@io.com).
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=346712557
The author states that this story is a continuation of prior stories
about the residents of Hornville, Celeste's hometown. I haven't followed
the earlier stories, so I can't say anything about how well this one
fits in, but it is a fine story all by itself. Martha is a divorcee in
her late thirties who has not had any romance in her life since her
husband ran off some years ago. She accidentally walks in on her cousin
Rose while Rose is pleasuring herself in the bathtub. Martha is
surprised at how stimulated she is by the sight of Rose, and fantasizes
about the event afterward. The story moves along, teasing and
tantalizing, as Martha and Rose each realize that they are sexually
attracted to the other. The climax, when it comes, is worth the wait.
I'm not a big fan of FF stories, but for some reason Celeste keeps on
sending them to me. This one was actually a pleasure to read. Not only
was the story well-written, but the sex was romantic and exciting. I
expect that a person who really likes FF stories will especially like
this one.
Ratings for "Cleanliness is Next to Ecstasy"
Athena (technical merit): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Bear (appeal to reviewer): 10
"The Cruise" by Tonya (tonya@dialnet.net). Guest review by jubjub.
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Story Summary: True story of two teenagers on a ship.
The author of this story claims it is true. You wouldn't know it from
the way this story is told. There is a singular lack of emotional
impulse. Some of the descriptions seem good, but the lack of emotional
build-up in these scenes kills much of the eroticism. The style is flat
with some stilted cliches. There were also a few annoying punctuation
errors and some spelling errors.
The characterization in this story is vital to its success. With
liberal hints about exhibitionism from the start, I expected to read
something about how the narrator felt about being watched. Instead--
nothing: one short segment with a greater emphasis on the fact that she
was only fifteen (he was seventeen) and a postcoital mention that they
were being watched by a couple who were doing the same thing.
Another problem was some of the expected plot disappeared. The cruise
was to the Bahamas (note to author: it's NOT the Bahama Islands) with a
mention of walking on the beach. But none of this materialized. For
all the reader knew, they spent most of the cruise keeping their hands
OFF of each other. This was said explicitly in the one short paragraph
that described the majority of the cruise. I felt cheated. There is so
much potential in the idea of exhibitionist sex on a cruise to the
Bahamas.
That said, the sex described is fairly good. The major problem I had
was that the scenes seemed cut short. With the rest of the plot
virtually nonexistent, this left me feeling blah. Nice story with
vastly unrealized potential.
Technical: 8.5 Very good but stylistically flat. A few annoying
punctuation mistakes.
Characterization and Plot: 6.5 Exhibitionism/Voyeurism not
played up enough
Appeal: 6 Sex scenes need more emotional buildup
"My Sexual Odyssey, Pt. 1" by darla. Guest review by Nick (e-mail:
Nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk).
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This is a little difficult to review because it is to be continued. So
many stories stand or fall by the ending (or "denouement") -
particularly short ones. So I have to assume that there is no ending and
that this may run and run.
"First, let me describe myself. I'm 5' 5" tall, 110 lbs, blonde and
36DD-26-35."
This is not generally a promising start. A story is about describing
events, not images. Readers are perfectly capable of drawing their own
favorite images; and if they happen not to like the image that the
writer describes, then the author has lost them to the rest of the
story. I, for example, am not turned on by 36DD breasts (it does turn
out that these are implants, but I don't like those either).
The first part of the story is spent drawing up a sexual profile of the
subject and her menfolk, which is quite interesting; but I couldn't
quite get the "Barbie and Ken" image out of my head. These characters
have only one dimension and are rather plastic.
The rest of the story chronicles various sexual exploits which have
contributed to her sexual development. Again quite interesting, but
there appears to be no central theme - nothing to pull this together.
Now, just keeping my eye on the ball, here, this *is* a sex story posted
to titillate the reader, which it does reasonably well. So what if it
doesn't have much conventional literary appeal? Many people who will
read this will find this a thoroughly enjoyable piece. It is well enough
written and there were some definite buzzes in it.
My own marking system would give it 7 for technique, 4 for plot and
character (again, without an ending I can't really give it much more)
and 6 for personal appeal. Normalising for Celeste the ratings are:
Athena (Technical) 9
Venus (Plot & character) 7
Nick (Appeal to Reviewer) 6
"The Japanese Student Nurses" by Gordie D (gordond103@aol.com). Guest
review by DG.
http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11090.txt
This is a pleasant, reasonably hot story about an American guy traveling
in Japan who finds himself in the enviable position of instructing a
pair of 18-year-old Japanese sisters in the basics of sex. The sisters
are student nurses; and when the narrator wakes up in the hospital after
a minor traffic accident, he finds one of them peeking under his blanket
at his morning woody. Turns out the poor gal was raised in a rural area
with little social interaction, and doesn't know anything about the
birds and the bees. The American manages to set up a date for dinner
that night, overcoming the nurse's shyness and embarrassment at being
caught peeping. At dinner time, the nurse shows up with her twin
sister, who is equally uninformed about matters of the flesh but much
more outgoing. From that point things progress rapidly in the
predictable manner.
What I liked best about this story is that the narrator is a good guy.
He takes things slow, respects the girls, and ends up having a great
time. No Ugly American syndrome or underage exploitation in this story.
The only real flaw in the story is that the inexperience of the twins is
overdone to the point of unbelievability. Virgins who have never heard
of oral sex I can believe, but these 18-year-olds don't even know that a
penis gets hard or that people have sex for pleasure. That quibble
aside, I found this an enjoyable read.
Ratings for "The Japanese Student Nurses"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 7
DG (appeal to reviewer): 8
"Under the Moons of Eden" by Christopher Leeson (cdl25@usa.net).
Guest review by Robert (Citizen@GalaxyCorp.com).
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In the 22nd century, humanity is at war with the alien Asymmetrics.
During a pitched battle, a human troop transport ship is captured and
towed to an alien world. The soldiers are then abandoned on the surface
with no way to return home.
The planet seems nice enough - an agreeable climate and an ecology not
unlike Earth's. The troop is getting along fairly well until, one day,
two men disappear. The next day, two women are found.
This is the sort of story that, for me at least, defines transgender
fiction. Christopher's stories tend to explore the emotional
consequences of transgendering, and this one does so exceedingly well.
The characters are sympathetic and believable; they react and suffer in
real, human ways when something inexplicable happens to them. In fact,
the tale reads like a good SF novella.
What this story _isn't_ is a silly masturbatory fantasy. There are few
sex scenes, and the first doesn't even occur until well over halfway
into the story. Though infrequent, the sex is tastefully done and
occurs at points that are logical within the context of the tale.
If you enjoy engaging, realistic characters who are forced to come to
grips with emotional and mental trauma, then this is the story for you.
Ratings for "Under the Moons of Eden":
Athena (technical quality): 10 (no complaints)
Venus (plot & character): 10 (keeps the reader engaged; very
difficult to put down)
Citizen (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Hypno-tricked Wives" by Watcher (llxzt@hotmail.com). Guest review by
Sandman (sandman@bitsmart.com).
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On the May the 15th I signed off the net, sure that I wouldn't return
until the middle of June. But I found myself with four unexpected days
off at the end of the month and so had some time for the net. When I
signed off, I had printed out a few stories to tide me over while I was
gone. One of those stories was this small novella by Watcher.
The premise of the story is that our hero and his friend use hypnotism
to create several sexually provocative situations among the neighborhood
wives. Normally I'm not a fan of mind control stories because they are
usually a crutch to avoid things like plots, conflict, and resolution
all very important elements to any story in my opinion.
Really when you boil this story down to it's core, it's little different
from other mind-control stories in that the Mind Control element is used
to bypass the normal restrictions that prevent everyone from just
immediately stripping and having a grand old time. What is different is
the way Watcher chooses to execute the mind control.
Yes the women are exploited, although current theory suggests someone
doesn't do anything under hypnosis that they really wouldn't do in real
life. But the hypnotism is used to do horribly trivial things like
giving the guys a good view of a women in her (gasp) panties! What you
ask? No, you are my slave, bend over and service me commands?
Nope. What we have here is very, very effective peeking and the
occasional copped feel. Compared to the other stories here and
especially considering the genre this story was almost PG-13 compared to
the normal XXX. Why then did I get so excited when a guy copped a feel
of a woman through her blouse?
Sometimes a story like this comes along and reminds us all that less
sometimes really is more. There's sex in this story, and there's an
amazing amount of very exciting voyeurism. I found myself anticipating
and looking forward to the next situation our protagonist would set up
next and I found this a refreshing and wonderfully well written story
well worth the read on those long, lonely nights when you have to forgo
your network access.
Ratings for "Hypno-tricked Wives"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Sandman (appeal to reviewer): 10
"In the Moon That Is Always Rising" by (o_rofrano@hotmail.com). Guest
Review by Morgan Preece.
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=354649368
This is an unusual story. The author claims that it is a first erotic
story, but I think obviously not a first story. Few writers could
achieve such an effect on a first attempt at writing a story of any
kind.
Not to praise the piece too highly, but this is my favorite story of
those I have reviewed for Celeste. It has a lyric quality that would not
work in another context for the story has it's own musical
accompaniment.
Encourage a promising new talent, read the story and send your own
honest opinion to the author. Please.
Athena (technical quality): 10
(My first ten. So shoot me.)
Venus (plot & character): 9
(Plot. Uh, well the story isn't about plot. I've said that before and I
find it is true of most erotic fiction. The characters are romantic
ideals as befits a story about romantic ideals.)
Morgan (appeal to reviewer): 8
(My highest rating here, also. Maybe it was my mood, I lost my current
job about twelve hours ago and I needed some fun reading.)
Grade for a hypothetical class in writing for ASS would be an "A" and "I
dare you to do it again" with a smiley. :-)
I am large, I contain paradoxes.
Guest Review: "Susan Jennings" by Morgan. Guest review by BillyG
(hayden@mindless.com).
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=347041782
The story "Susan Jennings" - quite long at almost 39,000 words - is a
very emotional tale of the triumph of good over near-incomprehensible
and despicable behavior. The wrongdoing initially found its origins in
the behavior of military commanding officers in a Vietnamese POW camp
and later in a broad-based conspiracy to shift blame and suppress
evidence.
Three senior officers, two men and one woman, colluded with the enemy
for their own gain at the terrible and unbelievable expense of their
fellow men and woman in the POW camp. One woman, an Army nurse named
Susan Jennings, at a terrible price, attempts to save the lives of her
fellows, and almost dies in the effort. Still, among others, she saved
the life of one woman certain to die and suffers the price of that
attempt by being flogged with a bull whip and then crucified.
She's saved from that near-death by a Marine officer, but the gods
aren't finished with her, for she and the Marine end up in a cave,
hiding from the enemy. The Marine is shot in the leg and Susan performs
mind boggling surgery under primitive conditions to save his life. The
details of her subsequent heroics are long and impressive.
Both the woman she saved in the POW Camp and the Marine officer go on to
extraordinary successful lives, but Susan Jennings unexplainably
disappears for years, only to surface, emaciated, worn, ill and
tattered, the victim, it would appear, of a concerted effort to keep her
suppressed.
Her friends, the Marine officer and the woman from the POW camp have
both become extremely wealthy, powerful and remain steadfastly loyal to
her. They move mountains to successfully bring about her recovery and
clear her name by uncovering the plot perpetrated by the evil officers.
If you enjoy a story of righteous retribution, you may like this one.
The good people are wronged to incomprehensible depths and then win out
over the bad guys in the end. I didn't much like the story, but
nevertheless found myself becoming emotional several times.
First, while there are a couple of token and even pathetic sex scenes,
this is not even close to an erotic story. The sex scenes could be
taken out entirely and the story would lose none of its emotional
impact. I've spent just enough time around the military to appreciate
how thin and contrived that portion of the story was, and more than
enough time in operating theaters to smile at the heroine's battlefield
surgical technique. Still, this isn't a story about tactical warfare
and it isn't a medical story, so we can overlook those shortcomings.
I suppose I reacted to the exaggerated characters in this story.
Everything and everyone was simply too much. Too much to believe and
too much to be real. Susan, for instance, emerges as a cross between
Joan of Arc, Wonder Woman and Job. Too many times I thought, 'Oh, come
ON.'
The story has a Hardy Boy, ferry tale quality that employs exaggeration
over-much to the point where reality flies out the window and Marvel
Comics barges in the front door.
Ratings for "Susan Jennings"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
BillyG (appeal to reviewer): 7
"Amy Swallows" by Walker. Posted by Kristen78 (Kristen78@aol.com) Guest
reviewed by Poison Ivan.
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355958875
Walker's high school girlfriend Jamie fucks, sucks, and does anal. But
there is one thing Jamie absolutely refuses to do: she _never_ swallows.
When I was in high school, refusing to swallow was not a problem we
dwelled on much. But I suppose times change.
Fortunately for Walker, Amy is available as a soft shoulder to cry on.
They have a telephone relationship, and it eventually comes out that Amy
has no hang-ups about gulping goo. A little flirty back and forth, a
few starts and stops, and eventually Amy and Walker end up on the roof.
Walker gets the blow of his life.
This story could have been a very good one. Where did Walker's sexual
expectations come from? Why did he feel compelled to cheat on his
girlfriend? Was it really just the swallowing? I got a hint of guilt
feelings, but just barely a hint. And his telephone relationship with
Amy felt unreal to me. I give the author a lot of credit for setting up
something that could have been great. I just wish he had followed
through better.
The spelling and grammar were not great, but the sex on the rooftop was
reasonably well described. But ultimately, this story left me feeling a
little cold.
Ratings for "Amy Swallows"
Athena (technical quality): 7
Venus (plot & character): 7
Ivan (appeal to reviewer): 7
"Rush Hour" by Robert Mitchell (). Review by Nick (e-mail
Nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk)
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=354407609
This is a short story about an encounter between the narrator and a girl
in a crowded tube train in rush hour.
Who hasn't been here before? Men and women crushed together in confined
space - something's bound to happen, even if its only inside the head!
Well the subject matter certainly appeals to me.
The scene setting is good and, as I said, I'm sure most people would
empathize with the situation. It's certainly realistic enough, although
one wonders if, however confined the space, the "contact" described
wouldn't be carefully avoided.
But here:
"Maybe she would think it was just an elbow or something" (referring to
his hard-on pressed up against her bum.)
I started to laugh. An elbow!? For the rest of the story the smile
didn't quite disappear - not really the intention I think!
His fly is unzipped, her skirt lifted and she has an orgasm ....in a
crowded tube carriage with no one noticing. Nice work if you can do it,
but I'm afraid I couldn't quite handle it.
My own ratings are: 8 for technique - good enough, but short. 7 for plot
and character - nice story, well described characters, but credibility
suffered. 7 for appeal to me.
Normalising for Celeste:
Athena (Technique) 10
Venus (Plot and Character) 9
Appeal (to me) 8
* "Fantasies" by BitSlinger (bitslinger@hotmail.com). I believe this is
this author's first story. It's also an entry in my Celestial Christmas
story contest. I am happy to have stimulated the author to enter upon a
promising writing career.
The basic plot is that the wife has become interested in fulfilling her
husband's fantasies; but he's reluctant to share them, because he's
afraid he'll scare her off. Most recently she has noticed his interest
in a sexy little elf at the mall, and so tonight she has seduced him in
an elf costume. Eventually she manages to pry some fantasies out of
him, and she rewards him by acting them out with him and enjoying them
herself.
The fantasies are actually pretty tame by a.s.s. standards, but I
enjoyed them. Except for a few occasional flaws in verb tenses, the
author shows a good sense of timing in his integration of the fantasies
and the real-time sexual activity. I look forward to seeing more
stories by this author.
Ratings for "Fantasies"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Friday" by Uther Pendragon (anon584c@nyx.net).
{Note: I originally reviewed this extremely short story as "Mind Games"
back in CR 248.} This is one of those really good stories that I can't
tell you anything about. The best I can do is give you a related
anecdote. Back when my husband and I had been married for two years and
I was heavily pregnant with our first daughter, we went to a wedding. I
introduced him to two sweet, religious, elderly ladies who know me from
long ago. One of them politely commented that it had been a lovely
wedding. My husband replied, "Yes. I hope ours goes as well next
month." The expression on the ladies' faces as they glanced at each
other and tried to avoid my gravida stomach was priceless.
This story is sort of like that, but with strangers on elevators. And
with an unusual twist at the end.
This would have been an excellent entry for my 500-word story contest,
except that it has 802 words.
The main problem with this story is the title. At the top of the title
page, the title is "Friday." In the Postings, however, the title is
"Mind Games." Since you'll never find it if you look under "Friday," I
have chosen to label it "Mind Games" for this review.
Don't do this with strangers - the part about sheep, that is. The
elevator part is perfectly OK with strangers. It can enliven elevator
rides. As well as what comes later.
Ratings for "Mind Games"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Funhouse" by RC (74734.271@CompuServe.COM). If you have ever
ridden the "funhouse" ride in an amusement park, you have no doubt
noticed that there is a side track that does not follow the normal
route. You have perhaps wondered where that track goes. The two
women in this story find out. As their car nears the entrance, the
female operator smiles mysteriously and pulls a lever that sends
them into a dark, hypnotic area that Deirdre would be proud to
call her own.
This is a good story, but it does not exhaust the full potential
suggested by its setup. Since it has been over three months since
my last Annual Celestial Writing Contest, I hereby proclaim
another. The only requirement is that the story has to include a
funhouse theme. Any sort of funhouse theme that includes sex will
do. Send entries to me by April 30. I'll announce the winners
and review all entries shortly after the deadline. Authors will
be encouraged to post their stories at that time as well. In the
previous two contests we've obtained some great "Locksmith"
stories and "In Flight" fantasies. I look forward to receiving
your entries. If you submit early, I'll even give you feedback
that might help you improve your story.
Ratings for "Funhouse"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9.5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
* "Mating Flight" by D.A. Ignatius (jash@kuhub.cc.ukans.edu). The
sex in this story is a little more animalistic than that to which
I am accustomed - literally. By that I mean that this story
describes a mating ritual between two dragons. Authors have a
right and I guess maybe a need to stretch the wings of their
imagination, but I'm not a dragon person. In spite of what I just
said, this story did hold a certain fascination for a while; but I
just didn't know or care enough about those creatures to remain
permanently interested. I suppose a person married or engaged to
a dragon or who keeps one in the back yard might find this story
more interesting than I did.
Ratings for "Mating Flight"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5
* "Not Quite Hidden" by Fin Haddie (sgoodman@primenet.com). David
heads for the beach and is turned on by the attractive women he
passes. He lies down by himself in a secluded spot and notices a
woman working over her lover in the grass nearby, where they are
unobserved by everyone except David. As he watches and gets
turned on, the woman turns toward him; and this causes David to
explode into a very pleasant orgasm.
This story was posted as Florida2. I suppose it goes with the
preceding story, but they are relatively independent. Even when
they are combined, they are not a complete story; but the sex in
each is still pretty hot.
Ratings for "Not Quite Hidden"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
* "Dating Ritual" by Michael K. Smith (mksmith@metronet.com).
This is a vivid description of a date during which the fifteen-
year-old girl is forced by peer pressure to engage in sex that
isn't very pleasant for her. I'm sure many people will read this
as a description of a really great date or of the "good ole days."
I found it to be a brutally realistic but sad story. I never went
out on a date with a boy who forced me into anal sex or made me
lick his cock clean after he stuck it into my ass. {I might add
that although I myself enjoy consensual anal sex; anal rape is
likely to be painful and unhealthy. The anal orifice doesn't
self-lubricate during arousal, as does the pussy; and so when some
jerk forces himself in, the activity is likely to tear tissue.
This may sound like fun; but it can lead to medical problems. In
addition, anal rape in real life is a very good way to get and
give AIDS.} I never dated anyone just to prove that I could take
his cock just as well as any other slut could. I know girls who
acted like that, and I don't know any of them who look as happy at
this time of life as I feel. I guess I'm lucky I bought into my
parents' system of morality and self respect.
I try not to do moral lectures, and I know there are no teenagers
reading this review or this story. Here is my lecture. Don't do
what they do in this story. Have sex only with someone you love
and trust. But it's OK to read this story as soon as you're old
enough so that nobody is breaking any laws.
This is still a good story. I just suggest that you think twice
if you think this sounds like a lot of fun. I don't think the
author saw it that way, nor did I.
Ratings for "Dating Ritual"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Chosen" by Tom Bombadil (stbush@iglou.com). The woman is a lawyer
aspiring to become a partner in an important law firm. She receives a
letter telling her that she has been "chosen." She thinks it's a joke
and tosses it aside, but then she discovers that several other people
(including her boss) know about her selection and consider it to be an
important honor.
At this point I paused and noted to myself that this author is on a
Deirdre binge. If he's trying to imitate Deirdre, I told myself, then
the least I can do is imitate my reviews of Deirdre. That means I
should try to predict the ending. This shouldn't be hard. The woman
will resist briefly but within a day will accept the invitation and
arrive at the designated place. She will be met by a stern woman whom
she will eventually learn to address as Mistress. She will find herself
naked in a room with lots of other naked women, and within a couple of
weeks she will learn to answer to the wishes of whoever happens to be
her Master or Mistress. This whole new lifestyle will make her
eminently but mysteriously happy.
Well, I was close. I won't bother you with the details of where I went
astray. The interesting thing is that even though I had a pretty good
idea where the story was probably going, the author held my attention
all the way up to the end of the story. The constant state of tension
was really well maintained. The author himself said he was disappointed
with this as a "Deirdre-esq." It's a bit long for the Deirdre genre,
but I thought he did an excellent job. In fact, I think he did a better
job here than in "Deck," where he thought he had finally reached Deirdre
euphoria. Like Deirdre's stories, this one lets the narrator make
seemingly logical choices that get her into a really bizarre situation
involving sexual taboos. Also like Deirdre, the author maintains the
tension of the story masterfully; and most importantly, at the end all
of the details make perfect sense. With many of Deirdre's stories I
have been left with the impression that "this is a silly story but I
can't explain why." That's the reaction I experienced at the end of
this story: it made no sense, but yet it made perfect sense.
Ratings for "Chosen"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Exquisite Error" by Eric Shon (EricShon@aol.com). The man met the
woman via email and telephone conversations. They are just good friends
(not lovers), but he visits her and stays in her daughter's bedroom,
since the daughter is out of town at her father's house. Since he has
the same first name as the daughter's boyfriend, when the 17-year-old
returns unexpectedly in the middle of the night and finds him in her
bed, he has no idea how he is going to get out of this predicament, but
he knows for damn sure WHAT he is going to get out of it!
To learn more, you'll have to read the story. It's a good one!
Ratings for "Exquisite Error"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "The Birthday Party" by Losgud (lushgod@hotmail.com). Guest Review by
DG.
I reviewed a story by losgud a while back, and while I liked the story,
I complained about the jumpy, stream-of-consciousness style, which I
found a little distracting. In this story, the author has reduced the
aimless rambling and concentrated on the narrative, and the result is,
in my opinion, a better story.
The narrator and his wife have birthdays a week apart, and he is trying
to arrange a romantic birthday weekend alone without the kids. But his
sister seems determined to ruin his plans. First she refuses to look
after the kids. Then, when he finally gets everything arranged, she
comes over to visit with his wife and refuses to leave. I don't think
any longtime a.s.s. readers will be astonished to find out what happens
next, but suffice it to say that the weekend lives up to expectations
after all.
Losgud has a flippant, casual narrative style that I enjoy, and I found
the sex in this story to be quite arousing. There's nothing spectacular
about this story, but it's a good, sexy read.
As a side note, losgud mentions that this may be his last story, because
he feels he is wasting his time and isn't getting much feedback.
Although I feel as an a.s.s. author that the writing has to be its own
reward, there is something very uplifting about receiving email from
people who enjoyed your stories, and if losgud isn't getting any (pun
intended) I can see why he would get discouraged.
Ratings for "The Birthday Party"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 8
DG (appeal to reviewer): 9
* "Feed the Night" by Brother Cadfael (Brother_Cadfael@earthcorp.com).
Guest review by DG.
I always like to see some originality in a sex story; so when I realized
that "Feed the Night" was a tale about a pair of lesbian vampires, I was
intrigued. One vampire, Jezebel, makes a habit of picking up exotic
dancers at a local strip club and feeding off them. The none-too-bright
owner of the club is always complaining that his dancers never show up
for work again after Jezebel takes them home. As the story opens,
Jezebel picks up a dancer named Andi and takes her back to her place for
a drink. But Jezebel likes Andi so much that she turns her into a
vampire instead of feeding off her, and they begin a torrid affair.
Then they both start having strange, ominous dreams about the same dark
man, and it is up to the new vampire, Andi, to save Jezebel from her
past.
I liked the plot and characters in this story, but I thought the
execution could have been a lot better. The middle section, when
Jezebel and Andi are both recovering from the conversion of Andi into a
vampire, drags a bit. And I didn't really find myself getting into the
sex scenes very much. As much as I enjoy watching women have sex with
each other, I really don't enjoy reading about it all that much,
especially when it's written in the third person by male writer. I
guess I need to be able to identify with one of the characters to really
get turned on. On the positive side, the story does have a mysterious,
gothic atmosphere and an ambitious plot. If you are a fan of erotic
vampire stories, a la Anne Rice, you will enjoy "Feed the Night."
Ratings for "Feed the Night"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 9
DG (appeal to reviewer): 8
* "Commencement" by Vickie Tern. The four pairs of husbands and
wives have gathered at one of their houses to celebrate Super Bowl
Sunday - the men in one room doing manly things like watching the
game, drinking, belching, and making fun of their wives; and the
women in a nearby room doing more cerebral things but hearing and
being offended by the coarse discussion in the adjacent chamber.
Something needs to be done to teach these assholes a lesson.
So how do we get from what I've just described to "Commencement,"
the title of this story? The women develop a strategy to educate
their husbands - not just to get even with them, but to
rehabilitate them; and the completion of an educational program
calls for a commencement. Hence the title. I'm not going to try
to describe the entire rehabilitation program to you, except to
say that it involves both hormones and careful training. And a
butt plug - for those of you who know about such things. It's an
ingenious program; read about it for yourself. The plan worked so
well that one of the wives eventually began thinking she might
rent her husband out as a call girl for perverts when the project
was finished.
The story is presented in the context of one woman talking to
another. While telling the story, the narrator is functioning in
a world in which stereotypical male and female roles have been
reversed - for example, she's running the business that her
husband used to operate, while she gives orders to an effeminate
male secretary who is kind of dimwitted but functions well if she
instructs him carefully and while her husband stays at home and
keeps himself and the house pretty.
The manuscript contains several typos, which I easily ignored. In
addition, verb tenses were sometimes confused; but I assume the
author was doing that on purpose to simulate the erratic
conversational context in which the story was being presented. I
have learned to expect from this author really clever plots with
an eccentric feminist twist; and this story did not disappoint me.
The plot is farfetched, but it's so crazy it just might work! The
part I found hardest to believe was that the women could do this
to their husbands without laughing in their faces.
This is the fourth story I have read by this author, who has also
written "Sooo Sweet," "Nice!", and "Girls' Night Out." I liked
all three of the others better - but that's pretty high-class
company! {I liked Julius Caesar best of all of Shakespeare's
plays; but I wouldn't want him to feel that I was saying the plays
he wrote after Caesar were "bad." Some acts are hard t ofollow.}
My favorite has been "Nice!" What this one lacked was the
surprise twists in the plot that I found in the eralier stories.
Maybe I'm just catching on to the author's style and am not so
easily surprised any more.
One thing this author does extremely well is cover all the
possible explanations for what is happening in an exceedingly
complex plot; and she accomplishes this without making the story
tedious. This is not a turn-me-on story; but it is a highly
enjoyable, funny, thought-provoking tale.
Another excellent story!
Ratings for "Commencement"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "The Gathering" by Patrick Donovan (drwho@world.std.com). The
man's lover has come from a distant city to visit him in
Indianapolis. After he and Kathryn have made passionate love
several times, another couple arrives unexpectedly for a visit.
Kevin is a professional masseur, and his girlfriend is one of his
best students. After the spend the evening out, they return to
the apartment, where Kevin and Nancy offer to give Kathryn a
massage. The narrator joins in, and the massage becomes much more
than simple physical therapy - it becomes VERY physical therapy
indeed.
I'm not going to try to describe in detail the ensuing orgy -
except to say that it's some of the hottest sex I've ever read. A
potential turn-off to some readers (but not to me) is the fact
that there's male/male sex as well as variations more common to
group sex stories in this newsgroup. I suggest that you just be
open-minded and enjoy it, even if that's not your style; otherwise
you'll miss a great story.
Ratings for "The Gathering"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
*"Cocktail Table" by Sue. Sue accepts an invitation to a party
from some graduate students who admire her literary work. After
the initial fuss over her arrival, everyone sits around in a quiet
circle with their hands on their laps while Sue reads "Slippery
When Wet" to the group. Everyone gets turned on by the splendid
reading, and the spokesman for the group suggests that Sue may
want to leave before the ensuing orgy begins. Sue chooses to
stay. Actually, Sue tells it better; so read the story.
I shall now respond to the one unanswered question in Sue's story:
the plural of "clitoris" is "clitorises". Interestingly enough,
my spellcheck recognized this plural, even though it failed to
recognize "anally," "Sistine," "dominatrix," and "supermodel." I
verified this plural in my unabridged dictionary, where the word
is found right after "cliticize" (the meaning of which may
surprise you) and on the same page with a picture of a cloister.
Talk about a screwed up value system! The dictionary defines
clit, clitoris, and cliticize (and 101 pages later gives three
definitions for cunt, which happen to come right before Mario
Cuomo - now there's a coincidence for you), but it gives a picture
of a cloister instead of a clitoris! I mean, how many readers in
all of history have looked at the definition of a cloister and
said, "Damn! I wish I had a picture to clear this up for me!"
Sorry about the digression; but Sue did raise the original
question in her story.
{Well, now that I have already digressed, I might mention that I
did a double-take during proofreading - 101 pages of definitions
between clitoris and Cuomo? Yes, that's right. Yesterday a
prissy student came up to my desk and told me that another student
- who was disgruntled over her grade - had called me "the c-word."
I asked her to be more specific, but she couldn't utter "the c-
word" out loud. She doesn't realize how truly ambiguous her
accusation was!}
This was a very enjoyable story. I have only one problem with it,
and that problem is akin to the play within a play theme that
often occurs in Shakespeare. When Sue has six guys shoot their
jism all over her body (never mind the cunt juices that are
flowing like milk and honey) - when she gets her pastry frosted by
six guys at once, whose record is she breaking? (Not mine,
certainly!) She compares it to the four guys whose snorkels she
cleared in "Slippery When Wet," but that's a work of fiction, and
is recognized as such even in the present work of fiction. Sue
herself is actually a most demure person who probably isn't even
named Sue and almost certainly has not participated in Onan's
Olympics with more than two male partners at the same time. So
what we have here is a fiction within a fiction and how do we know
that even that is not fiction? In other words, that that is not
is not that that is. (I was tempted to replace "in other words"
with "that is" in the preceding sentence, but then the thought
would have become confusing.)
Sorry. Even though I am a most cunning linguist I just never had
a chance to say that last sentence in a meaningful context before.
If you're ever in danger of premature orgasm, try repeating and
understanding that sentence, and it will probably keep you from
coming at least until your partner catches up with you.
Ratings for "Cocktail Table"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
*"A Night at Suzy's" by Mark Aster (MyFrThAl@aol.com). It's Orgy
Night at Suzy's, and the gang has prevailed upon a renowned
goddess of a.s.s. to bring some high quality stories from her
extensive collection to read aloud as a mood setter. By
coincidence the author of Celeste's Pick of the Week happens to be
present; and as luck would have it, everyone likes everyone else
and a good time is had by all.
I have to admit that I am flattered to become part of such a hot
evening of sex, but I want to assure you that flattery in no way
influences my ratings. The author knows this, and I suppose
that's why he toned down my sexuality a little. No offense taken.
There's not much to say about this story: read it - you'll get
your bang for your buck.
This author follows a practice that few others follow. He writes
his story, lets a couple of weeks pass, and then revises the story
before he posts it. This takes discipline, but it is often worth
it. I know Mark does this, because he sent me a copy of the draft
three weeks ago, asking for permission to defame me in the way he
has done in this story.
Ratings for "A Night at Suzy's"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Angelic Interlude" by Joe Parsons (jmp@cyber-mall.com). The
man and woman have communicated for some time through cyberspace.
They have never met, but she has described her fantasies of what
she would like to do to him. Now she is coming to visit him in
person, and he is waiting for her plane at the airport. Her name
is Angel; hence the title.
I guess almost everybody who reads stories on this newsgroup has a
fantasy of this happening - even those of us who have no intention
of ever consummating such a relationship. Of course, this is just
the cyberspace version of the old honky-tonk romance that the
country-western singers tell us about. The odds are actually
pretty remote that a guy will have the three best orgasms of his
life within an hour after getting out of the car in a wilderness
clearing after picking up his mysterious lover at the airport.
But isn't it pretty to think so?
So the storyline is trite, but it's well written and just plain
hot sex.
Ratings for "Angelic Interlude"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10