Celestial Reviews 91 - June 15, 1996
Note: I have been receiving more requests than usual that ask, “Where can I
find these excellent stories that you review?” It is really impractical for me
to send stories to individual readers or even to respond in practical detail
to this question. If an author sees a review of his/her story reviewed, I
would encourage him/her to repost it.
It's OK with me if authors attach my review; as long as they don't change it.
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of that story as soon as possible. If you contact me when you repost, I'll be
more likely not to miss your story.
Since readers have often commented that they cannot find the stories I
have reviewed, because they disappear from the posting services too
rapidly, I have implemented the suggestion of posting the author's e-
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posted story anyway. Please remember that the best way to get the
story is from the postings. (If a thousand people read a story and all
thousand of them request it directly from the author, this would be an
unreasonable burden.) If this policy poses an inconvenience to
authors, I would appreciate it if they would let me know.
One good idea is to look for stories written by authors you have
learned to respect. In Question 16 of my FAQ I list several authors
whose stories I myself look for.
Finally, one reader tells me that he has almost set up a Web page that will
include all 100 of my reviews of the Top Stories of 1995 along with the actual
stories. This is almost too good to be true, but I think the page will be
ready within the week. Watch this space for further announcements!
- Celeste
“Sweet 16” by CGStories (rape) 3, 3, 1
“Love Letters with a Cyber Virgin” by Lee J Kool (cybersex
fantasy) 6, 4, 2
“Lipstick” by SweetSprng (submission & humiliation)
9, 8, 6
“Freshman Daze” by Ptolos (high school sex) 7, 7, 5
“Picnic” by RC (sex in the outdoors) 10, 9, 9
“Tammy's Game” by Tammy Ng (virtual sex) 10, 10, 10
“Intrusion” by Joe Parsons (Quickie) 10, 7, 7
“Tonya Harding: Slave-Girl” by Your Friendly Author
(therapeutic sex slavery) 10, 10, 10
“Sandwich” by Frank McCoy (childhood incest) 9.5, 7, 7
“Encounters” by LibbySweet (ff romantic sex) 9, 9, 9
“Please Speak into the Flowerpot” by Mark Aster
(surveillance sex) 10, 8, 9
“Sweet 16” by CGStories (an453065@anon.penet.fi). The burly black
bartender accepts the girl’s panties from the equally black rapists and
puts them in a drawer with lots of others. “Another white bitch is
going to lose her cherry and probably get a black baby in her belly.
All the panties in the box are from white girls, all teenagers. High-
class, pampered young bitches who come in for a beer, and get fucked
instead.” The Naked City has a thousand tales to tell, and this is one
of them.
On the eve of her sixteenth birthday the night has taken a turn for the
worse for Cindy.. Her boyfriend has brought her to a bar in a
disreputable part of the city, where the bartenders never ask for ID.
Therefore, he hoped to get her drunk and pop her cherry. But he went
to take a leak, and now these assholes have taken his place and have
told him to go away while they rape his girlfriend.
Guys who ejaculate whenever they think of a white pussy and a black
cock will most likely enjoy this story, even though I’ve already told
you all the good parts. More discerning readers will notice that this
story has a few loose ends. Like why doesn’t the boyfriend just call
the cops when the rapists tell him to leave? Or what would keep the
police from looking into the drawerful of panties when they
occasionally investigate a rape? Or why hasn’t word leaked out by now
that little white bitches should avoid this place if they don’t want to
be serviced by nasty black studs?
The story ends with Cindy over eight months pregnant - with twins yet.
She’s seriously upset, but she has decided not to tell her parents that
the father is a black man. That would disgrace both her and her
family. Assuming her parents are no smarter than anyone else in this
story, they will probably never notice - unless, of course, the twins
are boys who grow up to rape white girls in sleazy bars.
Good grief!
Ratings for “Sweet 16”
Athena (technical quality): 3
Venus (plot & character): 3
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 1
“Love Letters with a Cyber Virgin” by Lee J Kool
(ljkool@concentric.net). This is a story that evolved from a cyber-
romance - private communications that have been proclaimed to
constitute a “story.” The introduction ends with a cryptic warning:
“If you're under eighteen, don't read this. It's too sexy for you.”
That’s not true. This story should be required reading for all
children; they would be so confused that they would probably lose
interest in sexual activity.
As near as I can figure, the two lovers meet in a cafe somewhere in the
desert and then walk through a cornfield where the leaves rustle under
their bare feet until they go into a barn that has a stairwell leading
to a four poster bed where the guy ties the girl down and drives her
out of her mind before she returns the favor for him. Much of this is
impossible or at least unlikely, but I think the authors were trying to
be surrealistic. It was very difficult for me to figure out who was
doing what to whom. The grammar was largely incoherent (e.g., one
author used no capital letters - I think for some unknowable stylistic
effect - and the other was inconsistent) and the hand-offs from one
writer to another were clumsy.
I think this story was probably very meaningful - possibly even
beautiful - for the two people originally involved in the cyber
romance. But I couldn’t get interested in it myself.
Ratings for “Love Letters with a Cyber Virgin”
Athena (technical quality): 6
Venus (plot & character): 4
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 2
“Lipstick” by SweetSprng (sweetsprng@aol.com). Sweet is the name of a
lady who is the sextoy of a dominant guy named Fred. The story is a
fairly clear description of how Fred makes Sweet do sexy things and
eventually humiliates her in the restroom of a restaurant. She is
willing to submit her strong and willful nature to Fred’s control, and
from this submission Fred derives a rich and heady feeling of power.
For her part, by giving herself over to Fred, Sweet feels a freedom
that she has never known before.
I have read a lot of D/s stories, and I certainly look at some of them
in a different light than I would have a year ago. I recently watched
a TV talk show in which a woman was being interviewed after breaking up
with her dominant boyfriend. Nobody in the audience could understand
that the breakup had nothing to do with the apparent abuse; the woman
stated that she found it sexy to be humiliated by her former boyfriend.
The breakup occurred because she “felt a need to grow.”
This story does little to enlighten non-believers like those in the
talk-show audience. However, if you’re already a True Believer who can
understand why a woman would be attracted to a guy who would take her
into the men’s restroom and humiliate her, then you’ll probably like
this story.
Ratings for “Lipstick”
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6
“Freshman Daze” by Ptolos (ptolos@aol.com). The girl is a high school
freshman and the guy is a junior; and so I guess that’s why the term
“sophomoric” popped into my mind when I read this story. It gives a
brief description of the joys of feeling a girl up and popping her
cherry out in the bleachers while the principal is inside giving the
introductory speech to kick off the new school year. This is not great
literature - just the written version of what 80% of high school guys
claim to have done about twice a week.
Ratings for “Freshman Daze”
Athena (technical quality): 7
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5
“Picnic” by RC (74734.271@CompuServe.COM). The man is a bit upset
because his wife is late picking him up after a hard day at work.
Eventually he realizes that she is not taking him home, and his
interest and lust begin to increase. She takes him to a secluded spot
in the park - the spot where they first made love a long time ago. The
picnic basket contains not food but sextoys. A good time was had by
all. And hypnosis - somebody got hypnotized - or did he?
Ratings for “Picnic”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
“Tammy's Game” by Tammy Ng (Deidre Ng@aol.com). A friend of mine once
tried to introduce me to the Japanese game called Go. I was bored with
it and told her I would rather play a game called Cum. Tammy Ng has
hit upon the same idea from a different perspective. Her insight is
that men seem to be overly excited about video games that involve war.
Not only do the games consume vast amounts of time that their lady
friends would like to see put to better use - these games also develop
attitudes that are at least mildly inimical to romance. Tammy’s
solution is to develop an arcade game that focuses on bringing Virtual
Tammy to orgasm. Bonus points would be given for keeping her in a high
state of excitement until the final, blissful explosion. This
libidinous recreation would have the advantage of getting guys
intensely interested in activities that possess socially redeeming
values. Persons successful at the game could transfer their newly
developed skills to the partners whom they would normally ignore while
playing games like Mortal Kombat.
Tammy describes two versions of her game in detail. I think there is
great potential here. It would be fun if other authors would build on
this idea by suggesting alternate versions of this game or by writing
stories about people who participate in such a game. It would also be
fun to see somebody develop the actual game!
Ratings for “Tammy's Game”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
“Intrusion” by Joe Parsons (jmp@cyber-mall.com). The author is in real
life the operator of a phone-sex service. He writes these stories as
commercials. I hate the phone-sex ads that fill up a.s.s. and
a.s.s.d., but I enjoy Joe’s advertisements. I respect a person who
gives me something to entice me into his service; and if I ever do call
a phone sex line, I’ll be sure to think of his. In fact, I may even
give his number to those religious fanatics that keep coming to my
door.
This is a very short story about a quickie. It’s not a bad story, but
there isn’t much to it - just wham, bam, thank you ma’am. I guess
that’s OK, but Joe has written much better stories.
Ratings for “Intrusion”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7
“Tonya Harding: Slave-Girl” by Your Friendly Author
(an587309@anon.penet.fi). What did that sweet little ice skater do to
deserve all the vituperation she receives on this newsgroup? An even
better question - what would possess an apparently sane man to write
over 40,000 words about this fair damsel and her evil step-sister
Nancy? Beats me!
In this story Tonya receives Abuse Control Therapy from Dr. David
Liebenschmerz, a kindly psychologist who comes upon Tonya in a Portland
park while she is in the throes of depression over the unjustly
negative vibes she gets from everyone around her. The doctor
volunteers his services to help Tonya regain her self-concept and
resume her normal, adaptive lifestyle.
First the good doctor gives our miscreant mistress of the ice a severe
beating - 50 whacks on the bare buttocks with a sturdy paddle. This
hurts like hell and raises welts; but Tonya finds it to be sexually
stimulating and resolves to continue the treatment, which will take
place on the Liebenschmerz country estate. I honestly think I myself
would feel something other than sexual arousal if someone did this to
me; but Tonya is - to say the least - an unusual and mildly
dysfunctional person, and so I accepted this reaction as plausible.
After all, the bruises from the beating were nothing a little
masturbation couldn’t cure.
The story is a veritable Odyssey filled with wonderful events. The
enema and catheterization sounded a bit uncomfortable, but Doc
Liebenschmerz helped out by pinching her clitoris until she relaxed.
Being blindfolded, gagged, and (of course) bound in the back of a van
traveling down a highway while possessed by an urgent need to defecate
and go wee-wee helped Tonya develop self control. Everything for a
purpose!
I almost forgot to tell you. Dr. Liebenschmerz has an assistant: Nancy
Kerrigan. As you may recall, she was Tonya’s archrival at the Olympic
debacle who subsequently made snotty remarks during a parade at Disney
World. This might sound like a framework for a catfight story; but Ms.
Kerrigan is here as part of the therapy. You’ll have to read it
yourself; its kinda hard to explain. Basically, Tonya has to confront
her guilt and/or pay the piper.
Dr. Liebenschmerz is actually a humanitarian. This therapy is good for
Nancy as well as for Tonya - and he gets a few jollies himself.
Mistress Nancy tortures Tonya, and naturally Tonya has to find a way to
make amends to the Goddess of Ice. I wonder how she’ll do that!
OK. So I couldn’t resist having a little fun with the plot; but I
don’t think the author will object. I really don’t like torture
stories; but there are certain people - including the goody-goody
characters in televised fiction and a few celebrities like Saddam
Husein, Joey Buttofucko, and Tonya Harding - who fall outside my rules
of normal morality. Even Ghandi would enjoy reading about these people
suffering discomfort and ignominy.
The author is quite creative in his presentation of the story. He
mixes pleasure and pain, reality and dreams, sense and nonsense - all
these in such a way as to make even me wonder what the hell would
happen next. We even get high-quality bestiality - mostly in authentic
Freudian dream sequences. And there’s much more. Eventually, I was
forced to admit that there was a certain logic to the plan - this
therapy was so crazy, it just might work! I doubt it, but it beats
anything else I can think of to reform Tonya - assuming Mother Theresa
is unavailable.
Ratings for “Tonya Harding: Slave-Girl”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
“Sandwich” by Frank McCoy (mccoyf@millcomm.com). This author posted
several stories this past week. I have time to review only one of them
here. "Sandwich" is a game that the narrator played as a child. One
sibling would be sandwiched in bed among the three others, while they
frolicked naked in the pre-dawn hours before their parents woke up -
and whenever else they got a chance. The game can be played by
anywhere from two to as many as want to join in. It's best when at
least three players are involved, and probably better if there are more
boys involved than girls, though not necessarily. The lucky person in
the middle gets to be the "filling" and has every hole stuffed (if
she's a girl) or both holes stuffed and his prick buried in someone
else's hole, if he's a boy. The game even has a scorekeeping system.
For example, a player gets two basic points, for each person he/she
gets off simultaneously. The narrator had an almost unfair advantage at
collecting bonus-points, since she could usually start climaxing the
moment she felt one of her brothers’ cocks slide up into her overheated
little pussy and didn't stop until the last of them had gone limp and
soft inside her. Guys can’t do this - at least not in the real world.
But the brothers didn’t seem to mind.
In real life, of course, this game would be a really asinine idea.
There’s a sensible balance between repressing children’s sexuality and
having them fuck one another’s brains out. I thought the story was
pretty juvenile; but I guess that’s the idea - the narrator is supposed
to be a 13-year-old exploring sex with her brothers.
I don’t mean to spoil the ending, but their mother eventually catches
them in the act. At first she seems upset, but then she says, “What
the hell, you might as well finish. But I don’t condone this sort of
thing.” Then (and only then) the big brother explains to the little
girl that she might be pregnant. This could be unfortunate, because
inbreeding often leads to lowered intelligence in the offspring; but
that may not be possible in this family.
Ratings for “Sandwich”
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7
“Encounters” by LibbySweet (LibbySweet@aol.com). A woman who has
recently broken up with her girlfriend is walking along a beach,
feeling drawn to romance by the general ambiance. An extremely sensual
and free-spirited woman calls out to her and joins her, and soon they
are exchanging backrubs and eventually orgasms. This story supports my
theory that most sensible women can enjoy hot sex without having a
penis on the scene.
Ratings for “Encounters”
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
“Please Speak into the Flowerpot” by Mark Aster (MyFrThAl@aol.com). My
relatively low ratings (low for this author, that is) occur because
this is simply a vignette, not a complete story. What we have here are
sounds and only sounds - what private investigators might hear, for
example, as they sit in their cleverly disguised utility truck,
listening through earphones to the sounds they can pick up from the
tiny microphone they cleverly hid in the flowerpot of the people under
surveillance. This leaves a lot to the imagination - and that can be a
lot of fun!
Ratings for “Please Speak into the Flowerpot”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9