Celestial Reviews 69 - Mar 13, 1996
Note: I am now using a rating system, which gives each story three
discrete ratings. These are explained in more detail in my FAQ, but
here is a summary.
Athena Rating. This rating covers such matters as grammar, spelling,
formatting, and creative use of the language. A story with essentially
no serious grammar, spelling, or usage problems will receive a rating
of 8. To get a rating of 9 or 10, the author will have to do something
creative with the language.
Venus Rating. This rating describes such matters as plot and character
development.
Celeste Rating. This rating describes how much I myself liked the
story.
Second Note: A critic recently posted a comment entitled "Reviewing
Celestial Reviews." He was critical of my dislike for mindless sexual
violence. He referred to the stories I review (or at least those which
I like) as "plain vanilla sex." The critique was well written, and he
may be right in his view that it may be valuable to explore the nature
of sexual violence for its own sake.
I want to say two things in reply. First, I'm not sure that plain
vanilla is the right term for the stories I like. I mean, I have
recently given high ratings to stories by Deirdre, Wollstonecraft, and
Deidre Ng (to name just a few). Are these plain vanilla? Plain
vanilla probably describes to my own sex life, where I engage in really
loving sex with this really nice guy that I have loved for a really
long time. We even close the bedroom door and don't invite the
children to join us. I recommend plain vanilla, but my fantasies and
the stories I enjoy are at least hot chocolate.
Second, I do agree that there can be more purposes to a good sex story
than romance or turn-on fantasies. I do NOT think that all erotic
stories should necessarily lead directly to an orgasm. To digress
slightly for just one sentence - I personally believe that there is
meaning to life; but in the world of non-sex novels I really enjoy the
French existentialist novelists like Camus whose novels dramatize the
notion that life is meaningless. In the same way, I think it is
reasonable to expect that there would be good stories whose perspective
or world view regarding sex differs from my own. I think the
introductory scene from the movie "A Clockwork Orange" was absolutely
outstanding; I can no longer watch the movie "Singing in the Rain" (or
even hear the song) without thinking of it. If I would review "A
Clockwork Orange" as a sex story, I would rate it 10, 10, 10.
The trouble is that many of the stories that I have seen on a.s.s. that
approach violent sex are simply simpleminded stories with plots that go
like this: Man (or gang of men) rape (and/or torture) woman. Men have
great time displaying cruelty and ingenuity. Woman feels bad at first
but eventually has great time and begs for more. I admit that I have
stated that women who respond this way have emotional problems. If
this is a "bias," I confess to it. But an awful lot of people would
agree with my assessment.
Note that I HAVE given high ratings to sexually violent stories - when
there is a sensible logic behind the violence or when the story is well
written. Maybe I am naive, but I consider some of Deirdre's and
Wollstonecraft's stories to be violent; and I have given those stories
high ratings. I have repeatedly used the example of Poe's "Telltale
Heart" - a story that describes in graphic detail something I find
distasteful but nonetheless is a great story. And incidentally, I do
think some of Poe's characters had emotional problems - and that's
putting it mildly.
Part of my "bias" occurs because I tend to read mostly stories that are
sent to me or those whose titles attract me as I glance through the
postings. I'll try to be fair to the more violent stories; and it
seems likely that my "tripartite" ratings may enable me to be more
objective.
- Celeste
"Desire" by Deirdre (anal sex & spouse watching) 10, 10, 7
"Plan" by Deirdre (bondage) 9, 8, 6
"Stars" by Deirdre (ff adolescent attraction) 10, 9, 9
"Bird Watching in French Lick" by M.M. Twassel (romance)
10, 8, 8
"Fresh Air and Exercise" by Mark Aster (sex in the
great outdoors) 10, 8, 8
"Aurora Drake" by Mark Aster (hot sex in a mansion)
10, 9, 9
"Dream Come True" by T. Jones (cybersex) 7, 8, 7
"Captured" by TorTress (torture) 10, 10, 9.5
"To Boldly Go" by The Krazmeister (sci fi sex) 4, 4, 3
"How I Met Pat and Julie" by Mark Aster (hot threesome)
10, 10, 10
"The Neighborhood" by Hardy Har (adolescent sex binge)
7, 7, 7
Desire" by Deirdre. Deirdre's back! I thought I had reviewed all of
her stories, but then I discovered five that I had not reviewed. They
will be reposted around the time this review appears. This first story
is about a woman who comes home hot with desire for her husband and
discovers him having anal sex with the guy next door. How will this
affect their relationship? Will everything come out all right in the
end <groan>? This story works itself to an interesting conclusion.
Ratings for "Desire"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7
"Plan" by Deirdre. Here we have a really shy, plain woman who suspects
that others are into what she calls "kinky sex," and she longs to be
like them. She eventually works herself up to reading books and
watching videos that contain the kind of sex she thinks about. You'll
have to read the story to see how she eventually gets what she wants.
There's an awful lot of build-up to a very short climax in this story.
Not that that's bad - I just thought you might want to be warned.
Ratings for "Plan"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6
"Stars" by Deirdre. The high school girl has to wait around for her
friend at a party where everyone is pairing off - er, grouping off -
for sexual fun and games. She is shocked to see one of her favorite
female teachers from the high school having a good time at the party.
Eventually she gets drafted to drive the teacher home; the teacher
makes a pass at her. The girl passes on the pass - and wonders what
might have been. But wait! It's the ole story-within-a-story trick!
The tale I just summarized is actually a short story written by a young
high school girl who has a crush on her female English teacher; and she
has just shown the story to the teacher; and she's hoping that her
feelings will be reciprocated.
This was a creative story. My only problem is that I could not figure
out why it was entitled "Stars." I ran a search for "star" in the
story, and I found that the word appeared five times embedded in the
word "start" and four times as part of "stare." It also appeared twice
as in starlight; so I guess that's the significance of the title.
Maybe the title was a decoy: "Story" would have been a giveaway; and
"Teacher" was already the name of another Deirdre story. Ignore the
title; just check this one out!
This story also specifically raises the question whether everybody's a
little bit bisexual; but after the reaction I got last time I raised
that question, I'm not going to touch that one with a 10-foot dildo!
Ratings for "Stars"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"Bird Watching in French Lick" by M.M. Twassel (WEGalen@aol.com).
Ann's father is worried about the love life of his daughter and her
husband. Rob is a lawyer and a runner, and he sometimes puts his
marriage on the back burner. Dad arranges for them to take a second
honeymoon at French Lick, the home of Larry Bird, the best basketball
player since Michael Jackson. Meanwhile, Ann worries about her aging
parent. The story is more a slice of life than a sex story - although
sex does play an important role, especially in the ending. In fact,
I'll tell you the last few words of the story, and you still won't have
even the slightest chance to guess the ending:
"Oh, Rick," I thought, "I do love you." Then I finished
him off.
Even after you finish the story, you'll have to pause and think what
those words mean. And even then, you may not be certain. Personally, I
think the narrator bit off more than she could chew.
This was a good story, but it rambled a little too much for my tastes.
I would have liked to have seen it tightened up a little - it needed
more focus; there were too many loose threads in it.
There are a few things we need to get straight. First, Celeste is a
fine name - even for a cat; but naming your cat Celeste and referring
to it as a sex kitten will not necessarily get you a high rating for
your story. Second, running for an hour or so a day does not
necessarily detract from the male libido; in fact, it can develop
really nice buttocks and leg muscles that wrap very nicely around their
female counterparts. One of the best ways to deal with male runners is
to join them. Even if you run in the middle of the pack in a 10K race,
the scenery can be pretty nice - depending on whom you're running
behind. Third, do you know what you call two lawyers tied together to
a heavy rock at the bottom of a lake? A good start.
Ratings for ""Bird Watching in French Lick"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"Fresh Air and Exercise" by Mark Aster (MyFrThAl@aol.com). Some
readers have commented to me that they are impressed that I can turn
out two lengthy sets of reviews each week. Actually, my job is not all
that hard - as long as I can find the time to read the stories. Good
stories trigger a reaction in me that makes it easy for me to say
something interesting. As I have grown accustomed to the job, I have
let more of myself flow into my reviews; and I think readers enjoy
this. And even bad stories trigger a reaction of some sort. So my
main burden is meeting a deadline.
The people that really impress me are the authors who come up with
really creative ideas. Up to a month ago, for example, I had never
heard of Mark Aster. Then one day he sent me a story, which (as I
recall) I rated a "5." Since then I have received more stories at the
rate of 2 to 4 a week. I realize that he's working from a bit of a
backlog - but my question is, where does he get all these creative
ideas? Maybe people who can do this just have a hot sex life - or
fantasize a lot while they masturbate.
The last time I left Our Hero and the Allen Sisters, they had just
crashed after a bad drug trip accompanied by some grotesque sex. Here
they clean it all out of their system with some good clean rapture in
the great outdoors. If you've never read one of this author's stories
before, you'll perhaps be more impressed than I was with this one.
This is by no means a bad story; it's clearly written, but there's
really little plot to it - just two sexy young ladies and a healthy
stud fucking their brains out during a camping trip.
Ratings for "Fresh Air and Exercise"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"Aurora Drake" by Mark Aster (MyFrThAl@aol.com). The author sent me
this and the previous story with the comment that he wanted to "get
them out of the way" before he got along to the next six, which he
really liked. That comment made me initially apprehensive, but then I
was drawn to this story by its title. You see, I once used the name
Aurora for an anonymous activity that is not directly related to a full
sexual climax on my own part - and which, therefore, I shall not
describe to you at this time. I chose the name primarily because the
week before my escapade I had come across the name Aurora O'Rourke in
the engagement section of a newspaper. Why would parents give their
beautiful daughter a name like that? For me the name evoked the sound
of a really loud fart in the bath tub. I apologize to Ms. O'Rourke for
making this information public; but if she reads this comment, I hope
it encourages her to stay married to and to retain the last name of
whomever it was that she married.
Anyway, I was drawn to this story and was not disappointed. It's a hot
description of a casual encounter between the beautiful and eponymous
Aurora Drake and our genteel stud who plays her furry fiddle and tempts
her tummy with the taste of nuts and honey. Aurora is completely in
control; but then Our Hero is most in control when he is under the
control of a beautiful woman. This story is well written, and the
banter between the protagonists combines with the atmosphere created by
the author to give us a really good story.
Ratings for "Aurora Drake"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"Dream Come True" by T. Jones (TJones5814). A woman is typing a
message to her cyberlover, when suddenly he is present in the room with
her, doing the things to her that he has been promising through
cyberspace. The author adopts the style employed by many Internet
users - all lower-case letters, lots of ellipses, short choppy
sentences, etc. In fact, my impression is that this story probably
originated as an e-mail exchange between two people on the Internet and
has been posted as a story with little revision. More revision would
have been helpful. The text is filled with numerous irritating
mistakes - such as omitted punctuation and irrational changes in
spelling between cum and come (probably because each of the two authors
chose a different spelling). These errors add nothing to the
verisimilitude of the presentation, and they are likely to distract
many readers. Nonetheless, this is still a sexy story. If I would
have received this message personally from a romantic 'Net companion, I
certainly would be properly fascinated and responsive. It just needs
to be touched up for a wider audience.
Ratings for "Dream Come True"
Athena (technical quality): 7
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7
"Captured" by TorTress (tortress@aol.com). The person who reposted
this story reprinted the complete text of the e-mail message that I
discussed in my second note at the beginning of these reviews. Then
he/she presented this short, violent story and asked, "What would
Celeste think of this story?" I guess I should answer that question.
First, except for a few proofreading errors, this story is well
written. I am not going to pick on a story just because the author
uses "throws" instead of "throes of orgasm." Note, however, that
peccadillos like this tend to accumulate. This error was, in fact,
distracting; and I think the author herself/himself would prefer to
eliminate it, now that I have mentioned it. If there were a large
number of such mistakes or if the story were defective for other
reasons, then errors like this would take on greater significance. As
it is, this kind of error was a minor distraction in an otherwise well-
written story. It's no big deal, and I mention it only because I am
discussing this story in detail.
I'll use a question-and-answer format to deal with my reaction to the
content of the story.
1. Is this a sexually violent story? Yes. I assume it would be
possible to be more violent, but I hope this is not what we would
consider "plain vanilla sex."
2. Does this represent *gratuitous* sexual violence? No. The violence
actually contributes to a sensible plot. I have seen or read numerous
stories about people torturing captives to obtain secret information.
I think it is reasonable to believe that sometimes women agents are
tortured in sexual ways - just as I assume men have their genitals
attacked by their evil captors.
3. Should little children read this story? No. Little children have
a right to grow up free from this crap. By "crap" I mean excessive
torture of human beings, not the story. I don't have clinical data in
front of me, but I think there is ample scientific evidence to suggest
that children who witness this kind of activity very often have really
serious emotional problems during the rest of their lives. I think the
vicarious experience (reading a story or viewing a video) would have a
weaker impact than a direct experience; but either would be harmful to
a child. I think parents or guardians of children would be remiss to
read this to their children as a bedtime story or even to leave it
around where their kids would be likely to read it.
3. Should adolescents read this story? No. But read this whole
answer to clarify what I mean by no. I think it is desirable that
adolescents approach their own initial sexual experiences with an
expectation that sexual activity can be a powerful means to express
love and to communicate feelings to a partner. I think that when
adolescents approach their own initial sexual experiences with the
expectation that sex is a purely physiological activity that is often
used to torture someone they are likely to have emotional problems. I
cannot free the world from all its emotional problems; but I think
parents (and society) have a right (perhaps a responsibility) to lessen
rather than increase the possibility that adolescents will wind up in
dysfunctional relationships.
Of course, the problem is that not all adolescents are as "innocent" as
others. Certainly there are members of street gangs or messed-up
families who routinely witness this kind of activity in their real
lives; and so it would be unlikely that a piece of fiction would
traumatize them further. Nevertheless, I think the notion that this
kind of story will do no harm to adolescents is itself naive.
Let me point out, however, that I WOULD be willing to use this story as
a reading selection in a class of adolescents, if I were permitted to
do so. This may sound like I am contradicting what I said previously,
but I don't think so. I think this story presents graphic aspects of
reality from which we should take reasonable precautions to shield
children. However, adolescents do not suddenly become adults on the
day they "become of age" or any other day; maturation is a gradual
process. Discussing a well written story like this under sensible
supervision could be a growth experience for young people.
Adolescents are aware that sexual violence occurs. Years ago, I
overheard my daughter and her friends discussing one of the Star Wars
movies: "If a pervert like the Emperor captured Princess Leia, don't
you think he would at least rape her?" Of course he would. I think it
was a sensible decision to omit the rape and torture from Star Wars -
just like it was sensible to do all the other unrealistic stuff that
made those shows great.
In short, I see a problem in letting adolescents have access to a story
like this; but the nature of the problem depends on the specific
personality and background of specific adolescents. The problem is
further compounded by the notion that many adolescents will believe
themselves to be "more mature" if they can "handle" this kind of story.
That's bullshit.
The proper way to deal with this kind of story is to take normal
precautions already available in most jurisdictions to avoid
broadcasting this kind of story to adolescents. However, the most
important part of the solution is to offer young people realistic
stories and information that will enable them to develop wholesome
(sensible) insights into sexuality. Either treating all sex stories as
"pornography" or grouping this well-written story with mindless drivel
is likely to cause many more problems than such a strategy would solve.
4. Should adults read this story? Of course they should, if they want
to; but it is important to recall that many adults have levels of
emotional maturity far below those of young adolescents. However,
people like that are not the sort who would be reading this essay in
the first place.
5. Did Celeste enjoy this story? Yes and no. I DID enjoy it because
I expected it to be some godawful crap that would nauseate me.
Instead, I found a well-written but graphic story that held my interest
and made me wonder what it would feel like to have that happen to me.
Like many people, I tend to skip the stories that are labeled "torture"
in the title lines. One of the values of my reviews is that they
convey more information than can be found in the alphabet soup in the
title lines of the stories. In the present case, potential readers
know that this is a literate story with a plot and can distinguish it
from some other stories labeled "rape & tor'; and that might help them
decide whether they want to read it.
I might NOT have enjoyed the story under different circumstances. I
feel that there's a lot of garbage going on in the world. I put up
with a lot of shit everyday in my real life; and when I sit down to
read a story, I think I have a right to focus on enjoying life rather
than taking a closer look at its dark side. Am I doing a Polyanna
routine? I think you'd have to know more about the rest of my life to
make that judgment. The fact is, I spend a lot of my time working
(through my church, oddly enough) with persons who have been sexually
abused. I often deal directly with the effects of "the dark side of
sex" and still manage to maintain an optimistic attitude. I don't
think this is a Polyanna routine.
I saw two movies recently: "Leaving Las Vegas" and "Up Close and
Personal." The former will probably win several Academy Awards; the
latter probably will not. I disliked "Leaving Las Vegas"; and I think
I have a right to do so. My husband and I left that show with a
feeling of tension that would not go away. I had nightmares that
night. I don't like nightmares. (On the other hand, I now have a
better understanding of some alcoholics and prostitutes and of the
mutually beneficial relationships that might occur between them.) When
we left "Up Close and Personal," we flirted all the way home and I had
much happier dreams - to say the least. I honestly do believe that
movie critics are giving us a snow job when they tell us that "Las
Vegas" is better than "Up Close"; but for now I am willing to defer to
their expertise.
For me, "Leaving Las Vegas" and the present story are like good
textbook chapters on abnormal psychology. If I could read or watch
them instead of reading a boring, technical presentation, then I would
love them. In addition, sometimes I need to expand my horizons - to do
something that will enable me to understand those aspects of life I
would normally not encounter (that I would even *prefer* not to
encounter). Really serious and even morbid stories (like Hamlet,
Macbeth, and this story) are what I need in such situations. But if I
am looking for enjoyment, then I would rather read something else.
There's room in life for both.
Overall, if I am personally going to come to a better understanding of
what it feels like to be raped and tortured by a perverted enemy who is
determined to extract security secrets from me, I would rather read
about it than experience it directly. This story performs that service
for me, and so I like it.
6. What really bothers Celeste about stories like this? What really
bothers me is the fact that I know there are readers out there who grab
a story like this and say to themselves, "Wouldn't it be cool to do
this to a chick?!" That's not the author's fault; but it still
happens, and it annoys the hell out of me. However, I should point out
that only fairly stupid readers or those who already have emotional
problems would be likely to react that way to this story. If the story
portrayed the victim as deciding that rape was really fun, then the
story would be more problematic. The reason I gave this story a high
rating was because it was both graphic and realistic.
7. The woman had an orgasm. She enjoyed being raped, didn't she? An
orgasm is a physiological reaction. As I read this story, I thought
the orgasm was treated realistically. The woman considered her orgasm
to be part of her humiliation; that's an irrational but typical
reaction as I understand it. (I am not arguing that this would be the
*only* realistic reaction.) If the woman would later consult a
therapist, that person would try to help her understand her emotions
more clearly.
7. What if the woman WOULD have *enjoyed* the rape? What if the woman
(a secret agent of some kind) later told a friend, "What I really like
about this work is that I get raped by some really great guys"? Most
of the stories that give this impression are bad stories, because they
do not ring true. However, it would be possible to write a good story
about a woman who *liked* to get raped and tortured. I would probably
say I liked the story but would refer to this person as being
dysfunctional or having emotional problems. I don't see a problem with
that. It's possible to have a good story about an abnormal person (as
in Poe's "Telltale Heart"). My objection is that lots of authors
present this as the *typical* reaction to rape and torture; and that's
simply not realistic - without further explanation.
8. Does Celeste advocate "plain vanilla" sex stories? I really don't
think so. I do admit that I tend to read more stories that are
romantic or designed to arouse the reader; but this is a personal
preference that I discuss in my FAQ. If you look back over all my
reviews, you'll see that I give some very high ratings to stories that
are much like the one I am reviewing now. For example, I rated "The
Final Mission" by Spook as the Number 13 story of 1995; and that story
included a lot of sexual violence that contributed effectively to the
story. More recently, I rated Dafny Dewitt's "Spare Change" among the
Top 15 Stories for January - even though that story literally almost
made me gag.
I AM rough on stories that I consider to be stupidly cruel or violent.
I don't regard my contempt for such stories as an improper bias. I
THINK I am equally harsh on the stories that depict people as fucking
merrily away to no apparent purpose (e.g., sex all night with 100
strangers, all of whom have 12-inchers and give the young lady a
roaring orgasm each time). At least I'll try to be objective.
Ratings for "Captured"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
"How I Met Pat and Julie" by Mark Aster (MyFrThAl@aol.com). "The
younger of the Allen sisters soaped my stomach and thighs with a warm
washcloth while the elder, lying naked on the bed, masturbated lazily
with a blue dildo, and told erotic stories in between orgasms. My cock
had been hard in a relaxed comfortable way for some time, and the
gentle rubbing of the rough wet cloth on my thighs and balls was
driving me slowly crazy." So starts the pilot episode of Mark Aster's
"My Friends the Allens".
The "Allen Sister" stories are loosely connected. I understand there
are now about 20 of them. There is every indication that there will be
at least 20 more. I hope so. The combined stories do not add up to a
novel; the best comparison I can make is a sitcom. But since the
stories are predominantly erotic rather than funny, perhaps a better
analogy would be a porno version of an American soap opera. What I
mean by this is that readers can start at any point in the series and
even skip episodes without losing the continuity of the story. While
doing so, readers can still enjoy both each separate story and the
combined series, while developing a sort of friendship with the
characters.
The unnamed Hero/Narrator of these stories is a typical soap stud. If
he lived in Salem or Aramid, he would be John Black or Bo Brady; but
instead of having two middle aged women fighting over his favors or
wrestling over which bride he should keep, our Hero is resigned to the
quiet existence of servicing his two lovely friends, while the three of
them unselfishly extend their favors into the world around them. While
John and Bo frown a lot, Our Hero groans even more. Like John, he has
no obvious means of earning a living; he just accompanies the girls to
expensive resorts or attends parties at exclusive mansions and
pleasantly groans and reciprocates ad infinitum. He is pleasantly
insatiable, the kind of boytoy that even Madonna and her Evil Twin
working as a tag team could not exhaust.
Logically, I should have read this story first in the series; but I
didn't know it existed until now. Finding it was like coming across
the pilot story for a sitcom I had grown to love. The Friendly
Threesome were quite at home in my mind's eye as they fucked and sucked
their way through this initial episode. It's a really hot one.
Somehow I'm glad I read it out of order; it was almost as much fun as
the time I found the John Black FAQ on the World Wide Web.
Ratings for "How I Met Pat and Julie"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"The Neighborhood" by Hardy Har (harhar@ucla.edu). Mom and Dad are
away and Jeff must play. The nextdoor neighbor is a real turn-on.
Jeff quickly progresses from fantasies and masturbation to full-contact
fun and games. It turns out Mrs. Bauer is the neighborhood Lothario -
a word I have been trying to use for at least 15 years and which
doesn't quite fit here because it usually refers to a man who carries
on with women; but what the hell - Mrs. Bauer carries on with women as
well as boys and men and probably cats and dogs too; and I'll probably
never get a chance to use the word again. Under Mrs. Bauer's tutelage,
Jeff intrepidly explores the neighborhood, while getting and giving a
lot of ass - if you know what I mean <wink>!
The story ends with these words: "...he came all over his chest at the
thought of Ron and he bblasting the ladies with come." That should be
"Ron and him", and I personally like "cum" better than "come" -
especially as a noun and especially on my tits. This is not a story
for rocket scientists; it's for guys who still have adolescent
fantasies about boinking the lady next door. However, it really is a
pretty good description of hot adolescent male fantasies. This kid's a
regular Lothario!
Ratings for "The Neighborhood"
Athena (technical quality): 7
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7
"To Boldly Go" by The Krazmeister (kraszlan@enternet.com.au). I
recently read a review in Scientific American of "The Physics of Star
Trek," in which the author argues convincingly that the Star Trek
movies and series have actually done a fairly good job of educating
young viewers in science. The author of that book was obviously not
talking about this story, which is more on the order of "One of the
Three Stooges Fucks a Strange Alien from Someplace Else." My highlight
came when the female Tribok used her long ears to caress either side of
Kirk's face. The Tribok also used her prehensile tail in creative ways
while Kirk got his bone honed in her love tunnel. The author obviously
developed the plot during a couple of prolonged bowel movements and
then took all of 15 minutes to pop this draft into the computer and
submit it to a.s.s. I have seen numerous Star Trek stories that are a
lot better than this one. If you have a creative idea, don't rush it
into the postings; turn it into a story first.
Ratings for "To Boldly Go"
Athena (technical quality): 4
Venus (plot & character): 4
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 3
"Erotic Bloopers 3" by Jackie ( an338903@anon.penet.fi). I continue to
enjoy Jackie's "Erotic Bloopers." Look for them in a.s.s.d. Here's
one where she missed a good explanation:
"I concentrated on my clit as much as possible, getting
lubrication from my cunt and started on a fast tract
towards an orgasm until I heard Jason break my spell
and say something about eating my juices."
~~ Boy, would my fingers vigorously plow that furrow on
her plump barren parcel of land. (track)
I agree that the author meant "track," but "tract" also means a lengthy
written treatise on a topic. I think it would be interesting to
picture our preorgasmic lass rapidly reading the instructions in Dr.
Ruth or some other tract on "How to Have an Orgasm."