Celestial Reviews 67 - Mar 6, 1996
Note: I have begun using a new rating system, which gives each story
three discrete* ratings. (*See discussion of "discrete" in WORD USAGE
at end of these Reviews.) These are explained in more detail in my
FAQ, but here is a summary.
Athena Rating. This rating covers such matters as grammar, spelling,
formatting, and creative use of the language. A story with essentially
no serious grammar, spelling, or usage problems will receive a rating
of 8. To get a rating of 9 or 10, the author will have to do something
creative with the language.
Venus Rating. This rating describes such matters as plot and character
development.
Celeste Rating. This rating describes how much I myself liked the
story.
On the summary line, I'll simply list these as three separate ratings:
{"Name of Story" by Author (topic) 8, 10, 8}
Second Note: Some exciting things are happening with regard to making
good stories more widely available. I have already mentioned in past
issues of CR that some people are setting up Web sites for my reviews
and lists and for the stories contained in them. Another important
development is that someone is trying to rejuvenate the Louvre. In
addition, there is now a Deirdre home page, a Robot Sex home page, and
a DarkNites home page. If you have a home page for your own stories or
for those which you have gathered and want to make this information
public, please give me the appropriate information. A week from now
I'll try to post a complete list of all such resources. I'll try to
keep it free of ripoff sites that are trying to make a profit or to
distribute stories to people who should not be receiving them. All I
want are sites that archive or disseminate stories of quality
comparable to those that commonly receive good ratings in Celestial
Reviews. Even if you think I already know about your service, please
send me a brief note along with the correct address.
- Celeste
"The Horny Librarian" by Unknown Author (sex in
the library) 8, 8, 8
"Adult Bookstore" by Unknown Author (orgy & spouse
watching) 6, 5, 3
"Your first 3way" by Pete Ferrer (three-way sex) 3, 3, 1
"Novice" by Wollstonecraft (sex in the convent) 10, 10,
10
"The Fast" by Delta (masturbation & fantasy)10, 9, 9
"French Kiss II" by Mark Aster (orgy in a ski lodge) 10, 10,
10
"The Present" by Grid (bondage games) 10, 9, 4
"The Horny Librarian" by Unknown Author. Librarians have a special
place in my heart. This is partly because they are a misunderstood
minority, much like English teachers - but usually older and less
attractive. However, my special kinship had its origin at a time
shortly after our second daughter was born. My husband was doing
advanced studies, and I had accompanied him to the university library.
There was an attractive young college student working at the main desk,
and we were seated at an isolated table away from everyone else, as the
library emptied that evening. After about an hour of serious study, I
felt my husband's hand on my thigh under the table, and he whispered in
a low voice what he would like to do to the young lady at the desk. I
told him to shut up and show me, and while he brought me to a gentle
orgasm, I responded by gently caressing his cock through his pants.
My husband deliberately dropped his pencil and obviously wanted me to
go under the table to retrieve it and to perform another service while
I was down there, but I wasn't interested in getting arrested for
indecent exposure. To help overcome his obvious disappointment, I
managed to unzip his fly and began quietly describing to him what the
girl at the desk would like to do to his cock. He gazed straight at
her all the while I secretly played his pipe organ. I continued to
caress his joystick, making my fingers feel as much as possible like
her lips, and to describe her hypothetical activities, until he shot
his load into my hand. I caught what I could and brought my hand to my
mouth and licked it clean, while he continued to bring me to the
completion of my own orgasm.
We managed to do all this without arousing the attention of anyone - or
so we thought. When we left the library fifteen minutes later, we
stopped to check out some books. When the young lady returned my
library card to me, she smiled very nicely and said, "It's really great
to see older people who are so much in love." As she handed me back my
library card, she casually brought her hand close to my face. I was
struck by the obvious fragrance of her feminine juices on her hand. We
made love once in the car and once more at home that night. I often
saw that assistant librarian around the campus, but I never discussed
the matter with her any further. However, as I said, I have a warm
spot in my heart for librarians.
Ooops! This is a review, not a story. Ignore those previous three
paragraphs. In the present story Laura Weber is a smalltown librarian
whose husband has passed away and left her with four teenage children.
Although she's a tiger inside, she feels compelled to put on a proper
exterior in order to maintain the respect of the community and keep her
job. As luck would have it, just when she's about ready to explode
from pent-up lust, she comes across a young lad jerking off in the
stacks around closing time, while he is looking at the engravings in a
tome of either anthropological or artistic interest. Motivated both by
her own lust and by a desire to avoid doing anything that might make
the poor lad dislike the library, she exposes the boy - literally.
They have mutually pleasurable oral sex; and as the story ends, it
seems likely that David will not develop a pathological avoidance of
libraries or reading.
Of course, librarians should not give blowjobs to kids in the stacks;
but I suspect that more than one young man has fantasized having this
happen. Although this story is written from the perspective of the
librarian, I suspect it was written by a grown-up David, who had
rehearsed this plot on many an occasion while he searched for naked
breasts in National Geographic and wished that the librarian would put
her lips in a slightly more intimate location when she sushed him.
Ratings for "The Horny Librarian"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"Adult Bookstore" by Unknown Author. Adults don't actually do a lot of
reading in adult bookstores. I occasionally visit such establishments
- always when I am out of town for a convention, since if I am in town
I am likely to be seen by a parent of one of my students. These are
interesting places. Usually the center of attention is a display of
magazines that looks much like the rack in a typical supermarket.
Standing in front of the display, there are invariably a large number
of dirty old men, some of them actually wearing opened overcoats. They
spend their time avoiding eye contact with one another, while they pick
up and put down the various magazines, acting like they are putting a
lot of thought into their purchase. To minimize abuse of the
merchandise, most of the "really good" magazines are wrapped in clear
plastic.
As I suggest in my FAQ, I have no interest in picking up men in sleazy
establishments when I am away from home. I just feel I have a
constitutional right to read what I want to read, and some of these
places do have some interesting reading material. And besides, the
effect of a woman on such a group is interesting. I enjoy walking up
to the rack and asking one of the guys who is not looking at me, "Is
that a good one?" I have encountered only two basic reactions: (1)
Most of them mumble something and walk away as quickly as possible -
probably because I remind them of their mothers. (2) Some of them try
to flirt with me. I politely thank the men in this second category for
their attention but tell them that I have to hurry to be on time for
the karate class that my husband and I are taking together that evening
after he gets finished with target practice down at the police range.
In addition, these stores are full of discount books that have their
covers ripped off. I used to buy these books so that I'd have
something to masturbate with back in the hotel room; but in more recent
days I just bring along a diskful of a.s.s. stories to read on my
laptop computer. The best of these stories are comparable to good
a.s.s. stories.
Finally, these stories also offer numerous sex toys and peep shows.
The latter offer viewers an opportunity to view segments of videos for
a twenty-five cents. The peep show booths look genuinely sleazy, and I
have never patronized them. They look and smell like people probably
do in them what the author of this story says they do.
Which brings us to this story. A man takes his wife to an
establishment like those I have described. They head straight for the
peep shows, and they quickly get aroused. While she is fucking her
husband, she becomes aware that the sides of the booth are full of
peepholes. She also discovers (a) that things other than eyes can be
placed against these holes and that is is possible to suck on and
extract fluids from objects stuck through these apertures, and (2) that
more than two persons can fit into a single booth and perform fairly
athletic activities.
This is all kind of interesting (from a perspective of cultural
anthropology, of course), but the plot and character development is
more on a level with the movies typically shown in the peep shows than
with the stories were have grown accustomed to on this newsgroup.
Ratings for "Adult Bookstore"
Athena (technical quality): 6
Venus (plot & character): 5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 3
"Your first 3way" by Pete Ferrer (ferrer@ix.netcom.com). The author
stated in his disclaimer that this was his first post and that he was
looking for comments, especially from women. I qualify for that
purpose. My reaction is that I wonder why a person would bother to
post this. It is really badly written. Even in it's nearly illiterate
format, of course, it may be of interest to one specific person with
whom he originally shared these feelings or fantasies. I do not by any
means want to suggest that people who can express themselves clearly
are better persons than those who can express themselves only
awkwardly. The writer of this story may be a great lay and a romantic
person. For all I know, he may be a fine carpenter who did not graduate
from elementary school, or a bank president who feels arrogantly
superior to everyone else and doesn't feel a need to follow simple
rules of logic and grammar. But unless he has skills that he doesn't
display here, he's not a writer. This author has to be not thinking at
all if he imagines that someone who's not already in on his secret
would care about this story. I've seen worse, but I don't understand
why a person would want to subject himself to public embarrassment by
posting something this poorly written. There is an erotic idea behind
this story, but such ideas are a lot easier to find in other stories
posted on this newsgroup.
Ratings for "Your first 3way"
Athena (technical quality): 3
Venus (plot & character): 3
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 1
"Novice" by Wollstonecraft (an285729@anon.penet.fi ). The events in
this story probably didn't really happen. If they did, we surely would
have seen the participants on Donahue or one of the other talk shows by
now. Actually, there's a good chance that this was written under a
pseudonym by Donahue himself, to get even with those nuns for swatting
his cute little ass when he talked during mass as a child.
Anyway, the novice (a young woman aspiring to become a nun) looks out
the window of her convent one evening and sees a young, wretched,
homeless lad shivering on the ground. What can she do? Her charity
demands that she invite him inside (through the window, of course).
But alas, sleeping on the cold floor would hardly be better than
sleeping on the ground and there's only one bed. Charity would demand
sharing the bed. But double alas, his tattered clothes would soil the
bed sheets; and so - cleanliness being next to godliness (more
literally than usual, in this case) - she invites the young man into
her bed clad only in a humble gown that she bestows on him.
Recognizing that this might be a source of temptation, she cautiously
enjoins him to be chaste. The good lad replies thus: "I would not
press an unholy advantage as a result of your compassion, Sister, nor
would I be so foolish as to risk the wrath of the Lord by despoiling
His servant's perfect offering."
Ah, 'tis the life of a saint we have described here - albeit a saint
whose grasp of both theology and sexual reproduction seriously sucks.
Will the young novice remain firm in her commitment to all that is holy
or will the pull of the flesh impinge upon her cloistered life? This
sounds a lot like "The Sound of Music", doesn't it? I don't want to
reveal too much of the plot to you; there may be a few events in it
that you haven't guessed yet. I enjoyed this story very much. It's
almost as if Geoffrey Chaucer has returned through cyberspace with a
modern version of "The Nun's Tale."
Of course, real nuns don't really do things like this; they're almost
as straight as English teachers and librarians - but less likely to be
offended by this story, since they seldom surf a.s.s.. The falsehoods
in this story probably originate in this author's primordial urge to
wreak vengeance upon his childhood teachers, who possibly caught him
masturbating during music class and made him stop or used the more
common ploy of telling him that jerking his gherkin would make his
voice get high and he'd have to sing with the girls. This story is
filled with raw passion, but it lacks some elements of authenticity
that would make it fully believable. For one thing, I happen to know
that first vespers do not occur in convents at the time of day when
they do in this story. And besides, if people did do things like this,
someone sure as hell would be struck dead by lightning. Or something.
Ratings for "Novice"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"The Fast" by Delta (an248969@anon.penet.fi). Kerri enjoys
masturbating; but to prove to herself that she is not obsessed or
addicted to the activity, she vows to herself that she will refrain
from her solitary enjoyment for two weeks. It's an interesting idea.
Would such an abstemious regimen enable Kerri to come away with
monastic insights about the superiority of her soul over her body?
What sort of things would she think about when she encountered those
situations that would normally encourage her to bring herself to
climax? Could she actually hold out for two whole weeks; and if so,
what would she do when the fast was over? Just for the record, at the
very beginning I resolved not to masturbate or to have an orgasm for at
least four hours after I finished this story, and I was easily
successful. Student essays make some things easy for English teachers.
Ratings for "The Fast"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"French Kiss II" by Mark Aster (MyFrThAl@aol.com). Here we have
another of those improbable stories about the Allen Sisters. The hero
(whose name we never learn) is a veritable stud - a wonderful guy who
is constantly willing to service any beautiful woman who shows
interest. Pat and Julie are incredibly attractive and sexually skilled
creatures whose kindness to the males of the species is exceeded only
by their tenderness to each other. In this specific story, we have the
lovely Daphne, a brown-skinned French woman whose beauty makes the
Allen Sisters look drab by contrast but who lacks the sexual
sophistication that the Girls so readily display. Daphne appeared
previously in French Kiss I, where she fucked Our Hero's brains out
after watching through a peep hole while Julie and Pat exchanged
affections in the adjacent hotel room.
Against this improbably background we might expect that another French
Kiss story would become boring. I mean, who really wants to read
another buckets of cum story about three energetic people who help this
sexy French woman expand her sexual horizons in a hotel set in a
mountain paradise? C'est moi! I honestly do think this kind of story
could get boring; but the author's use of the language enables me to
get a clear picture of what's happening and maintains a sexual tension
that makes me want to keep reading. Oui! Eh bien!
Ratings for "French Kiss II"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"The Present" by Grid (an475731@anon.penet.fi). Bill is one of those
guys who are hard to shop for because they have everything; and so for
his birthday Kelly gives him the best present ever - herself as his
slave for as long as he wants her. Along with the gift of her self
comes a large chest full of bondage toys. After Kelly presents herself
to him, they go shopping (with Kelly secretly in restraints) before the
real festivities begin; and Bill purchases a roll of duct tape, another
roll of clear packing tape, a small pair of scissors, a men's safety
razor, a can of shaving cream, a turkey baster, and a large stainless
steel stirring whisk. By noting that they did not purchase a salami,
any vegetables, or pop tarts, you can probably predict the general gist
of the rest of the story.
As I have said repeatedly in these reviews, I myself do not get turned
on by the idea of becoming someone's sex slave. I think mutual respect
is an extremely important part of a relationship, and I simply do not
see how I could respect a person who would enjoy inflicting pain on me.
However, I think people who like to fantasize about this sex slavery
motif would enjoy this story. It presents numerous creative
situations. One strong point of the story is that they emphatically
used the "safe word," a word that the submissive person could say at
any time to indicate that the dominant person was inflicting too much
pain and should stop. In this case the safe word was "Exon" - a word
that Kelly would not be likely to say by accident.
Last week I was at a bar (actually a pizza parlor) with some of my
friends after we played volleyball. The Montel Williams show came on
the TV screen, and the guest was a woman who had had her husband
arrested and convicted of domestic abuse and now wanted to get him
released from prison. The husband and wife had engaged in sexual
bondage games like those described in the present story; and she
claimed that she had been frightened that he would take their child
away (or something like that), and so she went to the police with
evidence of domestic abuse - which was easy to obtain, since he did in
fact torture her. (I may have some of this wrong, because not everyone
sits silently when Montel comes on the TV in our pizza palace.)
Anyway, I just sat there listening to this woman and man talk about
their sex games, and I saw nothing unusual about their descriptions.
Hell, I've survived Deirdre! What amazed me was that neither Montel
nor the person who claimed to be a psychiatrist on the show nor members
of the audience believed that there were any sane people in the world
would do things like that in the name of love or sexual fun. When one
of my friends scoffed, I commented that "actually, lots of normal
people fantasize about things like that and even do it in their real
life." I further mentioned that the sensible ones used a "safe word"
to stop the action in an emergency. My friends guffawed; but to their
dismay the woman told Montel that her safe word was "green." I started
getting really strange looks from my friends, and was in danger of
either blowing my cover or being classified as a sex pervert. So I
told them that I had read about it in a back issue of Cosmopolitan.
I had a point when I started relating this anecdote, but I forgot what
it was. Since the preceding two paragraphs look interesting, however,
I think I'll leave them here.
Ratings for "The Present"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 4
STRANGE POSTINGS ON A.S.S.. I downloaded three unusual articles this
week. One was a plaintive cry from a person purporting to be a high
school girl in need of a good man. This was the best of the three!
The second was a "Get Rich Quick" offer; and since I have plenty of
free time and little money, I perused it carefully. As I understand
it, I can easily earn $25,000 by simply sending a dollar to the person
whose name appears at the top of the list. I put my name at the top of
the list and forwarded this message to my senator, suggesting that he
use this method to pay off government debts. His reply, I'm sure, will
tell me that the government is already using a method very much like
this.
The third was a brief but "objective" description of why Blacks are the
way they are {apparently because they fell off the evolutionary
ladder}. I never want to grace this crap with any attention, and so I
am burying this comment away in a recess of my Reviews where only
scholars or other social parasites are likely to see it. What I find
amazing is that these idiots typically purport to be part of an
intellectual elite. Then people like this elitist (who cleverly calls
himself Phuoc Kieu at Kieu@Viet.com) give their articles really
esoteric titles - in this case "Facts Based On Theory Of Evolution:
Why Negroes Are an Inferior Race." It apparently evades Mr. Kieu's
intellect that "facts" by their very nature are never based on theories
- theories are based on facts. Then he ignores Occam's razor
completely when he asserts that personality and intellectual deficits
that obviously emerged in his own family within only one or two
generations (such as being "barbaric, wild, disorderly, short tempered,
ill disciplined, murderous, incestuous, unmotivated, lazy, and on and
on and on") would occur in a whole race because its members were "a few
thousand, maybe million years short of evolving into a 'full human'
status." I don't know why they post this stuff on a.s.s. - except
maybe to make us sex perverts look intelligent by contrast!
CELESTIAL WORD USAGE: A lot of readers enjoy my discussions of word
usage, and so here are two words for this week. I should point out
that lots of people mess up on the words discussed here; so I'm not
saying that you're an idiot if you use these words incorrectly. But we
want perfection on this newsgroup!
WAIVER/WAVER. "Waiver" is actually a noun, related to the verb
"waive," which means to relinquish - as when the best man waives his
right to fuck the bride right after the wedding. The word "waiver"
often occurs on the sports page, when a baseball team, for example,
seeks waivers in to be permitted to trade a player to one team when
another would have prior claim. In the story where I found this, a
young lad's "thoughts mainly waivered around sex." How would this go?
"Sure, I'd like a piece of ass from her. She's been eyeing me all
evening. But, no - you go ahead; I'll waive my rights on this one."
The author meant "waver."
DISCRETE/DISCREET. I'm getting a little impatient here. If there's
one thing I want to get across to you people, it's the difference
between these two words. Haven't any of you studied discrete
mathematics? Do you think there's something judicious or circumspect
about that branch of mathematics? Actually, maybe you did. As I
recall, it sounded a lot easier than calculus, and so maybe it would be
discreet to enroll in that kind of course.
One more time.... DISCRETE means "not continuous" or "capable of being
separated into segments." DISCREET means "judicious or circumspect."
"I looked at her body discretely." This would mean that the observer
first took a close look at her head, then shifted distinctly to her
breasts, then to her feet - or something like that. This should be
"discreetly."
One author said that a one of his characters spotted a woman in a bar and then
"courted her discretely for the next half hour." This usage could make sense -
but only if it occurred in a TG story: first he courted the male personality,
then the female, etc.
Likewise, if he *fucked* her discretely, that could mean vaginal sex <pause>
oral sex <pause> anal sex <end of session>.
Indeed, in gang bang stories it would be eminently sensible to be discrete by
getting one of the participants out of the way before the next entered the
lair of Venus.
Of course, in pedophile stories it would be important to be discrete about
sexual activities, especially if the guy is humping both the mother and the
10-year-old daughter of the county judge. Depending on what that last
sentence really means, it might be best to be discreet about being discrete.