Celestial Reviews 61 - Feb 14, 1996
Note: After I posted my heartwarming anecdote about the kid in CR 59,
I received several more stories from readers. Here's one of the best:
A young gay man had finally decided to tell his widowed mother that he
was gay. She took the news well, but she asked "Does this mean you suck
men's penises?" He was a little taken aback, but answered "Uh...yes
Mother...I do." "Well, ok.." she said "...but don't you *ever* complain
about my cooking again."
Second Note: The proofreading service is in full operation, and people
are reporting successful use of it. At least one of the stories posted
today has benefited from that process. If you want someone to read and
comment on your story before you post it, contact me. Do NOT send me
the entire story; I'll assign one or two proofreaders to your story,
and you can communicate directly with them.
Final Note: Please do not ask me to send you copies of the stories I
review. I cannot do it, and I do not have time to respond to everyone
who makes this request.
- Celeste
"Idea" by Deirdre (brokered sex) 9
"Mouth" by Deirdre (oral sex) 7
"Camp" by Deirdre (seduction & sex slavery) 7
"Marsha" by The English Mouse (hot sex) 8
"Body and Soul" by Stephanie (TG sci fi) 10
"Disrobing Mother" by Dafney Cecil Dewitt (voyeurism &
blackmail) 10
"Pat Comes of Age" by by Mark Aster (orgy) 10
"In the Middle of the Night" by Damya (romantic interlude)
8
"Idea" by Deirdre. Eventually Deirdre will have to run out of weird
ideas for stories. In this one, a female friend asks a man if he'd
like to do it with Nancy Jenson. He replies that it's a moot question,
because he's a married man. The friend replies that that's the same
thing his wife said - that *she* wouldn't do it with Nancy because of
her prior commitment to her husband. The implication is that they both
would like to do it with Nancy Jenson, and so the friend offers to
broker the arrangement. So far everything was as I had expected; but
then came a sudden and interesting twist in the plot. (Rating: 9)
"Mouth" by Deirdre. "Wow! You have the perfect mouth for giving blow
jobs." Now, this happens to be true of myself; but never has a
stranger mentioned this fact upon first meeting me. I'm not sure how I
would react; but I decided to read the rest of this story to learn how
Deirdre's heroine would handle it. By finding out what she would do, I
figured I could plan to do the opposite and thereby avoid becoming the
sex slave of my new admirer. After reading the story, I have decided
to take the safe way out and say, "Thank you! And a person who looks
like you is to be commended for appearing in public." The lady in this
story, of course, takes a different course of action. (Rating: 7)
"Camp" by Deirdre. A woman goes camping with a friend and her
daughters. She finds herself attracted to one of the teenage daughters
when she undresses in the tent; but she controls her feelings, until
the mother starts coming on to her. One really does have to be careful
with whom one hangs out in Deirdre's stories. (Rating: 7)
"Marsha" by The English Mouse (an18137@anon.penet.fi). The guy has
been getting horny because of lack of sex, and so he places a personal
ad on the computer. He finds a friendly lady and they fuck
prodigiously. One thing that I liked about this story was that it
contained interracial sex without making a big deal over it. Race was
mentioned in the context of describing the fact that their skin looked
nice together; I think that's a better reason than because people of
one race are hornier or want to be dominated by the other race or
something like that. What I didn't like was the fact that the story
seemed to lack a real plot. The only interesting thing about the story
was that they had a lot of sex that they both enjoyed. The actual
description of the sexual activity was rather dispassionate - even
though the two participants kept reaching climaxes. The story would
have been enriched if there were some interesting angle besides the
abundance of activity. (Rating: 8)
"Body and Soul" by Stephanie (an266891@anon.penet.fi). Many TG
(transgender) stories pursue the theme of a man changing from his own
body and personality into that of a woman. This one has several new
twists: the man has died in an automobile accident but is given an
opportunity to return to earth to take part in a special project that
involves rehabilitating a man who has started to go bad. To
participate, he must allow his soul to return in the body and
personality of a woman. A final complication is that there are two
agents actively opposing the rehab process: the devil himself and a man
who has sold his soul to the devil in return for being permitted to
live in the body of a voluptuous young woman. Both of these evil
agents possess the power to hypnotize others and make them engage in
activities they would normally resist; however, this power is not
absolute, and one of the interesting aspects of the story is
determining how the protagonists can deal with and overcome this
influence. With so many competing forces at work it would seem likely
that either the story would get crazily complex or that it would get
lost on a non-sexy sidetrack. Neither predicament occurs: I found this
to be a highly imaginative and very erotic story.
Readers who are knowledgeable about the TG tradition will respond to
this story differently than "outsiders" who pick this up and simply
read it as a story that they expect to contain sex. The latter will
perhaps find novelty in the idea of a man beginning to understand
himself anew after being thrust into the body and personality of a
woman. Actually, that's one of the most common themes in TG
literature; and people who read TG stories regularly will automatically
compare this story to others that examine this problem of sexual
identity. Both types of readers will enjoy this story.
There are numerous interesting situations that emerge as this complex plot
evolves, and I am going to make no attempt to summarize all of them in this
review. For example, Dan (the guy who became the wife) is required to
rehabilitate Simon, who is a chronic drinker, gambler, and womanizer; but Dan
initially does not want to engage in sexual activity with Simon, because Dan
himself still has a male personality within his new body and has strong
inhibitions against homosexual activity. As a way to resolve the dilemma of
changing Simon's behavior without having sex with a man, Dan blackmails Simon
into wearing panties, stockings, and a bra every day. This should keep Simon
out of trouble, because he will be embarrassed to fool around with bimbos, and
getting drunk could cause him to reveal his little secret. However, an
unexpected result of this cross-dressing is that Dan becomes turned on to
Simon. This story is full of numerous situations like this - intricate but
interesting dilemmas that occur as a result of the structure of the story.
I especially liked the way the author combined the protagonist's
knowledge and ignorance about the feelings and emotions of the woman
whose body he inhabited.
The story ended somewhat abruptly - almost as if the author were
saying, “Well, I’ve carried this plot about as far as it will go, and
so I had better stop now.”
A slight problem with the story is that it really did need a final
proofreading. It is full of minor but distracting errors - especially
comma splices, Stephanie combines two sentences into one by simply
putting a comma between them (like this one, which I did on purpose to
offer an example). One of you who enjoys this story should write to
Stephanie and tell her that you would be happy to proofread her future
stories for her. Stephanie is a very creative person, and I understand
(1) that it's difficult to find one's own grammar errors, especially
when one is wrapt up in the more interesting process of composing a
creative tale; and (2) that an author often has an irresistible urge to
rush a story to press, so that millions of eager readers can share the
story without unnecessary delay. Write to Stephanie and tell her
Celeste sent you. Tell her that you love her stories and promise to
read them overnight, and agree to return the stories with so little
delay and with such careful attention to detail that she'll be glad to
have waited the extra day or so. How could she resist such an offer?
(Rating: 10)
"Disrobing Mother" by Dafney Cecil Dewitt (dafneyd@ix.netcom.com).
Tommy is angry over the impending divorce of his parents. The teenager
focuses his anger on his mother, who has decided to get him out of her
way by sending him to a military academy. He plans a clever sexual
revenge that goes out-of-control. Except for the sexual nature of the
revenge, we would have here a plot for a classic Judy Blume teenage
novel or for an ABC After School Special. As it is, we have a very
clever blackmail story for a.s.s. (Rating: 10)
"Pat Comes of Age" by by Mark Aster (an479991@anon.penet.fi). This is
the fourth in the "My Friends the Allens" series. Familiarity with
previous stories is helpful but not essential to understand this one.
Pat is the older Allen sister, who discloses to her younger sister and
her boyfriend the details of her first orgy. One of the attractions of
this story is that while Pat tells two very arousing stories, her
sister and boyfriend are making love on the couch, becoming aroused as
they listen to the details. Another feature that I liked is that one
of the hot relationships is apparently interracial, without the
degrading aspects that are so often inserted into such descriptions and
about which I complained in a previous issue of CR. This was another
very hot and enjoyable story. (Rating: 10)
"In the Middle of the Night" by Damya (an128788@anon.penet.fi). This
isn't really a complete story - just a very hot romantic interlude - a
snippet describing what a horny woman does to wake up and thrill her
man in the middle of the night. (Rating: 8)
GRAMMAR TIP OF THE WEEK: Several readers have objected to the careless use of
the A-word on a.s.s Hence this disucssion of ALOT, AWHILE, ALRIGHT, ALREADY,
and ALTOGETHER.
ALOT does not exist. Use "a lot" instead.
We had anal intercourse a lot last summer.
I'd like to fuck you a lot.
In most cases it is better to use a more specific word or phrase , such as
"often" or "very much."
ALREADY means "previously." It is to be distinguished from ALL READY, which
means "entirely ready" (or possibly "everyone ready.").
We have copulated six times tonight already.
We had already finished the orgy by the time she arrived,
but we were all ready to make the additional effort to
accommodate her needs.
She was all ready to acquiesce to my sinister wishes,
but her period started that day.
ALRIGHT has arisen as an informal version of ALL RIGHT. It is generally
accepted in any informal context, except when the two words should clearly be
distinguished (as in, "He answered the ten questions and got them all right.")
When writing formal or edited text, it is always proper to use ALL RIGHT. In
fact, it's safest and simpler never to use ALRIGHT.
Since his wife wasn't home, she thought it would be
all right (or alright) to fuck his brains out.
ALTOGETHER means "wholly, entirely, completely" or "with everything included
or considered." ALL TOGETHER means "in a group." We also have the quaint
phrase "in the altogether," meaning
naked.
She felt he was having altogether too much pleasure while
she sucked his cock.
The three women fucked him all together for about three
hours (altogether)
AWHILE is a perfectly legitimate word that means "for a short time." It is
also acceptable in most cases to spell the two words separetely ("a while").
If the writer uses the preposition "for," the correct spelling is "for a
while."
We fucked awhile before dinner.
I licked her cunt for a while before I entered her.
What this all means is that it is altogether correct (grammatically) to give
the following toast on New Years' Eve: "Alright already, let's all together
fuck our brains out awhile!"