Celestial Reviews 60 - Feb 10, 1996
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- Celeste
"Wife" by Deirdre (spouse watching) 7
"Work" by Deirdre (birthday surprise) 7
"Cindy's New Career" by Robot Doll (mannequin sex) 9
"Tammy in Trouble" by Backrub (detective spoof) 9
"No Names" by Jordan Shelbourne (tawdry sex) 10
"Kitty" by Elf Sternberg (science fiction) 10
"A Birthday Doll" by Robotdoll (robot doll sex). 5
"The Stars are Full of Light" by DVS (college romance) 8
"Snowbound" by A. Van Peebles (lustful longings for
a lovely little lady) 10
"Appleseed" by Wollstonecraft (forced seduction) 10.
"Barfly" by DYS (bar pickup) 10
"Wife" by Deirdre. A coworker's wife invites the narrator out to lunch
and mentions that she'd like to watch her husband make it with another
woman and that the narrator would do just nicely. The woman is taken by
surprise, but she gives the proposal some thought and before long
agrees. Then she promises to do exactly what the wife tells her to do.
Why do people in Deirdre's stories say yes to such all-encompassing
conditions? Well, anyway, everything works out all right in the end;
but I didn't quite see the logic of this story. (Rating: 7)
"Work" by Deirdre. The woman has told her husband that for his birthday
she would do anything he wanted for 24 hours. She describes in detail
to her coworker what she has done for him so far. Why is she revealing
all this to her colleague? It turns out that his orders that morning
were to go get a woman and bring her back to him. (Rating: 7)
"Cindy's New Career" by Robot Doll (robotdoll@aol.com). Cindy is
looking in a window, marveling at how happy the mannequins look. Maybe
it’s something about the way the men lovingly smoothe the clothes over
the plastic legs, or maybe the pleased look on the girls' painted faces;
but she is incredibly attracted to the scene. Of course, the guys
invite Cindy inside and turn her into a mannequin too. Actually, it's
not that simple. First the two men invite Cindy to stay with them in
their apartment, which is attached to the department store and which is
full of the mannequins, technically known as Prettygirls. Cindy
discovers that the guys have a magic box; when the mannequins are placed
into it - poof! they come alive; and of course, there’s another
uncomplicated procedure to turn people into mannequins.
Once you buy into the theory that Prettygirls can go back and forth
between mannequin and human life, some theoretical problems arise. For
example, are the dolls slaves? No, of course not; the men have had many
of their girls leave over the years, and they’ve gone on to happy,
productive lives. Do Prettygirls have pussies? Sure, but you have to
push the right buttons to make them appear. And so forth. Part of the
fun in science fiction is learning the ground rules; and the author does
a good job of letting the reader discover how Prettygirls work.
Note that there is a difference between a mannequin and a dummy. A
dummies are little puppets that usually have someone's hand up their
ass. Mannequins are what this story is about. (Rating: 9)
"Tammy in Trouble" by Backrub (bckrub@aol.com). As you possibly already
know, Backrub is a former CIA operative who now works as a P.I. to
support himself while he writes short stories for this newsgroup. In
this story we see him as a veteran, working with Tammy Ng, who is an
expert in martial arts and marksmanship but sadly lacking in the street
skills necessary for dealing with slimeballs like the Bolizi brothers,
whose goons, as we approach the middle of the story, have the nubile
Tammy bound naked in an abandoned gymnasium, while the wily and gallant
Backrub is creeping toward her rescue. There is a distinct possibility
that Sean may eat her pussy one more time before the less intelligent
Biloxi ends Tammy's life of orgasms. Backrub swings down on a vine,
immobilizes the Biloxis and their goons, and makes passionate love to
Tammy. The bad guys go to jail, and our heroes go back to Tammy's
place, where Tammy puts on leather chaps, cowgirl boots and a hat that
looks like it comes off the cover of a Ruby Montana catalog - but
nothing else - and rewards her champion. We don't know exactly what
happens next. (Rating: 9)
"No Names" by Jordan Shelbourne (jordan@u36.kwnet.on.ca). This is a
story about cheap and tawdry sex between two strangers who meet in a
bar. The guy is on the rebound from his girlfriend, and the woman just
wants to be fucked - no kissing or romantic crap. This is an excellent
description of sex that is cheap and tacky; but the story is also
poignant and romantic. It includes the poetic image of the week: "She
was so wet his cock met no resistance; he might have been fucking
steam." I found this story to be quite enjoyable. (Rating: 10)
"Kitty" by Elf Sternberg (elf@halcyon.com). This is a story about Ken
fucking Kitty, who had been raped a long time ago and therefore needed a
very gentle treatment to re-introduce her to her sexual self. The
author has a wonderful sense of the right word to use to convey images
and emotions, and he writes vividly. A potentially negative aspect of
this story is that it is a journal segment yanked from a much broader
context; there were constant references to things I did not understand,
because I have read only two segments of this journal. As I have often
stated, an important part of good science fiction is enabling the reader
to discover the ground rules of the world in which the characters
function. Here I learned only tidbits: Ken and Kitty fucked pretty
much like normal human beings, but with less inhibition; the "castle"
was somehow protected by a "person" named Dave, who was apparently some
form of artificial intelligence; etc. I had to make calculated guesses
about several other elements or simply resign myself to being
unenlightened about aspects of the story. I was willing to make this
effort, but many readers will be annoyed that they often do not
completely know what is happening.
The author of this story is reposting a whole series of "journal
entries." He is also among the gurus on alt.sex.wizards and is keeper
of the alt.sex.stories FAQ. He maintains a homepage at
http://www.halcyon.com:80/elf/journals/index.html, where you can find
both the FAQ and his stories. (Rating: 10)
"A Birthday Doll" by Robotdoll (Robotdoll@aol.com). There is a large,
white gift box in the middle of the living room. When the box is opened
out pops a dollybot - a robot doll that first turns itself on then
hypnotizes the owner. The owner himself becomes a doll, a slave to his
mistress dollybot. This story is kind of interesting, but it's missing
something that's needed to make me enjoy it thoroughly. Readers who are
already convinced that sex with dolls is fun will probably enjoy this
story more than I did. This author maintains a growing list of erotic
stories involving robots and dolls on his homepage at
http://users.aol.com/robotdoll/asfr.html. (Rating: 5)
"The Stars are Full of Light" by DVS (vanslyke@math.ucsb.edu). In his
introduction to this story, the author complains about another story he
says he read from this newsgroup. He felt that that one was a tale about
animals, not about people. He had wanted to read about romance made
physical and found only violence made romantic. His story, he decided,
would be different. And it is.
This is a story about a young woman who meets a boy and a girl slightly
older than herself at college. They have fun together and cuddle a lot;
but you'll find no hot sex in this story. Really: if you want a raging
orgasm, look elsewhere. Nevertheless, I liked the story, because it
reminded me what it could be like to be young and just learning about
what it was like to be in love.
At times it seemed as if the author was writing an essay on the true
meaning of human sexuality and simply using the short story format as a
framework for his essay. But it was a good essay. The story also
included several Truths about Human Love; for example, "Any time you are
worried about or thinking too hard about sex means that you're doing
something you are not ready for." And fairy tales - there were two
stories about dragons.
Actually, I'm not sure why this was posted on alt.sex.stories - except
perhaps as an antidote to some of what the author found objectionable;
but I'm glad I read it. (Rating: 8)
"Snowbound" by A. Van Peebles (an182636@anon.penet.fi). Planes are
grounded because of snow; and so the doctor's wife is stuck in a distant
city, leaving him alone in charge of the slumber party for a boisterous
band of fifteen-year-olds. One of the girls (who happens to be his
favorite) falls and sprains her ankle; and the old peter meter is on the
rise as the doctor takes her to his bedroom and gives her first aid.
Afterwards, to avoid doing something "irretrievably stupid," he is faced
with the choices of a cold shower or masturbation. He prescribes the
latter for himself, but Allison is vividly in his mind as he jerks off
in the bathroom. The sex is hot here, even though it's all in his mind.
While Doc shovels snow the next morning, the rest of the kids go
sledding; but the injured Allison stays behind and offers him a massage
to cure what ails his sore back. He accepts the rubdown, but will he
decline to roll over and let her "do the front"? And what will happen
when his wife eventually returns home? You may be surprised! (Rating:
10)
"Appleseed" by Wollstonecraft (an285729@anon.penet.fi). Joey is a rich
guy who is a generally nasty bastard and whose attitude toward girls is
not only to "lay 'em and leave 'em" but also to get 'em pregnant in the
process. This story describes how he routinely exploits teenage girls
for this purpose. The author's style is vivid, and he uses verb tenses
in such a way as to convince us that while he is vividly describing a
specific situation he is really describing Joey's typical behavior.
Actually, he's not really Joey; the guy makes up new names and new cover
stories to suit his particular seductive needs. He finds it especially
easy and enjoyable to pick up religious girls at church activities;
they're invariably extremely gullible. The only constant is that he is
an asshole who wants to get young girls pregnant. He's even scientific
about his process - in one case seducing a pair of identical twins and
conducting a seductive experiment with them in a way that a Nazi genetic
engineer might admire.
Nonconsensual seduction and rape are not funny in the real world. But
this story is very well told and extremely enjoyable. I can't tell you
more details, because a major part of the enjoyment is watching the
story unfold. I strongly recommend this story. (Rating: 10)
"Barfly" by DYS (dramis@cts.com). "Like a little company?" "Why? You
got one to sell?" The guy is trying to pick up a beautiful woman in a
bar. Lines like that might make my heart melt, but this lady is a
veteran. But the guy is successful, and they leave together to retire
to more private quarters. To impress her, he takes her to the company
suite at an expensive hotel. For a story that begins with such a tawdry
pickup line, this is a surprisingly hot and creative story. (Rating:
10)