Celestial Reviews 57 - Jan 31, 1996
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- Celeste
"Teacher" by Deirdre (exhibitionism) 9
"Tech" by Deirdre (dirty doctors & nurses) 6
"Try" by Deirdre (anal sex) 9
"Hidden" by Deirdre (voyeurism and domination) 9
"Other" by Deirdre (voyeurism & seduction) 10
"My Friends the Allens -- French Kiss" by Mark Aster
(hot sex & voyeurism) 10
"My Friends the Allens -- Julie Bound" by Mark Aster
(torture) 5
"Fifty Dollars for Full Service" by Affable Al (stud service) 9
"Paying the Price" by Javahead (role playing) 10
"Journal Entry 136 / 0068 [ The Kittenin' ]" by Elf Sternberg
(mythology/science fiction) 10
"Teacher" by Deirdre. As I neared the midpoint of this story, I was
more than a little irritated. This was too easy. I had easily guessed
from the very start that when the sweet young narrator went to the
office of the school nurse after school for a massage, the
"ministrations" would become erotic. I was not at all surprised that a
blindfold was involved, and at mid-story it was obvious to me that
those hooks all over the place would play a role in bondage. The
problem, of course, is that Deirdre is only a mediocre storyteller when
the story contains only predictable events. But wait! The first half
was only a setup for a completely different story line. All is right
in the world. I wasn't even close in my prediction of the ending of
this story.
While reading "Teacher," I was hit by a possible story line for a great
story. In it the typical Deirdre ending would be presented as the
normal environment at the *beginning* of the story. Then normal, well-
adjusted sex would be the ending. For example, a young girl would find
a feeling of amazing sexual liberation in the fact that she visited her
grandmother and the old lady gave her cookies and milk and talked to
her about sports and schoolwork instead of blindfolding her and
caressing her clitoris while forcing the girl to lick the cleaning
lady's cunt.
At any rate, even though this story describes events that would be
extremely improbable in any school I know of outside of Clyde or
Sulphur Springs, this was a thoroughly enjoyable story. (Rating: 9)
"Tech" by Deirdre. The "tech" is a medical technician, whose friend
convinces her that they could get their kicks by having patients go a
little further than necessary with regard to nudity and other sex-
related activities. It turns out that her friend runs a bdsm service
in her basement where people drop in to have their sexual fantasies
fulfilled in a simulated medical environment. Even Deirdre nods, with
this Freudian slip: "The poor man was so embarrassed, leaning over the
table with Rose's gloved finger right in his rear. I felt for him."
Puns are usually not part of Deirdre's repertoire. This story seemed
to lack plot or coherence; it was just a series of quasi-sexual events
chained together. (Rating: 6)
"Try" by Deirdre. Try. v. (1) to attempt; (2) to put to the test (as
patience); (3) (law) to evaluate through a process of legal evidence;
(4) (naut) to lie to under just sufficient sale against the wind; n.
(5) (rugby) a play that scores three points; (6) (as in "old
college...") a sincere effort. As the preceding excerpts from my
dictionary show, there are several possible meanings for the title of
this story. Before starting the story, I'm pretty sure the nautical
definition will be irrelevant. I'll initially go with definition
number 1, as in "try to get some ass" - in a fairly literal (anal)
sense.
Oh, wow! My guess is looking good. Deirdre's disclaimer concludes
with, "This one is about a shy woman who has a secret desire for anal
sex." If you think about it, though, definition 5 might have been more
fun. After all, it takes leather balls to play rugby.
Well, I was right about the anal part, but the meaning of the title is
still ambiguous. A shy woman's friend asks her bluntly if she has ever
TRIED anal sex. The woman says no, and so it becomes the friend's
crusade to TRY to get her to TRY it with a dildo. The friend talks her
into taking a dildo home with her, into reading a magazine with letters
involving anal sex, and into visiting a video store with anal rentals.
Eventually, the friend and her boyfriend make a house call, and they
score - but I don't think the activity involved leather balls or three
points. (Rating: 9)
"Hidden" by Deirdre. It's bonus time again! In addition to the three
reviews of her reposts, we have two new Deirdre stories this week.
This one is about a young boy who hides in the closet in her parents
room to find out what kind of weird things they do when they have sex.
It turns out that Mom has assumed a dominant role over Dad as a
punishment for his ogling the fair Ellen at the party which they just
attended. Mom catches the child, punishes him creatively, and
eventually turns him over to the neighbor lady, who makes him into a
sex slave for her daughter, whom he will eventually marry.
Let me say that I found this story to be grotesque - in the best sense
of the word. The difference between this one and "Julie Bound," which
is reviewed later in this issue is that this story was grotesque but
fascinating. I have long enjoyed Deirdre's stories, even those about
people engaging in activities in which I myself would never partake.
After all, the stories were only fiction; the people in them were
generally consenting adults; and the activities were strangely
fascinating. However, every once in a while I have wondered, "Don't
these people ever have children?" In this story, the answer is yes,
and we get to see how a sexually bizarre person handles the sex
education of her adolescent son. I don't recommend this strategy, but
it did seem realistic - given the constraints of the story. (Rating:
9)
"Other" by Deirdre. Where does Deirdre get her ideas for these
stories? This one is kind of hard to summarize. The next door
neighbor wants the woman to have sex with him, but she resists, out of
a misguided feeling that fidelity to her husband is important. His
theory is that the woman must surely be suffering by not having sex
with him, and certainly her husband would not want her to suffer like
that; but the woman resists the temptation. So one day she comes home
and finds her husband tied up, blindfolded, and masturbating. The
neighbor leads her into the room, confuses the man about who is jacking
him off, and then manages to fuck the wife while the man fantasizes
about what is really happening in front of his blindfolded eyes.
There! That's not so unusual, is it? (Rating: 10)
"My Friends the Allens -- French Kiss" by Mark Aster. "L'amour, c'est
one cock, and one pussee, no?" These words express in Franglais the
moral theory of the lovely Daphne, who is the amorous target of both
the narrator of the story and his two traveling companions, Pat and
Julie (the Allens, I presume). "Oui, ca marche bien." That should
work! This is a very hot story, with the primary focus on
heterosexual activity in one hotel room while the girls go at it in the
adjacent room, which happens to be connected by a peephole. The author
shows an excellent gift for using language (especially dialogue)
effectively. (Rating: 10)
"My Friends the Allens -- Julie Bound" by Mark Aster. As the clan
gathers, we find them happily involved in torturing Julie, Pat's 19-
year-old sister. Although they burn her with an electrical implement,
they do so benignly, because they have the device set on "hurt" rather
than "scar." Likewise, when they draw blood, they apply antiseptic
cream - partly to prevent infection and partly because it feels nice to
get the feel of her body while they rub her. Julie, of course, enjoys
this whole process and is almost constantly engaged in one prolonged
orgasm. It's a wonder Pat doesn't demand the right to trade places
with her. A basic premise of this story is stated as follows: "While
at one level the subject is in ecstasy,
at another level desire becomes pain. More and more, the
body wants penetration, wants COCK, wants something big
and hot plunging deeply within. The more that is denied, the
more unbearable the outer orgasm becomes." This probably isn't true,
of course, but it's difficult to understand the story without at least
temporarily suspending belief and buying into this concept. When she
is eventually released from captivity, Julie shows her gratitude by
smothering her sister with kisses and eventually driving her to orgasm.
If you are already convinced that torture is sexually stimulating to
both victim and ogre, then I suppose this may be an arousing story. I
lack this conviction, and so I was largely confused and turned off.
The story is clearly written, I just didn't see the point to it.
(Rating: 5)
"Fifty Dollars for Full Service" by Affable Al (affableal@aol.com). A
woman takes a tip from her friend and has Dominic over to cut her
grass. In reality, the fifty dollar fee is a charge for stud service -
it's not the lawn that he's going to plow <heh! heh!>. She gets
nervous as the time for fucking gets closer, and things don't go
exactly the way she expected. My problem with this story is that it
presents a Black man dominating a White woman, perhaps perpetuating the
stereotype that Black guys are nothing but studs lusting after White
pussy. However, as I say that I have to hedge a little, because on
this newsgroup being a stud or dominating a woman are by no means
second-rate skills. And women regularly beg for sex from guys with
huge cocks, and so I guess putting a Black guy into the story is really
a step toward racial equality.
This is a good story. It's clearly written, and the emotions seem to
be realistic (although I myself would prefer a society in which White
women didn't think of Black men as intrinsically different from White
men). (Rating: 9)
"Paying the Price" by Javahead (an217242@anon.penet.fi). This story
describes an interracial relationship; but its tone is quite different
from the previous story. The man is happily married to an Oriental
woman, who goes for a month-long trip to Hong Kong. When she returns
she ad libs the role of a mail-order bride, and he plays along by
assuming the role of the Western purchaser who is going to make the
young woman comply with his every demand. The overwhelming tone of the
story is that the man and woman regard one another as equals, and their
enjoyment of the hot sex activities derives largely from their
awareness that they are acting out phoney stereotypes rather than
actually treating one or the other as inferiors. I liked this story a
lot! (Rating: 10)
"Journal Entry 136 / 0068 [ The Kittenin' ]" by Elf Sternberg
(elf@halcyon.com). My guess is that a lot of readers skipped this one,
because the title looks kind of lame. I downloaded it mostly because I
recognized the name of the author, who is a highly respected guru over
on alt.sex.wizards. I'm glad I caught this story. It's about a deity
of sorts whose daughter (also a granddaughter of sorts ) wishes to give
him the present of herself on the Felinzi equivalent of her sixteenth
birthday, at which time she will become a caiss instead of a kitten.
The sexual interactions are an excellent blend of human and imaginary
activities. This is a highly creative story. Elf apparently has more
of these, and I hope he posts them. (Rating: 10)