Celestial Reviews 132 - Nov 6, 1996
Note: A correspondent has notified me that he has posted my Celestial
Grammar and Advanced Celestial Grammar at the following web sites:
http://www.u36.com/~jordan/grammar_bas.html
http://www.u36.com/~jordan/grammar_adv.html
These are genuinely useful grammar guidelines that have actually proven
useful to college students as well as to authors on this newsgroup.
They have the advantage of employing examples that are likely to be
interesting and perhaps more memorable than those found in more
traditional grammar books.
Second Note: A reader has suggested that I review a series of stories
entitled “Johnny’s Closet.” I would like to do this; but try as I
might, I cannot find parts 6, 9, 11, and 12. If someone sends me those
parts, I’ll try to review that story as soon as possible.
- Celeste
“Inger” by Friar Dave (romance & emerging adolescence)
10, 10, 10
“Into the Woods” by With Sue (outdoor celebrity sex)
10, 10, 10
“Jinx-13” by MC Woodsmoke (mind control) 8, 5, 2
“Perfect Love” by Uther Pendragon (futuristic romance)
10, 9, 10
“One Moment in Time” by D.B. (romantic fling) 9, 10, 10
“A Leopard's Spots” by J. Boswell (fallen woman) 10, 10, 10
“Elevator Rape” by Dark Dreamer (rape in an elevator)
2, 1, 1
“Friends and Lovers” by MGR (sitcom parody) 1, 1, 1
“Tedi” by Drifter (miscellaneous orgies) 8, 7, 6
“The Inspiration” by David Cramer (visual arts & sex)
10, 10, 10
* “Date” by Deirdre (deja vu) 10, 9.5, 9.5
* "Daughter" by Deirdre (anal sex) 10, 9, 8
* "Daydream" by Deirdre (voyeurism & fantasy) 10, 8, 8
* "Deal" by Deirdre (voyeurism & anal sex) 10, 10, 10
* “Debt" by Deirdre (wild sex) 10, 10, 10
* “Denial” by Deirdre (anal sex) 10, 9.5, 9.5
* "Dip" by Deirdre (voyeurism and hot ff sex) 10, 10, 10
* "Dive" by Deirdre (voyeurism) 10, 9, 9
* “Door" by Deirdre (spanking) 10, 8, 5
* "Doctor" by Deirdre (bondage & doctors) 10, 8, 7
* "Drawer" by Deirdre (female dominance & slavery) 10, 9, 9
* Repost of a previous review (because the story has recently
been reposted).
“Inger” by Friar Dave (friar.dave@teamhbbs.com). Roger is a single
Father who is raising a 12-year-old son. He hires Inger, an
intelligent, dependable, but apparently unattractive college girl to do
the housework, to help with homework, and to generally keep an eye on
his son while he is at work. Bill discovers long before Roger does
that Inger can really be a fox when she wants to be one. Meanwhile,
Roger begins dating Bill’s English teacher.
Well, while Roger goes out with Bernice the English teacher, Inger
notices that Bill has been running off to the bathroom to masturbate;
and she asks him if it’s because he’s thinking about the English
teacher who is with his father. Bill replies with something like, “No.
I’m thinking about you, Inger. Look, I have another boner right now!”
Since they have to study algebra, she helps him relax his erection
before study time; and eventually she integrates their mutual physical
attraction into part of an incentive system to get him to study hard.
{Ooops! “Study hard” can have more than one meaning in this instance,
I guess.} And so the plot thickens.
I might add that giving a kid a hand job when he displays a hard-on
that you have caused is not a good way to eliminate or minimize future
erections. A more successful strategy would be to hit him in the groin
with a baseball bat. There, that should settle you down for a while.
As I said, Inger’s method would not have been successful had it been
her goal to minimize arousal in order to facilitate the study of
algebra, which would have been a worthy goal. However, it turns out
that she has needs too. And so she and Bill form a sort of Reciprocal
Needs Alliance. She will scratch his back if he scratches hers - only
it’s not their backs that they will be scratching.
This is a very good story. We get to see Roger develop his
relationship with Bernice and Bill develop his with Inger, who has
developed a tutoring system that manages to get the 12-year-old through
calculus in just about three months! The sex is very hot.
Pop quiz for Celeste: (1) Q. Should a man develop a sexual relationship
with his son’s English teacher? A. Sure, why not?
(2) Q. Should a responsible parent hire a sexy college student and let
her have sex with his 12-year-old son? A. No. A parent should screen
and supervise his baby-sitter more carefully than this. If you’ll
pardon the expression, Roger just got lucky. Inger would be guilty of
statutory rape in most jurisdictions. The judge would probably also be
rough on the father for dereliction of parental responsibility. Note,
however, that it’s also extremely unlikely that a 12-year-old would
within three months go from remedial algebra to advanced calculus - no
matter what reward system the tutor employed. If a tutor could
actually do this, the judge would probably give her a suspended
sentence and require her to do community service - consisting of
applying the same system to the judge’s children or possibly to the
judge himself. However, readers are advised to ignore this information
and read this story as a very good fantasy.
Ratings for “Inger”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
“Into the Woods” by With Sue (suenh@kear.tdsnet.com). Try this pickup
line the next time you encounter a really attractive blonde: “Are you
the Sue who writes erotic stories on the Internet?” If she says yes,
then you should proceed to have pleasantly ecstatic sex with her. If
she says no, then say, “Do you come here often?” or “What’s a nice girl
like you doing in a place like this?” or “Either smile or slap me if
you’d like to have sex with me.”
In the present story a guy named Dave meets the real Sue in the woods
and he tells her that her stories are by far the best on
alt.sex.stories - better than all the drivel that’s usually posted
there. Such exaggeration is understandable, since by this time Dave
was interested in getting into Sue’s pants or helping her resolve a
plot; but Sue’s stories are not really quite that good. They’re better
than 95% of what’s posted here and competitive with the very best; but
this story is based on Dave’s pickup line, and so we’ll let his
hyperbole stand.
So anyway, Dave tells Sue that “Louvre Love” is his favorite among all
her stories. This is blatantly silly! Aside from “Life’s a Beach,”
“Louvre Love” is probably Sue’s WORST story! Dave’s statement is
really an insidiously complicated pickup line. He expects Sue to
respond with something like, “Louvre Love my Lovely Ass! Let me re-
enact a scene from Craftsmanship with you!” By starting with Louvre
Love, Dave can eventually get Sue to work through all of her plots that
are better than that one, including “Slippery When Wet,” “Lab
Partners”, and “Red Hot”. Good Grief! That’s right - there’s also
“Good Grief”, “To Serve and Protect” and even “Adventureland”, to say
nothing of “Coffee Table”, “Fun with Dick and Jane”, “Film at Eleven”,
“Lucy in the Sky” or the great withSue stories like “Across the Catty
Corner” and “Weekend on the Island.”
I was right - or at least close! In the middle of the story, Dave and
Sue decide to work out the plot for a new story called “Into the
Woods,” which - surprisingly enough - is this very story that I am now
reviewing! Imagine that! Well, actually they act out the basic
details, and then I suppose Dave or Sue wrote the full story back at
the computer.
Ratings for “Into the Woods”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
“Jinx-13” by MC Woodsmoke (woodsmok@gte.net). This story is apparently
a follow-up to something I am supposed to know about. I don’t know
whether it is a television show, an arcade game, a comic book, another
story on this newsgroup, or what. Maybe if I could have figured this
out I would have enjoyed the story more. As it was, I tried very hard
to get into the story and then just gave up. The plot comes across as
some sort of inside story written by one high school sophomore for
another.
The story begins with a villain (I think) named Vance (actually
Hypknot) taking control of the mind and/or body of Moxy Spaulder (AKA
Free4all), an insipid perfect 5'6" beauty with a 35B-23-35 body that is
tight and muscular without any bulk and who talks like a really stupid,
stereotypical valley girl. They have sex, but maybe they don’t; I
could never figure out what was purely in Moxy’s mind (assuming she has
one) or what was happening in the real world around her, nor could I
ascertain anyone’s motivation for doing anything. The sexual
activities are verbally explicit but incredibly uninteresting.
As I said earlier, I tried but gave up. If an author of a 6-part story
cannot get my interest by the end of the second part, I think I have a
right to look elsewhere for my entertainment. It is possible that
readers who think more like bright 12-year-olds will enjoy this story a
lot more than I did. For my own part, if I’m going to think hard while
I read a recreational story, I expect to be rewarded, as was the case
with “Perfect Love,” which I’ll review next.
Ratings for “Jinx-13”
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 2
“Perfect Love” by Uther Pendragon (nobody@REPLAY.COM). And now for
something completely different. This is a story about love and sex in
America at the end of the 22nd century. If a similar account were
written by an anthropologist in, say, the 25th century (or if the
present story were written by a current anthropologist about similar
events and customs during the 11th century), the author would probably
start with definitions of key concepts that would enable the reader to
relate the time being studied to events and customs in the reader’s own
life. For example, in the present case, it might be useful to say that
the dangers of sexual diseases and pregnancy had been brought under
control by the end of the 22nd century, that sexual activity was
accepted by society as a natural part of growing up and that young
people were actively assisted in their sexual development by more
mature partners who played an important but temporary role in the life
of the adolescent, and that what we now call marriage had been
subdivided into a period of time referred to as pairing followed by a
more permanent relationship referred to as partnering.
There’s more to sexual life in this futuristic society than what I
described in the preceding paragraph. I have mentioned this much
simply to state that the author does not take the systematic approach
of an anthropologist, but rather uses more of a chain-of-thought
approach to introduce us to Jared, Dawn, Tai and the others in this
story. This more casual, sometimes poetic approach is designed to make
the story less technical and more enjoyable than the anthropological
approach. Unfortunately, it also makes the story somewhat confusing.
My advice would be to express the ideas more directly through action
instead of intellectual discourse and to focus on a single point more
cohesively. I would also suggest doing something about the names. The
atmosphere of the story was already strange, and on top of that I had
to deal with weird, hyphenated names. It was like dealing with a
Russian novel or the British aristocracy! I reacted by ignoring most
of the names that I considered to be unimportant, and this probably
added to the confusion that I experienced.
I hasten to add that in spite of my comments in the previous paragraph
I think this is already a very good story. However, this is an author
who revises and improves his work even after he has posted it; and my
guess is that someday this author will revise this story to make it
really excellent.
In addition to describing a futuristic society, the author describes
the love life of a young man who departs from the traditional style of
that society. He appears to be a romantic in a scientific, pragmatic,
structured civilization. What the author is asking us to do is to
imagine a world that is quite different from our own and then to
imagine a person whose lifestyle is interesting because it departs from
the strictures of that society. This is hard to do - we’re being asked
to imagine hypothetical variations about a hypothetical society to
which we have barely been introduced. Although I found the effort to be
at times frustrating, overall I found it to be interesting and
worthwhile.
There’s not much I can really say about the story itself. You have to
read it to believe it. The plot begins with the sex education of an
emerging adolescent boy at the end of the 22nd century. The society
refers to this process as maturing the libido, and it is essentially a
sort of apprenticeship during which the young man matches up with an
older woman who teaches him the necessary skills and attitudes. The
young man decides to enter a state of suspended animation in order to
let a younger woman become closer to his own age, so that their union
will be more acceptable to their culture. But as the 20th-century song
by the Stattler Brothers says, “Life gets complicated when you enter
suspended animation.” As I said, read the story and enjoy it for
yourself.
I’d like to make two final comments about this story. First, the other
story with which I most closely associate this one is “Tales of the
Seeding” by Wollstonecraft. The level of civilization in the two
stories make them almost opposites; but in both cases the reader’s
enjoyment arises from trying to figure out what in the world the
protagonists are doing as they work out their sexual feelings and from
comparing the activities and emotions of the protagonists to their own.
I encourage you to read both stories. Elf Sternberg has also written
several similar stories about sexual relationships in a futuristic
society.
Second, I find it interesting that this story can be written by the
same author who wrote the recent series of stories about Bob and
Jeanette Brennan. Those stories (all beginning with “For...”) focused
on the developing, romantic relationship of a couple who seemed so
realistic that I felt I knew them personally. The present story, on
the other hand, focuses on people who by definition cannot exist at
all. I am impressed that one person can write so effectively on both
these levels.
Ratings for “Perfect Love”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
“A Leopard's Spots” by J. Boswell. This story is presented in a format
that appears to be an interview with either a psychiatrist or a
newspaper reporter. The lovely but lithe and luscious lady had left her
dysfunctional family in Maine to become a lewd and lascivious whore in
Baltimore, where she eventually fell in love with a wholesome middle-
class man whose family rejected her. The main action of the story
takes place at the bachelor party of her husband’s brother, where we
discover that one can't change a leopard's spots. I’m sure people who
get turned on by slutty wife stories will enjoy this story for reasons
different than mine - I thought it was a well-written, poignant story.
Ratings for “A Leopard's Spots”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
“One Moment in Time” by D.B. This story was originally posted by
Michael K. Smith “for a friend” who had written it but could not post
it herself, because she is a teacher in a public school and could
therefore not engage in public impropriety. How quaint! The present
reposting is by a person named Clayton, who has reposted quite a few
really good stories recently. I have no idea whether this author has
posted any additional stories, or (if so) what name she now uses. If
anyone knows the answers to these questions, I’d like to hear the
information, since this is a potentially excellent author.
This story describes the passionate attraction that develops when a
married man falls in love with a married woman at first sight and
decides to take the chance to act on that attraction. I’ve felt these
attractions myself, and so has my husband. I’m pretty sure that in
real life acting on these attractions is more likely to lead to an
ending like that in the movie “Fatal Attraction” or at least screw up
one’s family life pretty badly; but it sure is fun to read about one of
these fantasies working out so well. This is really hot stuff!
Ratings for “One Moment in Time”
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
“Elevator Rape” by Dark Dreamer. I love stories that have “interracial”
in their title lines. They so often speak of love among my brothers
and my sisters all over this land. In his disclaimer to this story,
however, the author warns us with several exclamation points that this
is a story about a white woman being raped on an elevator by a large,
powerfully built black man, who - needless to say - has a monster cock.
If you don't like this kind of story, then the author suggests that you
not read it. I concur with the author’s advice.
A black man riding an elevator decides for no apparent reason other
than that he is an asshole to rape the white woman with whom he shares
the elevator. Oddly enough, she doesn’t enjoy the sexual pleasure he
bestows upon her, even when he throws her into the trunk of his car
afterwards. Then we come upon these words: “It would be a long night,
a night of unspeakabd began to lick him. He moaned and rubbed his cock
on her hot little tongue. The camera zoomed out a bit, and caught the
woman in the chair sliding her fingers up and down the little 5 year
olds pussy, stroking the little clit.” I have no idea where these or
the ensuing words came from. But after all, who am I to complain; the
author himself told me not to read this story, which degenerates into
completely incoherent nonsense.
Ratings for “Elevator Rape”
Athena (technical quality): 2
Venus (plot & character): 1
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 1
“Friends and Lovers” by MGR (MR1996@gnn.com). I enjoy the sitcom
entitled “Friends” and was looking forward to reading this parody. I
only mention it to warn you not to bother. Maybe there was something
wrong with the mechanism by which the author posted this story, but it
consists of completely inane drivel. If you want a parody of
“Friends,” read the one by Erin8667 that I reviewed in CR 113. It
wasn’t great; but it was a lot better than this one. Better yet, pray
that Uncle Mike’s executor finds the Lost Manuscript containing that
author’s rendition of this sitcom.
Ratings for “Friends and Lovers”
Athena (technical quality): 1
Venus (plot & character): 1
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 1
“Tedi” by Drifter (an176606@anon.penet.fi). Tedi was deeply devoted to
Tom. The first time Tom ate her, Tedi came and came and came; and
things only got better after that. They made it through college and
got married and lived happily ever after; and that’s only the end of
part 1 of 7!
Until the middle of Part 2 Tom is the only guy Tedi has fucked; but
they lay plans by fantasizing about an orgy while engaging in phone
sex. As soon as she hangs up, she heads for the apartment of Carol and
Carl, about whom they were fantasizing, and joins them in bed, where
the trio are joined by the couple’s son Case, who has just returned
from having sex with Casey. This is actually somewhat confusing. I
suspect this plot is a little easier for people who don’t mind dealing
with people with almost identical names who are sharing their spouses
and children as sexual partners at the drop of a hat. As Sharon (not
mentioned in the previous sentence) says, “Far out!” Fortunately, both
Tom and Tedi became equally suddenly and equally insatiably interested
in swinging; and so this common interest brings them together and
supplies the basis for solid matrimonial bliss.
In order for Tom to achieve a promotion, Tedi has to have sex with Don
and Bud and Bill, which is no problem, because they have great penises
and Tom can watch and enjoy it and even join in or fuck someone else
while doing so. She does it in the limo; she does it in the house; she
does it on all fours (with Thor the dog, of course); she does it with
green eggs and ham! As a reward, Tom becomes a vice-president of the
Company; and Tedi gets to have sex with even more people She even gets
to have sex with Leroy, a black gentleman who is a professional
football quarterback, who loves the opera, and who has a monster cock.
There’s more; but it’s strangely similar to what I described in the
previous paragraph. My problem with this story is that the plot is
very forced. I guess the sex is moderately sexy; but the story line
just seems to be designed to force together a whole bunch of sexual
escapades for people who think it would be great to have orgies that
hurt nobody, to swallow a monster cock from a stereotypical black stud,
or to pop a 14-year-old’s cherry. I guess my problem is that I have
read too many good stories this week to want to recommend this one very
highly.
Ratings for “Tedi”
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6
“The Inspiration” by David Cramer (david@law.uoregon.edu). This and
the previous story (“Tedi”) are similar in the respect that both of
them are written from a perspective that differs from my own. I am
neither an extreme hedonist nor a talented sculptor. The previous
story I rated somewhat negatively, because I felt that it did not allow
me as an outsider to see the thrill of what was happening in that
story; it just came across as a ritualistic listing of titillating
events chained together because the formula called for events like
those to fill that kind of story. The present story, on the other
hand, DOES enable me as an outsider to feel the thrill of artistic
creation. I think the contrast between these two stories offers a good
example of the difference between a mediocre and an excellent erotic
story.
I won’t try to describe the present story in detail, except to say that
Thomas is a sculptor who becomes almost intoxicated with the need to
sculpt a beautiful woman. He eventually makes love to her, and this
enables him to bring his artistic effort to fruition.
I enjoy art; but as I have said, I am not a visual artist. I cannot
even draw those bonus.jpg pictures that occasionally show up on this
newsgroup. However, I have a friend who is an excellent artist. She
has drawn a great picture of two lesbians making love. She is not a
lesbian herself, nor am I; but her painting makes me believe that the
emotions it displays are real. I once asked her how she did this. Did
she have to make love to another woman to express the emotions shown in
her picture? She said no, and she added that as far as she knew the
models were not lesbians either; but she said she did have to walk
around inside the heads of the people she was painting.
I mention the information in the preceding paragraph to make the point
that I don’t even buy this author’s apparent premise that it would be
important for an artist to make love to a woman in order to sculpt her
perfectly; but he conveys his story to me in such a way that I can say
to myself, “Yes! That makes sense!” This author has an insight that is
different from my own and from my friend’s; but unlike the author of
the previous story, he conveys his insight to me in such a way that I
am at least temporarily able to set aside my own perspective and accept
his. That is the mark of an excellent writer.
I don’t want to over-analyze this story, but one of the ways the author
accomplishes his goal is by being so accurate and vivid in the aspects
where his character’s thoughts and actions do overlap with my own
experiences. For example, although I am not an artist, I myself have
had the experience of being suddenly and constantly aware of a person
whose existence I had not previously noticed. This author describes a
similar experience in the first lines of the story. He seizes that and
other details and integrates them into a plot that enables me to blend
my own experience with that of a person who is not at all like me.
I really enjoyed this story. This is a talented author, and I hope we
can see more of his writing.
Ratings for “Inspiration”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
“First” by Mark Aster (MyFrThAl@aol.com). This story reports the first
sexual experience of Our Hero - at least I assume this is the same guy
who subsequently does such fine work with Pat, Julie, and their
assorted friends and relatives. The First Time came under rather
sordid circumstances with a much older woman when he was 17 years old
and they were working together on a political campaign. The second
time came about ten minutes later and was much less sordid. As I read
this well-written story, I couldn’t help thinking that Pat and Julie
Allen were good for Our Hero. Fatherhood will be good for him too.
Ratings for “First”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* “Date” by Deirdre. Breaking up is hard to do. Someone should write
a song about that theme. In this case, the girl has broken up with her
boyfriend in an awkward manner - she left him the Dear John message on
his answering machine while he was out of town. But when the guy came
back from his trip, he came to see her without listening to her
message. Now he’s in her arms, being a really wonderful guy. Deja vu!
I’ve seen this on Dick Van Dyke - only it was a script that would
offend the boss. Deja vu! I saw this on Days of Our Life last week -
only it was a letter that was written but was supposed to be destroyed
but that somebody wanted back before somebody else could read it and
destroy all hope of happiness. Deja vu! This is one of the most
common story lines in history. What will Deirdre do with it? Deja vu!
I’m not going to tell you. You’ll have to read the story and find out
for yourself.
Ratings for “Date”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9.5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
* "Daughter" by Deirdre. The daughter asks her mother if it would be
OK to have anal sex with her fiance. The mother is shocked and says
that no decent woman would do that. Does that mean that there is no
anal sex in this story? Yeah, right! How does the mother become
convinced to change her mind? Read the story and find out.
Ratings for “Daughter”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
* "Daydream" by Deirdre. A middle-aged woman watches a college guy
paint her neighbor's house. She daydreams about what it would be like
to be his little college girlfriend. There's no real sex in this
story; but the fantasy is pretty hot.
Ratings for “Daydream”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
* "Deal" by Deirdre. The disconsolate man has been forced to watch his
wife try on some clothes. The saleslady walks up to him and says
quietly, "Do you mind if I make a try for her? Please? I'll make it
worth your while." The man assures the saleslady that his wife is not
interested in sex with women, but he agrees to let her try. Will she
succeed? Of course, she will; otherwise there would be no story. And
how will the saleslady make it worthwhile for all of us?
Ratings for “Deal”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Debt" by Deirdre. I usually read one of Deirdre's stories, pause
thoughtfully, and then write my review. This time I thought I'd try
writing it while I read the story. Here goes.
The doorbell rings and the guy answers the door. One of the two women
whom he meets says, "We're here because Claire lost a bet and has to
pay up." As soon as she says that, the other girl drops to her knees in
front of the man, unzips his fly, and begins sucking his cock. This is
an example of what the old literature texts used to call in medias res
- starting the story with a plunge directly into the action. Anyway,
after the blowjob the guy listens at his door and hears the two women
going to the next apartment, which is inhabited by the fair Diane.
Further eavesdropping reveals a major gambling problem: Claire also
appears to be eating Diane out to pay a debt.
Next our hero and Diane get invited to dinner with Claire and Shannon.
Shortly after dessert is served, the other two women dive under the
table; and one starts sucking the guy's cock, while the other is
invisibly doing a job on Diane, who is seated at the opposite end of
the table. At this point it is not clear whether the problem is
compulsive gambling, an eating disorder, or simple nymphomania.
As the story reaches its denouement, we discover that the other two
women have made it their personal project (apparently as a result of an
unspecified bet) to get the guy and Diane into the sack together and to
become their servants, with the goal of enhancing the sexual happiness
of the new couple. The guy seems to like all this but can't quite
figure out what's going on - which is pretty much my own reaction to
the story. Another weird but excellent tale from Deirdre!
Ratings for “Debt”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* “Denial” by Deirdre. Two high school boys are out back showing their
hardware to each other. A passerby - a girl whom they like - sees
them. The embarrassed boys run inside the house. No big deal; she
won’t deal anybody. Knock, knock! It’s the girl. No big deal, she
says; but she’d like to see how gay guys do it! But they’re not gay
guys, and they tell her so. She doesn’t believe them; after all, she
saw them. If they’ll just show her how gay guys do it, she won’t tell
anybody; but if they stick with this crap about not being gay, she’ll
tell the whole world. If this was ever on Dick Van Dyke, I missed the
episode. Somebody should write a song about this.
I learned a long time ago how to deal with blackmail. Simply call the
blackmailer’s bluff. Either that or kill the blackmailer and chop the
body up into small pieces.
Anyway, the guys do it for the girl; and then the story starts taking
surprising twists.
Ratings for “Denial”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9.5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
* "Dip" by Deirdre. Deirdre has the ability to catch my interest at the
very beginning of a story and to hold my attention right up to the
abrupt ending. This story exemplifies that magical power. A woman
finds herself physically attracted to her sister-in-law and goes
shopping with her. Soon she finds herself swimming in the nude with
her and then in a stranger's apartment making love to the sister-in-law
and the other woman.
Ratings for “Dip”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Dive" by Deirdre. The author dedicates this story to all women who
have been asked by their men if they would do it with another woman. In
brief, two couples are fooling around by a swimming pool and start
taking pictures of various pairs in positions of feigned intimacy.
Emotions get hot, and the couples retire to private spots for sex.
Even though the actual sex is not very explicit, the anticipation is
quite hot.
Ratings for “Dive”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
* "Door" by Deirdre. This story is stylistically well written, but I
didn't enjoy it. I'm not into the spanking scene; but I'm usually not
interested in actually doing what happens in *most* of Deirdre's
stories. Nonetheless I usually do find the stories interesting. She
has the ability to make even very weird things sound interesting. But
this one missed the mark with me. It's about a girl who goes out with
a friend, who gets spanked for her birthday; then they masturbate.
That's it. Maybe spanking enthusiasts will enjoy it more than I did.
Ratings for “Door”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5
* "Doctor" by Deirdre. If you've always suspected that doctors and
nurses were really sex perverts, this story will confirm your
suspicions. The woman in this story is bound and manipulated in
various ways to satisfy her own lust and that of the medical personnel
whom she encounters. This is another one of Deirdre's "Twilight Zone"
stories.
Ratings for “Doctor”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7
* "Drawer" by Deirdre. People who are into domination and submission
with the woman doing the dominating will enjoy this story. From what
I've learned in recent months, this story seems to be a short version
of how to whip the guys into line. Although in my real life I enjoy
reciprocally flirting with and seducing my husband on a regular basis,
a story like this has a certain earie appeal. Why not just keep the
guys around sixty-nining one another until we women need someone to
pamper us - and then we just pull one off the rack or head over to the
sanctuary to pick up some sex. Maybe it would be even easier to have
someone else control the men for us. Yeah, that's it! Maybe we can
find a sport and a beverage, and the guys could sit around on couches
or stools and just stare mindlessly at the sport on television while
they guzzle the beverage; and whenever we need them to service us, we
could snap our fingers or turn off the TV and they'd come running.
Ratings for “Drawer”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9