Celestial Reviews 123 - October 5, 1996
Note: A reader recently wrote to ask me if I ever heard of a story
called “First Love,” with characters named Matt, Jen, and Ryan.
Somebody sent me the story, and it really DOES look good. However, I
don’t know the name of the author. Can someone please send me the name
of this author, so that I can give proper credit when I review it?
- Celeste
“Trances" by Michael K. Smith (mind control & romance)
10, 10, 10
“Extra Effort” by RC (ff mind control) 9.5, 10, 10
“Hotel” by Mark (bdsm) 10, 10, 10
“Impossible Dream” by ButtBytr (wet dream) 8, 5, 3
“Her Third Confession” by Jul 4 1944 (depressing sex)
6, 1, 1
“Trinity Trilogy Novel 13/14” by Tom Trinity
(miscellaneous orgies) 10, 10, 10
“Modern Exchange” by Fin Haddie (sex with exchange
studs) 9, 7, 7
“Trances” by Michael K. Smith (mksmith@metronet.com). When he was a
freshman in college, the narrator learned from his friend Edward how to
hypnotize people. As his first conquest, he hypnotized Edward’s kid
sister Sharon - making her believe that the licorice her gave her was
chocolate candy. When he eventually turned to more prurient
possibilities, he hypnotized a schoolmate named Kathy not to give him a
blowjob, but rather to fall in love with him and to do everything
possible to make him reciprocate. After many good times together, he
realized he had laid the foundation poorly and he released Kathy to
have a happy life of her own.
And so it goes with other “experiments.” The narrator is a sort of
benign dictator with Power to control other people, but he generally
uses this in only the most constructive ways. With girls and women
this usually means freeing them from their inhibitions and enabling
them to do (with him) those things that they would secretly like to do
anyway. The story has two major components: (1) the flashbacks induced
by hypnosis, during which his clients describe in very sexy terms their
own previous sexual experiences, and (2) the narrator’s current sexual
activities with these partners. The author skillfully joins these
complementary components into an interesting plot.
I found this story to be an excellent blend of mind control and
romance. Mind control stories in which the main characters simply make
other people do dirty things for them have always seemed a bit
uncreative to me. In this story, however, the mind control, though
still an essential part of the story, is more subtle. The narrator’s
sexual partners act freely, even though they are under his control.
Of course, as I have said before, I personally consider mind control
stories to be essentially balderdash. {That’s strange; I’ve never used
that word before.} The notion that people can go into a college
library and learn how to control the minds of other people is bunk. If
mind control really worked, surely someone would figure out a way to do
it through cyberspace. If this were possible, then an incredibly sexy
man could have his way with, say, an equally sexy English teacher and
then top it off by having her spend a major part of her life writing
extensive reviews of stories for a Usenet newsgroup and get
consistently high reviews for his own stories. Such an idea is clearly
impossible.
Ratings for “Trances”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
“Extra Effort” by RC (74734.271@CompuServe.COM). As soon as Linda saw
her, she knew she wanted her. There were only two problems. She was her
professor in her advanced psych class, and Linda was about half her
age. Oh - and since the prof was not known to be a lesbian, she might
have a hard time accepting Linda’s advances. These obstacles, it turns
out, are not insurmountable. As is commonly the case, the student
simply looks into the teacher’s eyes, says the magic words, and poof!
She’s in a trance and easily becomes a sex slave.
Then we shift focus to the prof’s point of view. Ms. Richards knew she
had somehow allowed herself to fall under the spell of one of her
students. She had never really thought about other women in a sexual
context, much less one of her own students, and now here is a young
woman who has the power to make her do her bidding. But what the hell;
if it feels good, do it!
Everything works so well that readers might wonder why more people
don’t just read a book on hypnotism and get all the sex they want.
Maybe it’s because there’s a pervert out there who is hypnotizing
people to resist hypnotism. Or aliens. It could be aliens. Maybe
really sexy aliens are hard to hypnotize, and there are more of them
around us than we think. Or maybe it could be English teachers.
Perhaps once people have been subjected to the incredibly hypnotic
power of a really boring English teacher they become impervious to
other forms of mind control.
This is a very good story. Of the two mind control stories that I have
reviewed back-to-back, I personally liked “Trances” better. It’s hard
to put a finger on the exact difference; maybe it’s just that Smith has
a natural knack for really excellent writing. Then again, I think
maybe the difference is that Smith managed to integrate mind control
into a really interesting romantic plot and thereby made it less
difficult for me to suspend my disbelief. Anyway, as I said, this is a
good story; and I suggest you take a look at it.
Ratings for “Extra Effort”
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
“Hotel” by Mark (MarkB@aboy.demon.co.uk). Tragically, this is the last
of the Alphabet Stories currently available from this author. He says
he’s open to suggestion for new titles. I recommend “Isometrics” and
“Jugular” for his next two titles.
In “Hotel” the Narrator is an Englishman working in a university town
in the Black Forest region of Southern Germany. He strikes up a
friendship with the workers at the hotel and develops a particular
fondness for the lady who manages the establishment and for one of the
beautiful young maids. The manager, it turns out, is seriously
interested in bdsm; and since she is naughty, she must be dealt with.
The maid simply craves his body. Things could easily get out of hand!
And they do.
Ratings for “Hotel”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
“Impossible Dream” by ButtBytr (buttbytr@ix.netcom.com). Finally!
Something about which I can agree with Jerry Falwell. The protagonist
of this story smokes in bed. That’s a bad idea. People should not
smoke in bed. Actually, I think Walt just DREAMS that he smokes in
bed. Maybe he’s OK after all.
This is a story about Walt, who has lusted after Vonne through
cyberspace. He has dreamed about her for a long time, but now he holds
her in his arms after a night of passionate lovemaking. But no; it’s
only a dream. Sadly, Walt wakes up to discover that he has just been
having a wet dream.
This author has a trademark: whenever he wants to express an
antithesis, he introduces the second alternative with “butt” instead of
“but.” This story has potential, butt it really drags in its present
form.
Ratings for “Impossible Dream”
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 3
“Her Third Confession” by Jul 4 1944 (jul41944@aol.com). This is a
story about a man and woman who might throw chairs at each other on the
Gerry Springer show. He’s a stupid shit, and she’s a nasty bitch, and
they don’t really get along, but they stay together because they
deserve each other. At first I thought this story would be a little
depressing, butt that was an understatement.
As I understand it, the reason the guy has stayed with the wife is
because he realizes she could be running around on him like a cheap
tramp. The thought gives him a shiver that is “a strange combination of
terror and jealousy and exhilaration.” As their ironic love has
deepened over the years, she has felt free to reveal more and more
about the details of her sex life with the men that bring sordid
comfort to her in his absence.
Good grief! This dismal story doesn’t even have hot sex to redeem it.
I suspect that this story was posted here by a nun who taught me
religion in my junior year of high school, and whose goal was to make
sex sound so bad that nobody would ever want to engage in it. She’s
one of the main reasons my children have gone to public rather than
parochial schools.
Ratings for “Her Third Confession”
Athena (technical quality): 6
Venus (plot & character): 1
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 1
“Trinity Trilogy Novel 13/14” by Tom Trinity (stbush@iglou.com). After
the last story I needed a pick-me-upper; and so I plunged right into
this week’s installment of the Trinity Trilogy Novel. One of the most
frequent comments I hear about these stories is that they are “happy”
or “morally uplifting” - or “immorally uplifting,” as one correspondent
put it. I agree with that assessment; and I think it’s important.
Many of the stories on this newsgroup are depressing. Well-written
stories about generally dismal or destructive topics have their place
in literature and on this newsgroup. They often reflect reality, and
the worldview that “life is a big ashtray and we’re all butts in the
bottom of it” may even be valid. But it’s nice to have a source of
stories that are optimistic about life and about sexual activities.
The people in this series have fun, and nobody gets hurt by their
sexual adventures.
I think I offended the editor of these stories a few issues ago by
stating that these characters were fictional. He steadfastly maintains
that they are real people. Presumably, this is an edited version of
their common sexual history. OK! Whatever he says! Just don’t stop
reposting the stories. From my own perspective, however, it’s not so
important that there are people somewhere in the world who actually did
all these things as that the author presents the stories in a manner
that holds my attention and seems to be authentic. Too often the
writers who claim - probably honestly - to be telling us “true stories”
get bogged down in details that detract from the story. The result is
a “true” story that doesn’t ring true - that misses its point. This
author skillfully avoids that pitfall.
As we near the end of our odyssey with the Trinity Gang, sex life
continues pretty much as usual - except that reality intrudes as they
grow older. Val’s husband of 30 years dies, Jennifer reaches the age
of thirteen, and Janie accepts a promotion that means a new job in
another city. Through it all they relax and enjoy life.
A part of this segment that I especially enjoyed was the “Venus
Butterfly” dream sequence. As an isolated short story, this chapter
would not have worked. But as a dream sequence that is part of a
bigger picture, it works very well.
Ratings for “Trinity Trilogy Novel 13/14”
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
“Modern Exchange” by Fin Haddie (sgoodman@primenet.com). The woman is
married to a guy who no longer cares about sex. Fortunately, they take
in exchange students who are real studs, and so her unmet needs are
gloriously met by these studious but kindly Latin lovers.
This author asked me in a personal note whether his stories rang true
for women. For me, “The Plumber” (reviewed last issue) did, but this
one didn’t. I felt that I could identify with the plumbing lady; but
this woman sounds struck me as the kind of woman horny stud wannabes
wish for, rather than a real person. Within that constraint, it’s
still pretty hot stuff.
Ratings for “Modern Exchange”
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7