SUMMARY: Rachel teases Lisa, over the phone.

COMMENTARY: This isn't a long story. I don't want to say too much about it for fear that I will ruin it for you. On the other hand, I should warn you that there are some parts of it that may make some of you feel a bit icky. I hope you haven't stopped reading yet, because I think I should elaborate on that last comment. It isn't entirely clear in this story exactly what is going on. Rachel tells Lisa a story, but there is no third party narration to confirm that what she describes is actually happening. Are you confused yet? Do you want to read the story now? What! I haven't even told you whether I enjoyed it or not!

I found this story to be arousing. In part, because of the author's ability to write dialogue, and this is a story that consists almost entirely of dialogue. The characters sprang out at me. I could hear them speaking. In part, because of the twists and turns that the conversation takes. I wasn't sure if what I was reading was actually happening, and being unsure made me that much more aroused. This must all be very confusing, given that I have chosen not to reveal where it is that Rachel and Lisa's conversation ends up. While I could see that Rachel was manipulating Lisa, by telling her this fantastic story, I couldn't determine it was an enhancement of an actual event or a complete fabrication. Not knowing made the story that much better, for me.

The bottom line is that I recommend you read this story. At the same time, I hope you will keep in mind that I have warned you.

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good

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