SUMMARY: The main character is a young man, a college dropout in his early twenties. He has been making his living seducing older women, since he left school. His life takes a rather dramatic turn the night that he meets Sylvia.

COMMENTARY: This story is divided into two parts, more or less. In the first half the main character finds himself dominated by Sylvia and her assistants. In the second half the transgender transformation occurs.

I found the first half to be quite arousing. The pacing was great. The main character is used to stringing women along, but he finds himself to be the one who is getting strung along. He isn't quite able to accept this fact and yet he goes along with it. I found this to be very realistic.

I didn't enjoy the second half quite as much as I did the first. In particular, I have a problem understanding why the main character allows himself to be transformed. Up to that point in the story he seems to allow things to happen to him without really understanding why. At that point he has to make a decision; continue with a process that has already begun or return to his old life. He chooses the former. His mental state isn't entirely apparent. One possible explanation could be that he says "yes" because that's what the author wants him to do. He is drugged at the time, maybe that's why he says "yes," but that does not explain his acceptance of his new life. Maybe I am just missing something. Maybe, my problem is that I have a hard time understanding why a man would want to be a woman. It isn't a fantasy of mine. Maybe if I did fantasize about being transformed into a woman then I would understand why he accepts Sylvia's offer.

Anyhow, this is a very well written story, but if you tend to prefer romantic, vanilla stories then I recommend that you steer clear of this one. If, on the other hand, you do enjoy transgender fiction or happen to have a strong stomach then I recommend you give it try.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 8.5 (out of 10)

• Arousal: 4/5
• Editing: 5/5
• Plot and Characters: 4/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent

LINK(S):

• Mercedes - Part 1 of 1
• Author's Web Site - Naughty Words