SUMMARY: A police helicopter pilot helps his partner Denise, who happens to be a lesbian, hook up with Destiny, a pretty young nurse.

COMMENTARY: I like the way this begins. The author takes the time to make the world that the story takes place in seem real; and does so quite nicely. I was not as impressed with the rest of the story. One of the characters, Destiny, seems more of a body than an actual woman. She seems more like a go-between for the narrator and Denise, so that they can share the one thing that they never have shared with one another. I got that impression more from reading into the story than I did from just accepting what the narrator told me. I say this because the story left me a bit flat at the end and wondering what the hell it was supposed to be about in the first place; so I reread it a couple times and that's what I came up with.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.5 (out of 10)

• Arousal: 3/5
• Editing: 5/5
• Plot and Characters: 4/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Good

LINK(S):

• Destiny - Part 1 (of 1)