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Title |
At Home Dares |
Author |
Maria Gonzales |
Story Code(s) |
F/M, F/F |
Story Theme(s) |
Teenagers Exhibitionism Voyeurism Blackmail |
Length |
24,900 words |
Arousal |
4 out of 5 |
Plot and Characters |
3 out of 5 |
Editing |
5 out of 5 |
Objective Analysis |
8.0 out of 10 |
Subjective Analysis |
Excellent |
Summary |
Lisa gets blackmailed by Adam, her classmate and neighbor. First he makes her pose for nude pictures and then he expects her to be his girlfriend. |
Commentary |
This story is very arousing. At times Lisa seems to be in
control of Adam, and at others he seems to be the one calling the
shots. That, coupled with the exhibitionist and voyeur elements
are what made the story enjoyable and arousing, for the most
part. This story is well enough written, but I had some problems with it. I wasn't terribly impressed with the plot. It was too quickly paced. Everything flowed too smoothly. Through the first four chapters, the character development was realistic enough, but in the last two chapters the momentum of the story got turned around. It seemed like the author changed her mind about how she wanted the story to end. The ending was too facile. I enjoyed this story quite a bit. In its favor it is very arousing and well enough written. Strikes against it are a perceived lack of consistency in the transition from the first four chapters to the last two, and the fact that the plot flows too quickly. I was a bit disturbed by the blackmail scenario, but I enjoyed this story enough that I am willing to ignore the problems I had with the story and give it an Excellent. |
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