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Title |
Donna's Summer Golfing Vacation |
Author |
Heatheranne |
Story Code(s) |
F/M, Teen |
Length |
9,000 words |
Arousal |
3 out of 5 |
Story |
4 out of 5 |
Objective Analysis |
7 out of 10 |
Subjective Analysis |
Good |
Summary |
Donna breaks up with her boyfriend, goes to work with her distant cousin, and gets some golf lessons. In the process of doing all this, she also help her cousin get off when his wife isn't very obliging, and teaches her golf instructor a thing or two about how to please her sexually. |
Commentary |
This story is somewhat arousing. The sex
happens, but it seems a bit gratuitous. In
other words it does not seem to be tied all
that strongly to the plot. The story could
stand on its own without the sex. The story is well written. The characters aren't too deep and the plot isn't very complex, but the story does have a nice flow to it. At times it almost seems to flow too smoothly. I think I would have preferred to see Donna having a harder time overcoming some of the obstacles that are thrown in her path. I was somewhat aroused by this story, but for the most part this story was just a bit too soft for me. After the scene where she helps her cousin out, which is relatively early in the story, Donna does not seem to be challenged at all. That is why I have given this story a Good, under Subjective Analysis. |
ASSM Link(s) |
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